Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep answers concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific examples with correct names and prepositions. Also check article use and word order (e.g., “in Tehran” not “at Tehran”).

Example: Yes. My neighborhood in Tehran has many tall buildings. For example, Azadi Tower stands in the city center and Milad Tower is in the west of Tehran, both visible from my area.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, so). Mention specific occasions or subjects to make your answer concrete and coherent.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings. For example, I often go out with friends to capture views of local towers because their surroundings, like tall trees and parks, make attractive compositions.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct factual or language errors and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “I wanted to buy last year” is unclear). Start with a direct statement, then explain why using specific reasons and linking words. Keep it natural and concise.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is a masterpiece of modern architecture. I missed a chance to go last year because it was closed for maintenance, so I hope to see its observation deck and panoramic city views next time.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid vague phrases like “developed culture.” Give a clear reason and one concrete example comparing living styles. Use linking words (because, so) and correct noun forms (e.g., mansions).

Example: No, I would not. I prefer traditional mansions or spacious apartments because most people here value privacy and larger living spaces, whereas tall tower living often means smaller units and shared facilities.

× Yes, where I live at Tehran is surrounded by skyscrapers.

✓ Yes, where I live, Tehran is surrounded by skyscrapers.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with city names; use no preposition or 'in'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestion: say 'Where I live in Tehran, it is surrounded by skyscrapers' or 'Tehran, where I live, is surrounded by skyscrapers.'

× Also there are some high towers, for example uh Azadi Tower in the city center and Mila Tower in the West of the Tehran.

✓ Also there are some tall towers, for example Azadi Tower in the city center and Milad Tower in the west of Tehran.

Use 'tall' rather than 'high' for buildings. 'The' before city name is unnecessary: say 'west of Tehran' not 'the West of the Tehran.' Proper name is 'Milad Tower'. Capitalization: 'west' is not a proper noun here. Suggestion: 'Also, there are some tall towers, for example Azadi Tower in the city center and Milad Tower in the west of Tehran.'

× I am fond of photography and I like to, umm, preserve photos.

✓ I am fond of photography and I like to keep photos.

'Preserve photos' is unusual; 'keep' or 'save' fits better. No grammar rule violation beyond word choice; categorized under verb + -ing because 'fond of' should be followed by -ing form (which is correct here). Suggestion: 'I am fond of photography and I like keeping photos' or 'I like to keep photos.'

× For instance, sometimes I go out with my friends and and take some photo and capture, uh, good scenic, uh, views of these towers.

✓ For instance, sometimes I go out with my friends and take some photos and capture good scenic views of these towers.

'Take some photo' should be plural 'take some photos'. Remove duplicate 'and'. 'Scenic' is an adjective modifying 'views' so no comma. Suggestion: '...take some photos and capture scenic views of these towers.'

× Especially also the tower because it is surrounded by tall trees.

✓ Especially the tower, because it is surrounded by tall trees.

The sentence is a fragment and awkwardly starts with 'Especially also'. Remove 'also' and add comma; ensure it connects to previous sentence: 'Especially the tower, because it is surrounded by tall trees.' Suggestion: combine with previous: 'I especially like that tower because it is surrounded by tall trees.'

× Yes, actually I like to visit Burj Al Khalifa in Dubai. I wanted to buy last year, but it was closed and I like to visit this building.

✓ Yes, actually I would like to visit Burj Al Khalifa in Dubai. I wanted to go last year, but it was closed, and I would still like to visit this building.

Use 'would like' for present desire. 'Wanted to buy last year' is incorrect verb choice; likely 'go' or 'visit'. Maintain tense consistency: past event 'wanted to go last year' and present desire 'would like to visit'. Suggestion: 'I wanted to go last year, but it was closed, and I still want to visit it.'

× I think it is a masterpiece of architecture. It is a modern, unique tower all around the world.

✓ I think it is a masterpiece of architecture. It is a modern, unique tower in the world.

Phrase 'all around the world' is awkward here. Use 'in the world' or 'worldwide' to express global significance. Also 'modern, unique' is acceptable; comma is optional. Suggestion: '...a modern, unique tower in the world' or '...one of the most unique modern towers in the world.'

× To be honest, no, because I think living in towers and high buildings need a developed culture and I think people in my country prefer to live in ancient mansion or spacious apartments, not just in living with the others.

✓ To be honest, no, because I think living in towers and high-rise buildings requires a developed culture, and people in my country prefer to live in old mansions or spacious apartments, not live closely with others.

Subject-verb agreement: 'need' should be 'requires' for singular concept, categorized under modal but also S-V agreement; here fixed with 'requires'. 'High buildings' -> 'high-rise buildings'. 'Ancient mansion' -> 'old mansions' plural and article. 'Not just in living with the others' is ungrammatical; use 'not live closely with others' or 'not live with others in close proximity.' Suggestion: '...requires a developed culture, and people in my country prefer old mansions or spacious apartments rather than living closely with others.' }]}} PMID: 0.0