Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use singular/plural correctly, and give one or two specific examples with a linking phrase. Avoid repetition of "wide and large."

Example: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including a large hospital and a multi-storey shopping centre. For example, the hospital has many specialised departments and the shopping centre has several floors of shops and restaurants, which makes the area very convenient.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer (yes/no), correct tense and grammar, and explain why with a specific reason and example. Use a linking word like "because" or "for example."

Example: Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings because I like their architecture. For example, I often photograph the city library due to its interesting glass facade and unusual roof, which look great in pictures.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Name the building, give a reason and a specific detail about it, using linking words to connect ideas. Fix grammar ("the Taj Mahal," "I would definitely visit").

Example: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal because it is an iconic monument known for its beautiful marble architecture. For instance, I want to see the intricate carvings and the reflecting pools that make the site so famous.

Suggestion: Give a clear reasoned answer and avoid repetition and filler words. State whether you want to live there, then provide one or two specific reasons (e.g. view, facilities) with linking words like "because" or "so."

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views and modern facilities. For example, a high-rise apartment near my town has a gym and rooftop garden, which would make living there comfortable and convenient.

× There are many tall buildings near my hometown such as school, hospitals and shopping center.

✓ There are many tall buildings near my hometown, such as schools, hospitals, and shopping centers.

The nouns 'school', 'hospitals', and 'shopping center' need consistent plural forms when introduced by 'many' and 'such as'. Use 'schools' and 'shopping centers' to match the plural quantifier; also add commas for clarity.

× There are very wide and large in size, so there are many facilities available in my hometown.

✓ They are very wide and large in size, so there are many facilities available in my hometown.

The subject 'There' is incorrect here. Use the pronoun 'They' to refer back to 'tall buildings'. Also this is present tense descriptive verb 'are', which is correct; the change fixes a reference error.

× Sometime I take photo of large buildings because there are very wide and large.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of large buildings because they are very wide and large.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) and the plural 'photos' to match 'large buildings'. Replace 'there' with 'they' to refer to the buildings. Maintain present simple tense for habitual action.

× As well as useful for people.

✓ They are also useful for people.

The fragment 'As well as useful for people' is incomplete and uses 'as well as' incorrectly. Provide a full sentence with subject 'They' and verb 'are' and use 'also' to express addition.

× There are many buildings where I would like to visit, uh, but one of the most famous building of Taj Mahal, uh, which is very eminent in my country.

✓ There are many buildings I would like to visit, but one of the most famous is the Taj Mahal, which is very famous in my country.

Remove unnecessary 'where' after 'buildings I would like to visit'. Use 'one of the most famous is the Taj Mahal' to complete the clause; 'building of Taj Mahal' is incorrect — the proper noun 'Taj Mahal' stands alone. Replace 'eminent' with 'famous' for natural phrasing.

× So I, if I get a chance. So definitely I visit that building.

✓ So if I get a chance, I will definitely visit that building.

This sentence is fragmented and lacks correct future tense expression. Use 'I will definitely visit' to express future intention and combine clauses into one coherent sentence.

× Definitely, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Definitely, I want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense expressing preference; no change needed.

× There are many tall buildings near my hometown, so they are very, uh, wide and large.

✓ There are many tall buildings near my hometown, and they are very wide and large.

Replace the second 'so' with 'and' for a more logical connection: the existence of many buildings does not cause them to be wide. Keep present tense; remove filler 'uh'.

× So if I get a chance to live in the in a tall building, so I definitely choose.

✓ So if I get a chance to live in a tall building, I will definitely choose to do so.

Remove duplicate 'in the in a'. Use future 'will' to indicate a decision about a possible future action and complete the verb phrase 'choose to do so'. Avoid using 'so' twice.