Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking phrase. Avoid 'and the like'—give an example or two. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'close to' instead of 'near').

Example: Yes, there are many tall buildings close to my home because we live in the city. For example, there are several apartment blocks and a large hospital within walking distance, which makes the area feel very urban.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition, and use linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so') to connect ideas. Be specific about what you photograph and how you share the photos.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel because their architecture reminds me of the place. For instance, I enjoy photographing old cathedrals and modern skyscrapers, and I usually post my favorite shots on Instagram to share with friends.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and expand with a specific reason using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Avoid vague phrases like 'most probably'—be confident in your reason and add a concrete detail about what you would do there.

Example: I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because its iconic design and the city views from the top look spectacular. I especially want to go at sunset to see the lights come on and take panoramic photos of Paris.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence ('No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building'), avoid hedging phrases, and give one or two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Remove repetition and unnecessary qualifiers.

Example: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I worry about evacuation during emergencies such as earthquakes or fires. For that reason, I prefer a low-rise house with easy and quick access to the street.

× I like it since I am able to relive the moment I see when I see these pictures.

✓ I like it because I can relive the moments I experienced when I look at these pictures.

The sentence contains awkward pronoun and verb choices. 'I like it since I am able to relive the moment I see when I see these pictures' misuses 'see' and repeats it; also 'the moment' is better as 'the moments' to match plural 'pictures'. Use 'because' for clearer causal connection, 'can' for ability, and 'experienced' or omit to indicate past experience. Suggestion: replace redundant 'see' with 'look at' and change 'the moment' to 'the moments I experienced' for clarity.

× I also like sharing them and social media platforms so I can share it with my friends and family.

✓ I also like sharing them on social media platforms so I can share them with my friends and family.

This sentence misuses preposition and pronouns. Use 'on social media platforms' not 'and', and use 'them' (plural) to refer to 'photos' consistently instead of 'it'. Suggestion: use consistent plural pronoun and correct preposition 'on'.

× Most probably because I've seen it a lot in the movies and it just felt so romantic and majestic to see the view.

✓ Probably because I've seen it a lot in movies, it seems romantic and majestic to see the view.

The original is a sentence fragment beginning with 'Most probably because'. It also mixes present perfect 'I've seen' with past 'felt' incorrectly. Recast as a full sentence: 'Probably because I've seen it a lot in movies, it seems romantic and majestic to see the view.' This keeps tense consistent and forms a complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and keep tense agreement.

× My reason might be funny for some, but I do not like.

✓ My reason might be funny to some, but I do not.

'Funny for some' is less natural than 'funny to some'. Also 'but I do not like' is incomplete — 'do not' needs an object or be shortened to 'do not' (implying 'want to') but better is 'but I do not.' Suggestion: use 'funny to some' and shorten the second clause to 'but I do not.'

× I do not want to live in a tall building, most probably because I want to be able to get out of it during natural disasters.

✓ I do not want to live in a tall building, probably because I want to be able to get out of it during natural disasters.

'Most probably' is awkward here; 'probably' is more natural. The sentence is otherwise acceptable but could be tightened. Suggestion: use 'probably' and keep the clause clear about reason.

× These natural disasters may include earthquakes, fires, and more natural disasters.

✓ These natural disasters may include earthquakes, fires, and other disasters.

Repeating 'natural disasters' is redundant. Use 'other disasters' or simply list examples. Also 'may include' is fine. Suggestion: avoid redundancy by replacing the second 'natural disasters' with 'other disasters'.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near our house.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my house.

The student used 'our house' but the conversation refers to 'your home' in the question; while 'our' isn't grammatically wrong, consistency with speaker perspective suggests 'my house' as clearer. This is a pragmatic adjustment rather than strict grammar, but aligns subject perspective. Suggestion: use 'my' when speaking about one's own home.

× Yes, I like taking photos of buildings, especially when I travel.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings, especially when I travel.

This sentence is correct as written. No change needed. It uses the gerund 'taking' appropriately for the verb 'like'.

× One building that I would like to visit is the Eiffel Tower in Paris.

✓ One building I would like to visit is the Eiffel Tower in Paris.

Original sentence is acceptable, but 'that' can be omitted for more natural spoken English: 'One building I would like to visit...' This is a stylistic improvement rather than strict grammar correction. Suggestion: omit unnecessary relative pronouns.