Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No and why), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid confusing words or repetitions and keep sentences short (max 4–5). Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to show relation.

Example: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. Instead, the neighborhood has many fields and trees, and people grow vegetables and keep animals. However, tall buildings are common in the nearby city about an hour away.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct verb forms and limit to a few coherent sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings because I find interesting architecture memorable. For example, I photographed the Burj Khalifa when I visited Dubai because its height and design were impressive. I usually take pictures to remember places I liked.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence saying which building and why, then add one or two specific reasons or details. Avoid vague adjectives and hesitations. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' and keep sentences concise.

Example: I would like to visit the NASA facility because it is a center for space research and new technology. For example, I want to see spacecraft and talk to scientists to learn how missions are planned. Visiting would help me understand advances in space exploration.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer (No) and give one or two coherent reasons. Avoid repetition and emotional noise; use precise phrases like 'I suffer from a fear of heights' and describe effects briefly. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I suffer from a fear of heights. When I am high above the ground I feel dizzy and uncomfortable, so I prefer living on lower floors where I feel safe.

× When I live near a ruler in which there are a lot of fields and greenery rather than tall buildings as tall buildings are mainly located in big cities and metropolitan metropolitan areas.

✓ I live in a rural area where there are a lot of fields and greenery rather than tall buildings, since tall buildings are mainly located in big cities and metropolitan areas.

The original sentence uses 'When I live' which incorrectly uses a temporal clause; the speaker is describing a habitual/state fact so the simple present 'I live' is correct (Present tense issue). Also 'ruler' is a wrong word; 'rural' is intended (lexical error but corrected in sentence). Use 'where' to introduce the relative clause describing the area. Remove repeated word 'metropolitan' and add a clarifying conjunction 'since' to show reason. Suggestion: Use simple present for general facts and 'where' for place descriptions.

× Meanwhile in rural cities there are a lot of fields for grazing of animal and other useful works like growing vegetables and doing productive things.

✓ Meanwhile, in rural areas there are many fields for grazing animals and for other activities such as growing vegetables and other productive work.

The phrase 'rural cities' is contradictory; 'rural areas' is appropriate. 'A lot of' is informal; 'many' fits countable 'fields' (adjective choice). 'Grazing of animal' is incorrect word order and number; correct is 'grazing animals' or 'grazing of animals' (adjective/pronoun use). 'Useful works' is unnatural; 'activities' or 'work' is better. Use parallel structure 'for grazing animals and for other activities' to improve clarity.

× Well, it depends on the structure of the building as it may fascinates me and I will choose to take picture as a memorable thing the most of the bill as I remember I take the picture of Burj Khalifa Khalifa when I visited Dubai.

✓ Well, it depends on the structure of the building because it may fascinate me and I would choose to take a picture as a memento; for example, I remember taking a picture of the Burj Khalifa when I visited Dubai.

'May fascinates' mixes modal + wrong verb form; after modal 'may' use base verb 'fascinate' (verb form issue). 'I will choose' should be 'I would choose' to indicate conditional/hypothetical choice (tense/modal issue). 'Take picture' needs article 'a picture'. 'Most of the bill' is unclear and likely incorrect; removed and replaced with 'as a memento'. 'I take the picture' describing a past event should be 'I took' or 'I remember taking' (Present/past tense issue). Also removed duplicate 'Khalifa' and improved punctuation.

× As it is it fascinates me to what?

✓ It fascinates me because of its design.

The original is fragmentary and ends with an unclear 'to what?' The structure 'it fascinates me' is okay but needs an object or reason; using 'because of its design' provides a clear explanation. Also avoid redundant phrases like 'As it is it'. Use a complete sentence with subject, verb, and complement.

× Well, I love to visit NASA building as it has a lot of knowledge about the upcoming technology because it is the hub of technology and most of the things done as there is most unpredictable and is very fascinated and I found it very fascinating as it is a plethora of uh.

✓ Well, I would love to visit the NASA building because it has a lot of knowledge about emerging technologies; it is a hub of technology and I find it fascinating.

'Visit NASA building' needs the definite article 'the' (article error). 'Have a lot of knowledge about the upcoming technology' is awkward; 'emerging technologies' is more natural. Remove redundancies ('most of the things done as there is most unpredictable' is ungrammatical) and filler words. Use 'I would love' for polite hypothetical desire (modal/tense). Simplify and use clear adjectives ('fascinating').

× Unfortunately not because I have a phobia of height as I don't like to visit tall buildings because after watching that far near the road I found is I I would like to do vomiting because I did not feel safe and I don't recommend it to myself.

✓ Unfortunately not, because I have a fear of heights and I don't like visiting tall buildings; when I look down at the road from high up I feel like vomiting and I don't feel safe, so I would not recommend it for myself.

Use 'I have a fear of heights' instead of 'phobia of height' (natural phrasing). 'I don't like to visit' -> 'I don't like visiting' (verb form). The clause 'after watching that far near the road I found is I I would like to do vomiting' is ungrammatical; correct to 'when I look down at the road from high up I feel like vomiting' (correct tense, word order, and collocation). 'I did not feel safe' changed to present 'I don't feel safe' to express general reaction. Overall, use simple present for habitual feelings and proper collocations ('feel like vomiting').