Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with small grammar and phrasing errors and avoid unnecessary capitalization. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting details linked smoothly. For example, say the height as 'about 30 storeys' and combine details with a linking phrase ('It also has...').

Example: Yes. A new building called Supertech Nova was recently constructed near my home; it is the tallest in the area, about 30 storeys high, and it also has a swimming pool, a gym and a recreational area on the top floor.

Suggestion: Good concise answer and natural language. Improve coherence slightly by using a linking phrase to contrast your view with taking photos. Keep it brief and avoid repetition ('rather' and 'rather than').

Example: Not really. I'm not into photography; instead, I prefer enjoying the view and often find myself counting the floors or admiring the architectural details rather than taking pictures.

Suggestion: Fix minor grammar and improve sentence linking. Use possessive and punctuation correctly ('its modern design' not 'it's'), and connect reasons with a linking word like 'because' or 'and' to sound more natural. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Supertech Nova because its modern design and impressive façade are very attractive. If I had the chance, I would take my children there to show them the striking architecture and the spacious public areas.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words ('uh') and finish your sentences clearly. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons linked with 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid leaving sentences incomplete. Mention safety concerns succinctly.

Example: No, I would not want to live in a tall building. I am afraid of heights, and because I have young children there is a safety risk—for example, they might play on the balcony when I am at work, which worries me.

× Yes, there is a recently constructed building near my home called Supertech Nova.

✓ Yes, there is a recently constructed building near my home called Supertech Nova.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It uses 'a' correctly before 'recently constructed building' and 'there is' correctly for existence.

× It is the tallest in my area, about 30 Storey high, and the top floor has a swimming pool, a gym and a recreational area.

✓ It is the tallest in my area, about 30 storeys high, and the top floor has a swimming pool, a gym and a recreational area.

'Storey' is a count noun and should be plural for more than one level ('storeys' or 'stories'). Also lowercase is standard in running text. Use plural for quantity agreement.

× Not really. I am not into photography at all.

✓ Not really. I am not into photography at all.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses present simple with 'am not' to express current preference.

× Rather I enjoy the view of the building and I often find myself counting the floors or admiring architectural details rather than taking pictures.

✓ Rather, I enjoy the view of the building, and I often find myself counting the floors or admiring architectural details rather than taking pictures.

Add a comma after 'Rather' for natural pause and a comma before 'and' to separate two independent clauses. This improves clarity and sentence flow; structure is otherwise correct.

× Yes, I would love to visit Supertech Nova.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit Supertech Nova.

No correction needed; pronoun use is appropriate.

× I find it's modern design, an impressive facade very attractive and if I had the chance I would take my children there to show them the striking architecture and spacious public areas.

✓ I find its modern design and impressive facade very attractive, and if I had the chance I would take my children there to show them the striking architecture and spacious public areas.

Use 'its' (possessive pronoun) instead of contraction 'it's' (it is) to indicate possession. Also join 'modern design and impressive facade' with 'and' to make a parallel noun phrase and add a comma before 'and if' to separate clauses.

× Honestly not, I do not want to stay in a tall building because uh, I am scared of heights and also I have uh, young children with me, so there is obviously a risk when I stay in a taller building And uh, at times when I'm at work, they can probably try to play in the balcony, which would not.

✓ Honestly, no. I do not want to stay in a tall building because I am scared of heights and I have young children, so there is obviously a risk when I stay in a taller building. Also, when I'm at work they might try to play on the balcony, which would be dangerous.

Multiple issues: use 'no' rather than 'not' in short answers for natural English. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'with me'. Capitalization error before 'And' fixed. 'Can probably try to play in the balcony' is ungrammatical: 'might try to play on the balcony' is correct (use 'on' not 'in' for balcony and modal 'might' expresses possibility). The clause 'which would not' is incomplete; replace with 'which would be dangerous' to complete the idea. These changes correct pronoun and preposition usage and complete sentence structure.