Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve coherence and conciseness: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, and use a linking phrase for the extra detail. Also prefer 'high-rise' with a hyphen. Keep it to at most 3–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes — there are several high-rise residential buildings near my home. For example, my flat is in one of those towers, where many families live, so the neighborhood feels densely populated.

Suggestion: Be more natural with collocations and linking words: use 'high-rise blocks' and 'old architecture' (uncountable). Add a brief reason to make it specific, and use a linking phrase like 'however' or 'instead'.

Example: Not really — I grew up surrounded by high-rise blocks, so modern buildings no longer interest me. Instead, I enjoy photographing old architecture because it has character and interesting details.

Suggestion: Clarify the building name and avoid hesitations: prepare key vocabulary (e.g., 'Tokyo Skytree' or 'Tokyo Tower'), remove filler words ('uh'), and be specific about why you want to visit. Use one or two supporting details linked with 'because' or 'for example'.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because it has a high observation deck with panoramic views of the city. From there I could see famous landmarks like Mount Fuji on a clear day.

Suggestion: Make the reason more specific and correct grammar: combine sentences into a clear response, avoid fragmentary phrases, and give examples of the conveniences (e.g., shops, transport). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Example: Yes, I would. I find tall buildings convenient because they often have shops, gyms and easy access to public transport, which saves time in a busy city.

× Yes, there are high rise buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are high-rise buildings near my home.

The phrase 'high rise' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun: 'high-rise buildings'. This is a punctuation/word-formation convention rather than a pluralization error; correcting it makes the adjective-noun combination standard and clear. Suggestion: use 'high-rise' with a hyphen when describing buildings.

× There are residential buildings where many families live, and actually my flat is one of those high rise towers.

✓ There are residential buildings where many families live, and actually my flat is one of those high-rise towers.

Again, 'high rise' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before 'towers'. Hyphenation clarifies that 'high-rise' is a single adjective modifying 'towers'. Suggestion: write 'high-rise towers'.

× Not really, since I grew up in a city that's full of high rise blocks and therefore they don't interest me much.

✓ Not really, since I grew up in a city that's full of high-rise blocks and therefore they don't interest me much.

Primary issue is hyphenation of 'high-rise' as a compound adjective. Tense usage ('grew up') is correct because it refers to a past action. Suggestion: keep past tense 'grew up' and hyphenate 'high-rise'.

× On the contrary, I love taking pictures of old architectures.

✓ On the contrary, I love taking pictures of old architecture.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun that refers to the style or art of building design and is not normally pluralized as 'architectures' in this context. Use the uncountable form 'architecture' when speaking generally about building styles. Suggestion: replace 'old architectures' with 'old architecture' or 'old buildings' if referring to individual structures.

× Yes, there is a building in Japan called 191 uh, Tokyo skyscrapers, something like this, because it has an observation deck with a par panoramic view that uh, allows us to see the Japan from above.

✓ Yes, there is a building in Japan called '191' or a Tokyo skyscraper, something like that, because it has an observation deck with a panoramic view that allows us to see Japan from above.

Multiple issues: unclear naming and filler words, wrong article 'the' before 'Japan', and extra words 'par'. Use 'a Tokyo skyscraper' or name '191' clearly. Do not use 'the' before country names like Japan. Remove filler 'uh' and repeated words. Suggestion: state the building name clearly, use 'a' for 'Tokyo skyscraper', use 'panoramic view', and say 'see Japan from above' without 'the'.

× allows us to see the Japan from above.

✓ allows us to see Japan from above.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before proper country names like 'Japan'. 'The' is used for some country names (e.g., 'the United States') but not with 'Japan'. Suggestion: remove 'the' when mentioning 'Japan'.

× Yes, I would definitely want to live in a tall building because living in a high rise tower means convenience.

✓ Yes, I would definitely want to live in a tall building because living in a high-rise tower is convenient.

Style and structure: replace 'means convenience' with the more natural adjective 'is convenient'. Hyphenate 'high-rise'. Suggestion: use 'is convenient' to describe a state, and hyphenate compound adjective.

× In a city where full of tall buildings.

✓ In a city full of tall buildings.

The phrase 'where full of tall buildings' is ungrammatical; either use 'where there are many tall buildings' or simply 'a city full of tall buildings'. The original lacks a verb structure; remove 'where' or add 'there are'. Suggestion: use 'In a city full of tall buildings' or 'In a city where there are many tall buildings'.