Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Corrigez la grammaire et l'accord (par exemple «There are a few...» et «the Eiffel Tower which is...»). Soyez précis: évitez les informations incorrectes (l'Eiffel Tower est à 324 m et il n'y a pas «Eiffel Towers»). Utilisez une phrase thématique claire suivie d'un ou deux détails pertinents et concis pour respecter la limite de 5 phrases.

Example: There are a few tall buildings near my home, mainly modern apartment blocks. For example, one residential tower nearby rises to about 25 stories, which makes it stand out in the neighbourhood.

Suggestion: Améliorez la grammaire, les articles et la précision (par ex. «Sometimes», «on a trip», «the six towers» est vague). Utilisez des liens logiques («because», «for instance») et gardez la réponse concise avec un exemple précis et des détails concrets sur ce qui vous a plu dans l'architecture.

Example: Sometimes I photograph buildings because I like unusual shapes and materials. For instance, on a trip to Chicago I took many photos of the Marina City towers because their circular balconies form a striking pattern.

Suggestion: Clarifiez les faits et la formulation (l'Eiffel Tower se trouve à Paris; il n'y a pas d'«Eiffel Tower in Tokyo»). Reformulez la réponse avec une phrase thème claire et expliquez brièvement pourquoi vous voudriez visiter un bâtiment similaire à l'étranger. Évitez les erreurs factuelles qui nuisent à la crédibilité.

Example: One building I would like to visit is Tokyo Tower because it reminds me of the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I would enjoy seeing how Japanese designers adapted the idea and how it looks lit up at night.

Suggestion: Améliorez la précision et la grammaire: dites «I am afraid of heights» plutôt que «afraid to fall», et corrigez «brake» → «break». Ajoutez un lien logique («also», «besides») et un bref exemple concret pour renforcer l'argument.

Example: I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights. Also, if the elevator broke, climbing many flights of stairs would be tiring, so a low-rise home suits me better.

× There is a few tall buildings near my home, such as apartment buildings or the Eiffel Towers, which has a height of about 300 meters.

✓ There are a few tall buildings near my home, such as apartment buildings or the Eiffel Tower, which has a height of about 300 meters.

The subject 'a few tall buildings' is plural so the verb must be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). 'A few' requires plural noun. 'Eiffel Tower' is a unique singular landmark so it should not be pluralized as 'Eiffel Towers.' Keep the relative clause 'which has a height of about 300 meters' to refer to the single tower. Suggestion: use 'There are a few' and 'the Eiffel Tower.'

× Sometime I photograph buildings for their unique architecture.

✓ Sometimes I photograph buildings for their unique architecture.

The adverb should be 'sometimes' (occasionally) not 'sometime.' 'Sometime' is used for an unspecified time; here the meaning is frequency so use 'sometimes.' Suggestion: use 'sometimes' when describing habitual actions.

× For example, a few years ago I was on the trip in Chicago and I took multiple pictures of the six towers as I found it very impressive with its modern architecture.

✓ For example, a few years ago I was on a trip to Chicago and I took multiple pictures of the six towers because I found them very impressive with their modern architecture.

Use 'a trip' (no article 'the' for a nonspecific trip) and the preposition 'to Chicago.' 'Because' is better than 'as' for cause to avoid ambiguity. 'Six towers' is plural so pronouns and adjectives referring to them must be plural: 'them' and 'their.' Also 'very impressive' describes the towers (plural). Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural pronouns and possessives.

× If there is a building that I would like to see, it will be the Eiffel Tower in Tokyo.

✓ If there were a building that I would like to see, it would be the Eiffel Tower in Tokyo.

This is a hypothetical conditional about an unreal present desire; use the subjunctive/past form 'were' and 'would' for the result clause. 'If there is' with 'will' suggests a real future condition, but the speaker expresses a hypothetical preference. Suggestion: use 'If I were...' or 'If there were...' and 'would' for hypothetical situations.

× I live in Paris and there is nothing more iconic in this city than the Iron Lady, so I would enjoy to see its Japanese version.

✓ I live in Paris and there is nothing more iconic in this city than the Iron Lady, so I would enjoy seeing its Japanese version.

After 'would enjoy' use the gerund form 'seeing' not the infinitive 'to see.' The rest is correct. Suggestion: pair 'enjoy' and modal-like expressions with '-ing' forms: 'enjoy seeing.'

× I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid to fall.

✓ I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of falling.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'afraid' ('afraid of something') and a gerund 'falling' to express the fear of an action. 'Afraid to fall' suggests ability or willingness rather than the fear of the event. Suggestion: say 'afraid of falling.'

× Moreover, if the elevator were to brake, I wouldn't enjoy climbing so many floors by the stairs.

✓ Moreover, if the elevator were to break, I wouldn't enjoy climbing so many floors by the stairs.

The correct verb is 'break' not 'brake.' 'Brake' as a noun/verb refers to slowing; 'break' means to stop working. Here the conditional 'were to break' is correct. Suggestion: use 'break' for something becoming damaged or stopping functioning.