Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 대답은 질문에 답하고 있으나 문장이 중복되고 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 더 자연스럽게 말하려면 핵심 문장(주제문)을 먼저 말한 후, 구체적인 세부사항(예: 상점 종류,층수,위치)을 연결어를 사용해 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 브랜드 이름을 반복하거나 불필요한 단어를 줄이고, 'there is/there are' 대신 'near my house stands a' 같은 다양한 표현을 사용해 보세요.

Example: Yes. Near my house there is a tall building that houses a Hyundai department store. Inside, there are many shops, such as cosmetics stores and high-end boutiques, located on several floors.

Suggestion: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 부정문을 간결하게 하고, 관심사에 대해 구체적인 이유나 상황을 덧붙이세요. 또한 중복 표현(예: 'sky blue sky')을 피하고 접속사로 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Example: Not really. I don't usually photograph buildings; instead, I enjoy taking pictures of the sky and nice weather because the colors and light are often very beautiful.

Suggestion: 시제와 문법 오류가 있고 문장이 중복되어 혼란을 줍니다. 현재형으로 원했던 건지 과거에 방문했는지를 명확히 하세요. 방문 경험을 설명할 때는 시간 표현과 이유를 덧붙여 구체적으로 말하세요.

Example: Yes, I used to want to visit the Eiffel Tower, and last winter I finally did with my girlfriend. We went up to the observation deck and enjoyed the view over Paris.

Suggestion: 답변이 장황하고 반복이 있습니다. 먼저 간단히 의사를 밝히고 현재 상황을 설명할 때는 숫자나 시설 같은 구체적 정보를 깔끔하게 제시하세요. 문장 연결은 접속사나 이유를 나타내는 표현을 사용해 논리적으로 만드세요.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. In fact, I already do — I live in a 28-storey apartment building that shares nearby facilities like a park and a swimming pool.

× Yes, I'm living in Xinjiang now and near my house there is a tall building that is a department Hyundai department store and there are a lot of shops in there for example to cosmetics and like like expensive stuffs like that.

✓ Yes, I live in Xinjiang now. Near my house there is a tall building, which is a Hyundai department store, and there are a lot of shops inside, for example cosmetics and other expensive items.

The student used 'I'm living' which is a continuous form not needed for a permanent situation; use simple present 'I live'. The clause 'that is a department Hyundai department store' is redundant and incorrectly ordered; use 'which is a Hyundai department store'. 'In there' is awkward; use 'inside'. 'To cosmetics' is incorrect preposition and 'stuffs' is informal and uncountable; use 'cosmetics' and 'items'. Suggestion: use simple present for general facts, simplify clauses with relative pronoun 'which', and use correct nouns and prepositions.

× No, I don't have any hobbies of taking pictures of buildings, but I really like to take up photos of nice weather and sky blue sky.

✓ No, I don't have a hobby of taking pictures of buildings, but I really like to take photos of nice weather and the blue sky.

The phrase 'hobbies of taking' is unnatural; use 'a hobby of taking' or 'the hobby of taking'. 'Take up photos' is incorrect collocation; use 'take photos'. 'Sky blue sky' repeats 'sky' and uses adjective incorrectly; use 'the blue sky'. Suggestion: use 'a hobby of' or 'hobbies such as', remove 'up' after 'take', and avoid repetition.

× Yes, there was a building that I want to visit that that was a Eiffel Tower, but last winter I visited it with my girlfriend.

✓ Yes, there was a building I wanted to visit: the Eiffel Tower, but last winter I visited it with my girlfriend.

Tense consistency: 'I want to visit' should be past 'I wanted to visit' because the student refers to a past wish that was fulfilled. 'There was a building that that was a Eiffel Tower' is redundant and has an article error 'a Eiffel Tower' should be 'the Eiffel Tower'. Suggestion: ensure tense consistency when referring to past events and use the definite article 'the' for famous landmarks.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building and I'm living in a tall building now and uh, I'm living in a apartment which which has the floors about 28 and.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building and I am living in a tall building now. I live in an apartment which has about 28 floors.

Repeated 'I'm living' is unnecessary; use 'I am living' once or better 'I live' for a current situation. 'I'm living in a apartment' has an article error: use 'an apartment'. 'which which' is duplicated. Word order 'the floors about 28' is incorrect; use 'about 28 floors'. Suggestion: avoid repeating clauses, use correct articles 'a'/'an', and place quantifiers before the noun.

× Because there are a lot of apartment near my apartment, so we have a park and swimming pool.

✓ Because there are a lot of apartments near my apartment, we have a park and a swimming pool.

Use plural 'apartments' for 'a lot of'. The preposition 'near' is fine but 'a lot of apartment' is singular error. Also the sentence included both 'Because' and 'so' which is redundant; remove 'so'. Missing article before 'swimming pool': use 'a swimming pool'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'a lot of', avoid combining 'because' with 'so', and include articles before singular countable nouns.