Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and use linking words to organise details. Mention frequency naturally and give a clear reason or example. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, Centaurus Mall is a prominent one that I visit once a week for shopping. Additionally, there are parks around the building, so I often go there to relax after shopping.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with a specific supporting detail. Avoid trailing off and self-corrections. Use a linking phrase to add detail and a short example of what you photograph.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings. For instance, I often capture details of tall skyscrapers and the charm of old town houses because I like architectural contrasts.

Suggestion: Be specific and fluent. Start with a clear answer, name the building, and give concise reasons why you want to visit. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant comments.

Example: Yes, one building I would like to visit is Minar-e-Pakistan in Lahore. I want to see it because it is a historical monument and an important symbol of Pakistan's independence, and I have heard it offers a good view of the surrounding park.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organise reasons clearly. Avoid repetition and rhetorical questions. Use linking words to list reasons (for example, because, and). Keep it to two or three concise sentences.

Example: No, I would not like to live in a tall building. I prefer a small home with all necessary facilities and a green, mountainous setting because I value peace, fresh air, and outdoor space.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near to my home.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.

Use 'near' without the preposition 'to' when indicating proximity to a place. 'Near to' is uncommon in standard English; omit 'to' for correctness.

× One of them is Centaurus Mall, which I actually, uh, sorry, I meant to say which I usually visit uh, in a week, once in a week and uh, on the other hand, there are many parks near that building, so I usually go.

✓ One of them is Centaurus Mall, which I usually visit once a week. There are also many parks near that building, so I often go there.

Original sentence is run-on and disfluent. Break into two sentences and reorder adverbials: 'once a week' is the correct idiomatic expression, not 'in a week' or 'once in a week'. 'On the other hand' is not appropriate; use 'also' or 'in addition'. Add 'there' after 'go' to indicate destination.

× Yes, I like to take photos of buildings as I am quite fond of taking pictures whether it's a tall building or a small town and I usually I mean to say that I have.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of buildings because I am fond of photography, whether the subject is a tall building or a small town, and I usually do so.

Sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity, use 'fond of photography' to avoid repeating 'taking pictures', and finish the thought with 'I usually do so' instead of the incomplete 'I mean to say that I have'.

× Yes, there are so many buildings that are in my bucket list.

✓ Yes, there are so many buildings on my bucket list.

We use 'on' with 'bucket list', not 'in'. 'On my bucket list' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× One of them is Minare Pakistan. That is actually the representation of our city, Lahore and I heard about this sorry town.

✓ One of them is Minar-e-Pakistan. It is a symbol of our city, Lahore, and I have heard about it for a long time.

Use the correct name 'Minar-e-Pakistan' and replace 'That' with 'It' for pronoun reference. 'Representation' is awkward; 'symbol' is more natural. 'I heard about this sorry town' is unclear and incorrect; use 'I have heard about it for a long time' to express familiarity.

× How do I like tall buildings? But I never want to live in tall building.

✓ I do like tall buildings, but I would never want to live in a tall building.

Original begins with a question form incorrectly. Use affirmative 'I do like' to state preference. Use the article 'a' before 'tall building'. Use 'would never want to' to express preference about living in the future/hypothetical situation.

× I just like a small home with the whole facilities within it within it and I prefer living in a green space around mountain area.

✓ I prefer a small home with all the necessary facilities, and I prefer living in a green area near the mountains.

'The whole facilities' is incorrect; use 'all the necessary facilities' or 'all the facilities'. Remove duplicate 'within it'. Use 'a green area' and 'near the mountains' for natural phrasing instead of 'around mountain area'.