Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변 구조는 양호하지만 몇 가지 개선점이 있습니다. 먼저 문법 오류(복수형·관사 사용)와 어휘 정확성을 고쳐야 합니다. 예를 들어 "shops, restaurant"는 "shops, restaurants"로 수정하고, "They make daily life very convenient" 대신 더 자연스러운 표현("They make daily life very convenient for residents")을 사용할 수 있습니다. 또한 한 문장으로 길게 이어지기보다 연결어(for example, also)를 사용해 문장을 명확히 나누고 구체적인 예시(어떤 상점, 어떤 교통수단)를 하나 추가하면 점수가 더 올라갑니다.

Example: Yes. I live in Seoul, and there are many tall buildings nearby, such as office towers and large shopping malls. For example, there are convenience stores and grocery shops on almost every block, and subway stations are usually within a five-minute walk, so living here is very convenient.

Suggestion: 답변이 의도는 전달되지만 문법과 발음 오류, 문장 구성 문제가 심합니다. 동사 형태(photography → take photographs, or photograph)가 필요하고 불필요한 반복과 어색한 표현("auto building", "I was followed by Empire State Building")을 고쳐야 합니다. 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤, 방문 경험을 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어(for example, when)로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어보세요.

Example: Yes, I do. I sometimes take photos of interesting buildings. For example, when I visited New York, I photographed the Empire State Building because its size and design were really impressive.

Suggestion: 문장의 지시대상(건물과 위치)이 혼동되어 있고 이유 진술도 불분명합니다("Singapore's cathedral in London"은 잘못된 표현). 방문하고 싶은 건물과 그 이유를 명확히 분리해서 말하세요. 또한 이유는 패션 공부와 어떻게 연결되는지 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다. 예: 특정 건물의 건축 양식이 패션에 영감을 준다거나 전시가 있다 등.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit St Paul's Cathedral in London someday because I am interested in architecture and historical fashion. For instance, the cathedral's grand interior and historical exhibitions could inspire my fashion studies.

Suggestion: 의견은 분명하지만 문장 흐름이 반복적이고 일부 어색한 표현이 있습니다("on the low floor"보다는 "on the lower floors" 또는 "on the ground floor"). 또한 구체적인 장점(뷰, 보안, 편의시설 외의 이점)이나 단점(예: 비싼 관리비)을 하나 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있는 답변이 됩니다. 연결어(also, furthermore)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어보세요.

Example: Yes, I would. I like living in tall buildings because they often have convenient facilities like supermarkets and gyms on the lower floors. Also, higher floors usually offer better views and more privacy, which I value.

× They make daily life very convenient because shops, restaurant, and public transport are all close by.

✓ They make daily life very convenient because shops, restaurants, and public transport are all close by.

'Restaurant' should be plural ('restaurants') to match the plural noun list (shops, restaurants, public transport). Use plural when referring to more than one item in a general list. Suggestion: Use plural forms for countable nouns when listing multiple items (shops, restaurants).

× I mean yes, I sometimes photography auto building when I when I visited in New York I I was followed by Empire State Building because it is impressive.

✓ I mean, yes. I sometimes take photos of buildings. When I visited New York, I was impressed by the Empire State Building because it is impressive.

Multiple issues: 'photography' is a noun, not the verb needed; use 'take photos' or 'photograph' (verb). 'Auto building' is unclear and incorrect; use 'buildings'. 'When I when I visited in New York' has repetition and incorrect preposition; use 'When I visited New York'. 'I I was followed by Empire State Building' is wrong: buildings do not follow people; likely intended 'I was impressed by the Empire State Building'. Suggestions: Use correct verb forms ('take photos' or 'photograph'), remove repetitions, correct prepositions and choose appropriate verbs for meaning (be impressed by).

× I mean yes, I sometimes photography auto building when I when I visited in New York I I was followed by Empire State Building because it is impressive.

✓ I mean, yes. I sometimes take photos of buildings. When I visited New York, I was impressed by the Empire State Building because it is impressive.

The phrase 'visited in New York' incorrectly uses 'in'; 'visit' doesn't require 'in' before a city: say 'visited New York'. Also 'impressed by' is the correct preposition to indicate the feeling toward something. Suggestion: Use 'visit New York' and 'impressed by'.

× Umm, I would like to visit Singapore's cathedral in London someday because I want to study fashion in.

✓ Umm, I would like to visit the Singapore Cathedral in London someday because I want to study fashion there.

The sentence has misplaced and missing elements: 'Singapore's cathedral in London' is odd unless that cathedral is named 'Singapore Cathedral'; likely intended 'the Singapore Cathedral' or 'Singapore Cathedral'. The clause 'because I want to study fashion in' is incomplete; add the place 'there'. Suggestion: Ensure the object and location are clear and complete the final prepositional phrase with the place (there).

× Yes, definitely, because it has many convenient facilities such as a supermarket and gym on the low floor.

✓ Yes, definitely, because they have many convenient facilities such as a supermarket and a gym on the lower floors.

Subject refers to 'a tall building' (singular) in question, but the student then shifts meaning to general tall buildings or apartments. To keep original meaning: if referring to 'a tall building' use 'it has' and 'a supermarket and a gym on the lower floors'. Also 'low floor' is unnatural; use 'lower floors'. Ensure article use before 'gym'. Suggestion: Match number (singular/plural) consistently and use natural collocations ('lower floors', 'a gym').

× So I I like I want to live in.

✓ So I like it and I want to live there.

The sentence contains repetitions and lacks the object/place after 'live in'. Use 'like it' to refer to the building and 'live there' to indicate the place. Suggestion: Remove repeated words and include the pronoun or adverb indicating location ('it' or 'there').