Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with correct tense and prepositions. Avoid redundancy and fix sentence fragments. Use linking words like "however" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in the Zamiro area, which is mostly low-rise housing. However, I used to live in the city centre where many high‑rise buildings were constructed, so I moved to the outskirts for more open space.

Suggestion: Good organisation and clear examples. Improve grammatical accuracy (plural/singular and articles) and use a linking phrase to make the condition smoother. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly.

Example: I don't usually take photos of buildings, but I will if a building has extraordinary architecture or an unusual design. For instance, I recently photographed a modern museum because its striking shape made me want to remember it and share it with my family.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct factual and grammar errors. Begin with a clear statement, give specific reasons and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "and" to connect reasons, and provide one concrete detail about what you want to see.

Example: Yes, I'd love to visit the Mysore Palace because it is famous for its royal history and its extensive collection of artwork and historical artifacts from the 1800s. I especially want to see the ornate rooms and the royal jewellery on display, and I became interested after seeing photos during a camp presentation.

Suggestion: Make the response more concise and correct tense and article errors. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words like "but" or "so". Avoid long, run-on sentences.

Example: I don't want to live in a tall building now. As a child I dreamed of it because of a TV show, but as I grew up I preferred more open space, so I live on the outskirts in a single‑storey house.

× Not really, I'm living in Zamiro area and there is not even one tall building near to my home.

✓ Not really, I live in the Zamiro area and there is not even one tall building near my home.

Use simple present 'I live' for habitual or permanent situations rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Also use article 'the' with a specific area 'the Zamiro area' and omit the unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'near'. Suggestion: Say 'I live in the Zamiro area' and 'near my home'.

× But earlier I used to live in city center, there were lots of high rise and skyscraper buildings were built especially by using the green space.

✓ But earlier I used to live in the city center; there were lots of high-rise and skyscraper buildings, many of which were built on green spaces.

Add definite article 'the' before 'city center'. Use hyphenated adjective 'high-rise'. The original contained a redundant 'were' before 'built' and awkward preposition 'by using the green space'; use 'built on green spaces' or 'on the green space'. Also separate clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: 'I used to live in the city center. There were lots of high-rise and skyscraper buildings, many of which were built on green spaces.'

× That's why I shifted from that area to the outskirt of city and these.

✓ That's why I moved from that area to the outskirts of the city and so on.

Use 'moved' rather than 'shifted' for natural English. 'Outskirt' should be plural 'outskirts' and needs the article 'the'. The phrase 'and these' is vague and ungrammatical; replace with 'and so on' or remove it. Suggestion: 'That's why I moved from that area to the outskirts of the city.'

× No, I don't usually take photos of building, but if the building has extraordinary architect or a very unusual design, I will photograph it to remember it or to show my family.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings, but if a building has an extraordinary architecture or a very unusual design, I will photograph it to remember it or to show my family.

Plural 'buildings' is needed after 'photos of'. Use 'a building' when speaking generally in the condition clause. 'Architecture' is a noun; 'architect' is a person. Also use 'an extraordinary architecture' or better 'an extraordinary design'. Suggestion: 'I don't usually take photos of buildings, but if a building has an extraordinary design I will photograph it.'

× For example, I recently took picture of a modern museum because its shape was so striking.

✓ For example, I recently took a picture of a modern museum because its shape was so striking.

Include the indefinite article 'a' before 'picture'. Suggestion: 'I recently took a picture of a modern museum.'

× I'm really interested in visiting the Mysore Palace. It is famous for its royal Harry days and House of extensive collection of artwork and historical artifact dating back to 1800s.

✓ I'm really interested in visiting the Mysore Palace. It is famous for its royal history and its extensive collection of artwork and historical artifacts dating back to the 1800s.

'Harry days' is incorrect; likely 'royal history'. 'House of extensive collection' is ungrammatical — use 'its extensive collection'. 'Artifact' should be plural 'artifacts' and include 'the' before '1800s' or 'the 1800s'. Suggestion: 'famous for its royal history and its extensive collection of artworks and historical artifacts dating back to the 1800s.'

× So I would like to see those exhibit in person and I also got interested because during my rifle shooting camp I saw a.

✓ So I would like to see those exhibits in person, and I also became interested because during my rifle shooting camp I saw one.

'Those exhibit' should be plural 'those exhibits'. Tense 'got interested' is informal; use 'became interested'. The clause ends abruptly 'I saw a.' — complete as 'I saw one' or specify what was seen. Ensure punctuation and completeness. Suggestion: 'I would like to see those exhibits in person, and I became interested because during my rifle shooting camp I saw one.'

× During my childhood I had dream to live in tall building because I was inspired by a daily soap where the community was living in the tall building.

✓ During my childhood I had a dream to live in a tall building because I was inspired by a daily soap where the community lived in a tall building.

Include article 'a' before 'dream' and 'a' before 'tall building'. Use simple past 'lived' rather than 'was living' for narrative past; both can work but 'lived' is more natural here. Remove 'the' before 'tall building' unless specifying a particular building. Suggestion: 'I had a dream of living in a tall building because a soap opera showed a community living in one.'

× But as I grown up I realized I should have more open space that's why living in outskirts and in my own building which is just one story.

✓ But as I grew up I realized I should have more open space; that's why I live on the outskirts in my own building, which is just one storey.

Use past simple 'grew up' not 'grown up'. The clause 'that's why living in outskirts' lacks a verb; use 'that's why I live on the outskirts'. Add article 'the' before 'outskirts' or use 'on the outskirts'. Use 'storey' (or 'story' in US English) with appropriate spelling. Ensure punctuation separates clauses. Suggestion: 'As I grew up, I realized I wanted more open space, so I live on the outskirts in my own one-storey building.'