Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail. Avoid contractions or short fragments that sound hesitant. For example, say where the high-rise is relative to your home and one brief reason or feature.

Example: Yes, there are tall buildings near my home. I live in a high‑rise apartment block in the city center, so I can see several skyscrapers from my balcony.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid unfinished comparisons and filler words.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because different angles can highlight architectural details. For example, I often shoot from low angles to emphasize a building’s height, and I prefer early morning light for softer shadows.

Suggestion: Make tense and word choice consistent and remove redundancies. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific details (location, atmosphere, activities) using linking words like because or so.

Example: Yes, I often visit a meditation center near my home because it is surrounded by a forest. It consists of several small buildings and quiet gardens, and every time I go there I feel calm and refreshed.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid off‑topic or joking questions that interrupt fluency. Give one clear opinion and one supporting reason. If you want to mention a minor negative, state it concisely and logically.

Example: I have lived in a tall building before, and I would live in one again because it offers good views and convenient facilities. However, I did notice some problems like occasional mosquitoes, which can be a nuisance even on higher floors.

× Yes they are actually.

✓ Yes, they are, actually.

The original sentence is acceptable conversationally but lacks commas for clarity; no third-person singular verb error. Correction adds commas to improve readability and natural spoken punctuation. (Note: If intended to mean 'Yes, there are,' that would be a 'There be' issue, but context shows 'they' refers to tall buildings so 'they are' is correct.)

× I'm living in a high rise.

✓ I live in a high-rise.

Use simple present 'I live' for a permanent or long-term residence instead of present continuous 'I'm living.' Also hyphenate 'high-rise' as a compound noun. Suggestion: Use simple present for states and routines.

× I like it very much.

✓ I like it very much.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Present simple 'I like' correctly expresses preference.

× I have tons of photos in my phone of uh, all kinds of, uh, buildings.

✓ I have tons of photos on my phone of all kinds of buildings.

Use 'on my phone' not 'in my phone.' Remove filler words for clarity and punctuation. 'Tons of' is informal but acceptable; keep or replace with 'a lot of' for formality.

× Like, uh, if you find a great angle, it can show a special umm, sketch of the building which makes it very beautiful.

✓ If you find a great angle, it can reveal a distinctive profile of the building and make it look very beautiful.

Remove discourse markers 'Like, uh' and reduce fillers. 'Show a special sketch' is awkward; use 'reveal a distinctive profile' or 'unique shape.' Clarify relative clause and parallel verbs for smoother sentence structure.

× Compare comparing uh, combined with.

✓ (Remove this fragment; no correction necessary.)

This fragment is incomplete and doesn't convey meaning. It should be removed or expanded into a full sentence, e.g., 'Comparing different angles can change how the building looks.' Suggestions: avoid unfinished fragments and complete comparative clauses.

× Yes, for several times a year I try to visit meditation center near my home, like surrounded by a for by the by the forest.

✓ Yes, several times a year I try to visit a meditation center near my home, which is surrounded by a forest.

Use 'a meditation center' (article needed) and correct 'for several times a year' to 'several times a year.' Replace awkward phrase with relative clause 'which is surrounded by a forest.' This fixes article use and sentence structure.

× It's a collection of small buildings and residents.

✓ It's a collection of small buildings and residences.

'Residents' means people living there; 'residences' refers to dwellings. Context suggests buildings and residences. Choose the intended meaning: if meaning people, keep 'residents' but adjust sentence to 'and the residents.'

× Every time I went there, I feel so soothing and relaxing.

✓ Every time I go there, I feel very soothed and relaxed.

Tense mismatch: 'Every time' requires present tense habitual 'I go' and 'I feel'; alternatively use past tense consistently. Also use appropriate adjectives: 'soothed and relaxed' rather than 'soothing and relaxing' which describe the place, not the person's feeling.

× So I'd like to visit there.

✓ So I'd like to visit it again.

'Visit there' is less natural than 'visit it' or 'go there.' If referring to the meditation center, use 'visit it' and add 'again' if intended. Improve pronoun reference and specificity.

× Wow, I have already lived in a tall building.

✓ Wow, I have lived in a tall building before.

Present perfect 'have lived' is acceptable, but 'already' is awkward with experience statements; 'before' is more natural. Either simple past 'I lived' (if specifying past period) or present perfect with 'before' for experience.

× I think it's not that bad but I wonder why there are still mosquitoes in the tall building.

✓ I think it's not that bad, but I wonder why there are still mosquitoes in the tall building.

Add comma before 'but' for compound sentence clarity. Sentence otherwise grammatically acceptable.

× Are they coming up taking also the elevator?

✓ Are they coming up using the elevator as well?

Replace 'coming up taking also the elevator' with natural verb phrase 'coming up using the elevator as well.' Correct word order and preposition use. Suggestion: use 'using' for elevator and place 'as well' at end for emphasis.