Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more concise, correct small grammatical mistakes, and add clearer linking between ideas. Start with a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific details. Avoid redundancy (e.g. 'quite common' and 'especially in the city' convey similar meaning).

Example: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, my building has six floors, and nearby blocks reach up to twenty storeys, which makes the area quite crowded.

Suggestion: Clarify unclear phrases, fix grammar, and use linking words to make the reason and example coherent. Be specific about what ‘record’ means and avoid unclear expressions like 'helps in our wind'. Keep to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings, particularly old ones, because I want to preserve their appearance. For instance, when I visit the countryside I take pictures of old houses to remember their architecture and to reflect on how people used to live.

Suggestion: Give a direct short answer, then briefly explain with reason and a future possibility. Use smoother linking words and correct tense errors ('have a visit' -> 'visit').

Example: Not at the moment, because I am very busy with a major project. However, in the future if I have free time I would like to visit interesting and beautiful buildings in different cities.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, concise reasons with specific details, and correct incomplete sentence at the end. Use linking word 'because' and finish thoughts fully.

Example: No, I would not. I prefer a small house with a large yard so my dog can run and I can grow vegetables such as tomatoes and potatoes. Currently I live in a tall building because I cannot afford to buy a house.

× I live in a one of the tall buildings, it has 6 floors but I know some buildings even have 20 floors.

✓ I live in one of the tall buildings; it has six floors, but I know some buildings even have twenty floors.

The phrase 'a one of the tall buildings' incorrectly mixes an article with 'one of'. Use 'one of the tall buildings' without 'a'. Also the original is a comma splice combining two independent clauses with a comma; use a semicolon or split into two sentences. Numbers under ten are typically written as words in formal writing (six, twenty) and commas for clarity help. Suggestion: remove the extra 'a' and join clauses correctly.

× For instance, I often go to the countryside and find some old houses, taking photos of them, which helps in our wind and think about the lives in the past.

✓ For instance, I often go to the countryside and find some old houses and take photos of them; this helps me unwind and think about past lives.

The original used 'taking photos' incorrectly attached and the phrase 'helps in our wind' is wrong. Use parallel verbs ('find' and 'take') rather than mixing infinitive/gerund forms awkwardly. The intended phrase is 'helps me unwind' (not 'in our wind') and 'think about the lives in the past' should be 'think about past lives' or 'think about life in the past'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and use correct idiomatic expressions.

× No, I don't think so, because recently I'm extremely busy with some big project.

✓ No, I don't think so, because recently I've been extremely busy with a big project.

The original mixes simple present with 'recently' which typically uses present perfect continuous to indicate an action affecting the present. Use 'I've been extremely busy' or 'I am extremely busy' consistently. Also 'some big project' is awkward; 'a big project' is preferable. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous for ongoing recent actions.

× I don't have the time to have a visit, but in the future if I have free time, I like to go somewhere to find some interesting and beautiful buildings.

✓ I don't have time to visit, but in the future if I have free time, I'd like to go somewhere to find interesting and beautiful buildings.

'I don't have the time to have a visit' is awkward; use 'have time to visit'. The second clause needs a conditional modal: 'I would like' (I'd like) to express a future preference rather than simple present 'I like'. Suggestion: use 'I'd like' for hypothetical future desires and simplify 'have time to visit'.

× No I don't. I prefer small houses with a big yard so my dog can run around with enough space and I can grow some vegetables like potatoes, tomatoes or something else. But now I live in a tall building because I don't have enough money to buy the.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer small houses with a big yard so my dog can run around with enough space and I can grow some vegetables like potatoes or tomatoes. But now I live in a tall building because I don't have enough money to buy one.

The final clause is missing the object after 'buy the.' It should be 'buy one' or 'buy a house'. Also add a comma after 'No'. 'Like potatoes, tomatoes or something else' is redundant; 'like potatoes or tomatoes' is clearer. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the appropriate noun ('one' or 'a house') and simplify the list.