Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조를 간결하고 명확하게 하세요. 주제 문장을 먼저 말하고 구체적인 세부 정보를 덧붙이되, 문법 오류(복수형, 관사, 어순)를 고치세요. 예를 들어 복수형(skycrapers), 관사(a lot of / the city), 불필요한 반복 제거에 주의하세요. 또한 3~5문장 이내로 유지하고 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요.

Example: Yes. I live in a city, so there are many tall buildings and skyscrapers near my home. For example, there is a cluster of high-rise apartments and office towers within a ten-minute walk. Because of this, the area feels very urban and busy.

Suggestion: 의사를 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 표현하세요. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고 이유와 빈도(자주/가끔) 같은 구체적 정보로 확장하세요. 동사 어순과 목적어 사용을 바로잡고 반복 표현을 줄이세요. 연결어(so, because, often)로 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하면 좋습니다.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I'm fascinated by skyscrapers. I especially like capturing their reflections and unique shapes, so I usually take pictures when the lighting is good.

Suggestion: 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 구체적인 건물이나 장소를 하나 언급하세요. 현재 시제와 미래 시제를 혼동하지 말고 이유와 기대를 덧붙이세요. 불분명한 표현(‘time scare’)을 피하고 문장을 2~3개로 간결하게 구성하세요.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because it offers a great view of the city. I hope to go there someday and take photos of the skyline from the observation deck.

Suggestion: 왜 살고 싶은지 구체적인 이유를 명확히 제시하세요(공간, 편의시설, 전망 등). 어휘 선택을 정확히 하고(‘modicums’ 대신 ‘modern facilities’), 문장 연결어(because, for example, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 설명하세요. 문장을 2~3개로 유지하고 불확실한 표현(maybe) 대신 확신 있는 표현을 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building usually means more space and modern facilities, such as a gym and security services. For example, a high-rise apartment could be more comfortable and convenient for my lifestyle.

× I think my neighborhood is a city, so there are a lot of skyscraper and high buildings, so there is surrounded and my Co, my city, yeah.

✓ I think my neighborhood is in a city, so there are a lot of skyscrapers and tall buildings surrounding my area.

The sentence mixes singular and plural forms: 'skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers' to match 'a lot of'. 'High buildings' is unnatural; use 'tall buildings'. 'There is surrounded' is ungrammatical; use 'surrounding my area' or 'surrounding my neighborhood'. Also 'my Co, my city' is unclear and omitted for clarity. Suggestions: ensure noun number matches quantifiers (use plural with 'a lot of'), use correct participle form for passive descriptions (surrounded -> surrounding).

× Yes I do then like skyscraper and high building is umm fascinated. I'm fascinated by them so I usually pick take pictures them so.

✓ Yes I do. I like skyscrapers and tall buildings. I'm fascinated by them, so I usually take pictures of them.

Errors include wrong noun forms ('skyscraper' -> 'skyscrapers', 'high building' -> 'tall buildings'), incorrect verb choices and forms ('pick take pictures them' is ungrammatical). Use present participle/continuous only when appropriate; here simple present 'I like' and present 'I'm fascinated' are correct. Also use correct verb + object order 'take pictures of them'. Suggestions: simplify sentences, use correct plural nouns, and standard verb-object order.

× Umm, I I want to go today. Umm, time scare in New York. There's a lot of skyscraper in high building so I don't take the pictures of the scenery.

✓ Umm, I want to go there someday. Umm, time is scarce in New York. There are a lot of skyscrapers and tall buildings, so I didn't take pictures of the scenery.

Multiple issues: 'I want to go today' conflicts with context; 'go there someday' fits intent but keep tense as desired. 'Time scare' should be 'time is scarce' (there be + adjective). 'There's a lot of skyscraper in high building' needs 'There are a lot of skyscrapers and tall buildings' (plural agreement with there be). Also tense for the action of not taking pictures of scenery should be past 'didn't take' if referring to past visit; if speaking generally, 'I don't take' could be used. Suggestions: use correct 'there is/there are' with plural nouns and correct adjective 'scarce', and match tense consistently.

× Yes, I think because it is larger space maybe and various facilities and options like it is equipped with modicums and this is comfortable for me.

✓ Yes, I think because it has larger spaces and various facilities and options; it is equipped with modern amenities and this is comfortable for me.

Problems: 'it is larger space' should be 'it has larger spaces' or 'there is more space' (noun/adjective order and count). 'modicums' is incorrect word; likely intended 'modern' or 'modern amenities'. Use 'equipped with modern amenities'. 'This is comfortable for me' is grammatically okay but could be 'which is comfortable for me'. Suggestions: use appropriate adjectives ('modern') and correct noun phrases ('larger space' -> 'more space' or 'larger spaces'), and use 'has' for possession rather than 'is' for location.