Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 응답했지만 문법 오류, 중복 표현, 그리고 문장 구조의 혼란이 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 먼저 간결한 주제문으로 시작하고, 그 다음에 구체적인 세부사항(예: 몇 층짜리인지, 위치나 주변 특징)을 연결어(예: however, although, for example)를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(예: "it it's", "to the to the")과 개인적 의문형(예: "right?")은 제거하세요.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the capital city. For example, the tallest one nearby is a 30-story office tower, and there are also several modern apartment blocks along the main road.

Suggestion: 아이디어는 전달되지만 문법적 오류와 어색한 어순이 있습니다. 부정 표현을 명확히 하고 이유를 간결하게 제시하세요. 연결어(예: because, so, therefore)를 사용해 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하고, 과도한 일반화 표현("everything")은 피하세요.

Example: Not really. I'm not very good at photography, so I rarely take pictures of buildings. As a result, I probably don't have any building photos in my gallery.

Suggestion: 답변이 혼란스럽고 명확하지 않습니다. 방문하고 싶은 건물을 말할 때는 건물의 이름, 위치, 이유(예: 역사적 중요성, 건축 양식, 내부 시설) 등을 논리적으로 제시하세요. 불필요한 반복과 문법 오류(숫자 표현, 소유격, 시제 등)를 고치고, 조건문을 쓸 때는 정확한 표현을 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, there is a building I'd like to visit called the Hanam Building. I've heard it's an exclusive, historic site with impressive architecture, but it's quite private and expensive to enter. If I save enough money, I would love to visit it one day.

Suggestion: 의도는 전달되지만 반복과 비문이 많아 의미 전달이 약합니다. 이유를 분명히 하고 구체적 예시(예: 전망, 소음, 안전성)를 덧붙이세요. 또한 말의 반복("you know")과 중복된 표현을 피하고, 논리적인 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 구조화하세요.

Example: Yes, I would. I prefer living in a tall building because it offers better views and fewer insects. For example, being on a high floor would mean less noise from the street and fewer pests entering my apartment.

× Yes, absolutely, because I live in capital city, so I could see the really tall buildings, but it it's quite old.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because I live in the capital city, so I can see the really tall buildings, but it is quite old.

'the' is required before 'capital city' when referring to a specific city role; use 'can' for ability in present rather than 'could' which implies past or conditional; 'it it's' contains a duplicate contraction and should be 'it is'. Improve by using 'the capital city', 'can', and removing duplicate words.

× But it doesn't matter to the to the tall buildings, right?

✓ But that doesn't matter to the tall buildings, right?

The phrase 'to the to the' repeats and the referent is better introduced with 'that'. Use 'that doesn't matter to the tall buildings' or simpler 'that doesn't matter' depending on meaning. Remove duplication and use correct demonstrative.

× Not really because I'm not good at it to take a photo.

✓ Not really, because I'm not good at taking photos.

After 'good at' use the gerund form 'taking' (verb + -ing). Also use plural 'photos' for general activity. Improve by using 'good at taking photos'.

× Even I don't really take a photo everything.

✓ I don't really take many photos at all.

Original word order and pronoun 'even I' is awkward; 'everything' is incorrect here. Use quantity expression 'many photos' and idiom 'at all' for negation. Rearrange to 'I don't really take many photos at all.'

× So probably in my gallery I have no photos of buildings.

✓ So probably in my gallery I have no photos of buildings.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'photos' plural is correct for countable items. No change needed.

× Yes, I have a 11 old building.

✓ Yes, I have an 11-year-old building.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound and hyphenate age expressions '11-year-old' as a compound adjective before a noun. Also include 'year' for clarity.

× What I want to go I want I want to go.

✓ What I want is to go there.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use 'What I want is to go there' to express intention. Simplify and use correct infinitive structure.

× It is it is Hanam building.

✓ It is the Hanam Building.

Remove duplicate 'it is'; use the definite article 'the' for a named building and capitalize 'Building' as part of the proper name.

× It is called Hannah building.

✓ It is called the Hannah Building.

Include 'the' for the building name and capitalize 'Building'. Ensure consistent spelling of the name ('Hannah' vs 'Hanam') and use one form.

× I heard that is quite expensive 1 so I couldn't it's really private.

✓ I heard that it is quite expensive, so it's really private.

Use 'it is' after 'heard that' for reported present information; remove 'couldn't' which is incorrect here. Use contraction 'it's' correctly and separate clauses with a comma. Ensure clarity: 'I heard that it is quite expensive, so it is really private.'

× So if I get a money I hope to go there.

✓ So if I get some money, I hope to go there.

Use 'some money' (no article with 'money') and include a comma after the conditional clause. 'Get some money' is natural phrasing for obtaining funds.

× Yes, absolutely, because you know, you know, tall building.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because, you know, tall buildings.

Plural 'tall buildings' is more natural when speaking generally; remove repetition and adjust punctuation. Use plural when referring to the concept.

× If I live in tall building that I I could I couldn't, I can't see the insect, right.

✓ If I live in a tall building, I can't see the insects, right?

Include article 'a' before 'tall building'; use present modal 'can't' for present ability; use plural 'insects' for general reference. Remove duplicate words and ensure proper clause punctuation.

× I had the insect.

✓ I hate insects.

Original 'had the insect' likely intended 'hate insects' (negative feeling). If the student meant they used to have an insect, context suggests they mean dislike. Correct to 'I hate insects.' Use present simple for general dislike.