Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep answers concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and long, run-on sentences. Use linking words (for example, because/so/and) correctly and avoid unnecessary personal asides.

Example: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, a cluster of modern office towers sits two blocks away, which is convenient for my photography hobby because they offer interesting angles and lighting for my pictures.

Suggestion: Be more specific and organized: start with a direct yes/no topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples (what types of buildings, how often, purpose). Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and avoid vague phrasing like “something teaching sessions.” Use linking words (for example, because/so/and) to connect ideas clearly.

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings with my husband. For example, we shoot modern glass towers and old colonial facades on weekends, then post curated photo sets and short tutorials on our social media to show composition and editing techniques.

Suggestion: This answer is fairly clear but contains some grammatical errors and exaggeration (“tallest building in the universe”). Use precise language, correct word order, and limit to two or three sentences. Mention one or two reasons for wanting to visit and a concrete plan or expectation.

Example: Yes. I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and offers unique views for photography. My husband and I are planning a trip next month and we hope to shoot panoramic photos from the observation deck.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give clear reasons. Begin with a concise topic sentence (Yes/No), then provide one or two specific reasons. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases like “phobic feelings on mutually living” and irrelevant remarks. Use linking words (however/because) correctly.

Example: No, I wouldn't prefer to live in a very tall building. Although I enjoy photographing skyscrapers, I worry about feeling uneasy at great heights and I prefer a spacious house where my future children can play safely.

× Yes, there are tall buildings near our home in our neighborhood because I'm staying in the city and the reason that we are living in the city because we enjoy being surrounded by high buildings as I'm photographer as well and my husband also has talent and the hobby of taking pictures so we did.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near our home because we live in the city. We enjoy being surrounded by tall buildings. I am a photographer and my husband also enjoys taking pictures, so we do that together.

Multiple present tense and sentence structure errors: 'I'm staying' and 'we are living' are continuous forms that suggest temporary or ongoing actions; simple present 'we live' is appropriate for a general fact. The original is also run-on and repetitive. Break into shorter sentences and use 'tall buildings' instead of 'high buildings' for natural collocation. Use 'enjoys taking pictures' to match subject and simple present for habitual action.

× Yes, Sir Julie, uh, we do love to take, uh, photos for the buildings, as I have mentioned my husband and myself, because we enjoy taking these photos and we post them in our social media accounts, umm, and we share our experience and we give something teaching sessions for the, for the, for the followers in our social media channels to share with them They process.

✓ Yes, we love to take photos of buildings, as I mentioned, my husband and I enjoy taking these photos and we post them on our social media accounts. We share our experiences and give teaching sessions for our followers on our social media channels to show them the process.

Problems include incorrect pronoun 'my husband and myself' (use 'my husband and I' as subject), wrong preposition 'photos for the buildings' (use 'photos of buildings'), and article/preposition errors 'post them in our social media accounts' (use 'post them on'). 'Something teaching sessions' is ungrammatical; use 'teaching sessions'. The sentence was also a run-on; separate into shorter sentences and use plural 'experiences' and 'followers'.

× Yes, I would love to visit Burj Khalifa which is located in Dubai because it's the Burj tallest building in the universe and I did not have the chance yet to visit it.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and I have not had the chance to visit it yet.

Errors: Missing definite article 'the Burj Khalifa'. Word order 'the Burj tallest building' is incorrect; use 'the tallest building'. 'In the universe' is unnatural; use 'in the world'. Use present perfect 'I have not had the chance' to express experience up to now rather than simple past 'I did not have'. Place 'yet' at the end for natural word order.

× However, my husband and I were planning to visit the Burj Khalifa by the next month, so we will enjoy taking some great photos and we will share them in our social media accounts.

✓ However, my husband and I are planning to visit the Burj Khalifa next month, so we will enjoy taking some great photos and will share them on our social media accounts.

Use present continuous 'are planning' for a fixed near-future plan rather than past continuous 'were planning'. 'By the next month' is incorrect; use 'next month'. Use 'share them on' for correct preposition with social media. Omitting repeated 'we' in the second clause improves flow.

× Well, to be honest, I just love the idea of taking photos of these B of these tall buildings. However, I don't prefer living in such tall buildings because umm, I feel I might have some phobic feelings on uh, mutually living in such tall buildings.

✓ Well, to be honest, I love the idea of taking photos of tall buildings. However, I would not prefer to live in such tall buildings because I might feel some fear about living in them.

'I don't prefer living' is awkward; use 'I would not prefer to live' or 'I prefer not to live'. 'Phobic feelings' is unnatural in this context; 'fear' or 'anxiety' is clearer. 'Mutually living' is incorrect and unnecessary. Simplify and use correct verb forms and prepositions: 'feel fear about living in them'.

× And I'm I'm sure that I have kids as well.

✓ And I'm sure that I will have kids as well.

Original mixes present certainty with future meaning. If referring to a future event, use 'will have'. If meaning 'I already have kids', use 'I have kids'. The repeated 'I'm I'm' is a speaking filler; remove duplication. Use a single clear tense to express intended meaning.