Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Сократите паузы и запинки, исправьте неточные высказывания и используйте связные предложения. Начинайте с чёткой темы, затем добавляйте одну-две конкретные детали. Избегайте повторов («uh», «uh uh») и неправильных словосочетаний (например, «intense floors»).

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. I live in a 20-storey block of flats, and my flat is on a high floor. From my window I get a very nice view of the city skyline.

Suggestion: Устраните ложные паузы и ошибки в конструкции предложений. Используйте более точные глаголы и корректные времена. Добавьте связку и конкретный пример снимка, чтобы показать содержание ответа.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I am interested in architecture and design. For example, when I visited New York in 2011 I photographed the Empire State Building to capture its Art Deco details.

Suggestion: Сделайте ответ более структурированным: назовите одну-две конкретные постройки и объясните, почему хотите их посетить. Избегайте неточных названий и повторов; проверьте произношение и названия (например, ‘Kremlin’, not ‘Cremal’).

Example: Yes. Firstly, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because of its famous observation deck. I would also like to see the Kremlin in Moscow to learn more about Russian history and architecture.

Suggestion: Сформулируйте короткое основное предложение, затем приведите одно-два конкретных объяснения. Исправьте число существительных и артикли (a tall building, the last floor -> top floor). Избегайте перечисления без связок.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, such as the Chrysler Building. I prefer a top-floor flat because it offers better views and more privacy.

× Actually, I live in a block of flats that has 20 floors and uh, my flat's in intense floors and that's view is so nice uh uh, uh.

✓ Actually, I live in a block of flats that has 20 floors and my flat is on an upper floor and the view is so nice.

The original sentence misuses articles and phrases: 'my flat's in intense floors' is ungrammatical. Use 'on an upper floor' to indicate position in a building. Also 'that's view' should be 'the view'. Use definite article 'the' for a specific view. Improve cohesion by removing filler words. Suggestion: Say 'my flat is on an upper floor and the view is beautiful.'

× Yeah, sure. I like to take a photos of buildings because my, uh, I, I'm really interesting, uh, in the architecture and the design of buildings.

✓ Yeah, sure. I like to take photos of buildings because I'm really interested in the architecture and design of buildings.

Errors: 'take a photos' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' before 'photos'. 'I'm really interesting in' uses the wrong participle; the correct form is 'interested in' (past participle used as adjective). Also remove extra fillers and repeated pronouns. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' to describe personal feelings.

× Uh, for example, I was in New York in 2011 and I see uh, buildings like Empire State.

✓ For example, I was in New York in 2011 and I saw buildings like the Empire State Building.

Tense inconsistency: 'I was in New York in 2011' is past, so follow with past 'saw' not present 'see'. Also use the definite article and full name 'the Empire State Building'. Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense and use correct article with landmark names.

× Yes, sure. I have a several buildings which I want to visit.

✓ Yes, sure. I have several buildings that I want to visit.

Incorrect use of quantifier: 'a several' is ungrammatical; use 'several' without 'a'. Also use 'that' or 'which' appropriately; 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses. Suggestion: Use 'several' alone: 'I have several buildings that I want to visit.'

× Uh, first of all, it's Empire State Building in New York City and secondly has a lot of buildings in Moscow such as Cremal, uh, and the Red Castle and uh, in my country has.

✓ First of all, it's the Empire State Building in New York City. Secondly, there are a lot of buildings in Moscow such as the Kremlin and the Red Square, and there are also interesting buildings in my country.

Multiple errors: missing articles ('the Empire State Building'), wrong noun forms ('Cremal' should be 'the Kremlin'), and sentence fragments like 'in my country has.' Use 'there are' to state existence (There be issue). 'Red Castle' is incorrect; 'Red Square' is likely intended. Also split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for listing places and correct proper names.

× Yes, definitely I want to live in a tall buildings such as Empire State Building in New York City, Chrysler Buildings and I want to live in the last floors that buildings because the view is more beautiful from my window and.

✓ Yes, definitely. I want to live in a tall building such as the Empire State Building or the Chrysler Building, and I want to live on the top floors of that building because the view from my window is more beautiful.

Singular/plural mismatch: 'a tall buildings' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a tall building' or plural without 'a'. Proper names need articles: 'the Empire State Building' and 'the Chrysler Building'. Use 'on the top floors' not 'in the last floors'. 'that buildings' should be 'that building' (singular) or 'those buildings' (plural). Also finish the sentence; avoid trailing 'and.' Suggestion: Choose singular or plural consistently and use 'on' for floors and 'top' rather than 'last' for highest levels.