Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 중복되고 단어 선택이 부정확합니다. 답변은 주제 문장으로 바로 시작한 후 구체적인 세부 정보를 한두 문장으로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어 건물 이름, 위치, 규모나 용도 등을 명확히 말하고, 중복 표현(예: "maybe the maybe")과 잘못된 단어(예: "use some building")를 피하세요. 문장은 3~4개로 유지하고 연결어(for example, also)를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, Namton Tower is the tallest in the region and can be seen from many neighborhoods. Another notable building nearby is the Yuseo Center, which houses offices and shops.

Suggestion: 표현이 어색하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 주제 문장으로 시작해 이유를 간단히 말하고, 구체적인 예시와 빈도(예: how often) 또는 감정(reason why)를 덧붙이세요. 단어 선택을 정확히 하고 대명사와 수일치를 맞추세요(예: "pictures of buildings" , "they are").

Example: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings because I enjoy their shapes and views. For instance, I have many photos of Namsan Tower and Yoosan Building, and I usually take pictures when the lighting is good.

Suggestion: 답변은 이해 가능하지만 어순과 문법을 정리하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제 문장을 말한 뒤 이유(높이, 전망 등)를 하나 또는 두 개로 구체화하세요. 장소와 이유를 연결할 때 연결어(because, as, so)를 올바르게 사용하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

Example: I would like to visit the Abeno Harukas building in Japan because it is very tall and offers spectacular views. From the observation deck you can see much of Osaka, which I think would be beautiful to photograph.

Suggestion: 의사를 명확히 표현했지만 문법과 어휘 사용이 어색합니다. 간단한 주제 문장으로 시작한 뒤 이유를 1~2개로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 엘리베이터 고장 시 계단 이용의 불편함이나 안전 문제를 구체적으로 말하고, 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 정확히 사용하세요.

Example: I wouldn't like to live in a very tall building because if the elevator breaks it would be difficult to climb many flights of stairs. Also, I would worry about noise and emergency situations in high-rise apartments.

× Yes, near my home there is Namton Tower which is maybe the maybe the biggest tower in the South.

✓ Yes, near my home there is Namton Tower, which is probably the biggest tower in the south.

'maybe the maybe the' is redundant and ungrammatical; replace with 'probably'. Capitalization: 'south' as a general region is lowercase. Add a comma before the relative clause. Use 'there is' correctly to indicate existence.

× And one more thing is use some building.

✓ Also, there used to be another building.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is that another building existed previously: use 'used to be' to indicate a past state. 'Also' is a better connector than 'And one more thing is'.

× It was the biggest tower.

✓ It was the biggest tower.

Sentence is grammatical as is; it correctly uses past tense 'was' to refer to a previous state. No change needed.

× Yes, I like picturing the buildings when I feel the building is so tall.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of buildings when I think a building is very tall.

Use 'taking pictures' instead of 'picturing' for photographing. 'When I feel the building is so tall' is awkward; 'when I think a building is very tall' is natural. 'Very' is better than 'so' in this context.

× So I have several pictures of building like Namsan tower or Yoosan building and them is good it.

✓ So I have several pictures of buildings like Namsan Tower or Yoosan Building, and they are good.

Use plural 'buildings' to match 'several pictures of'. Capitalize proper nouns. Replace 'them is good it' with 'they are good' to correct pronoun and verb agreement and remove extraneous word.

× The building I would like to visit is Haruka's in Japan because the building is so tall and the view of the building is Osaka is so pretty.

✓ The building I would like to visit is Harukas in Japan because it is very tall and the view of Osaka from it is very pretty.

Possessive/name form unclear: 'Haruka's' likely should be 'Harukas' (proper building name) or 'Haruka Tower'; keep consistent. Replace repeated 'the building' with pronoun 'it'. Reorder 'the view of the building is Osaka' to 'the view of Osaka from it' for clarity. Use 'very' instead of 'so' for natural emphasis.

× In my opinion I don't want leave living live in the tall building because when elevator is broken I go my home, draw the floor and it's so hard to go.

✓ In my opinion, I don't want to live in a tall building because when the elevator is broken, I have to walk up the stairs and it is very hard.

Multiple issues: 'don't want leave living live' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'don't want to live'. Add definite article 'the' before 'elevator'. 'I go my home, draw the floor' is wrong; likely meant 'I have to go to my home by stairs'—better: 'I have to walk up the stairs'. Use present simple with modal-like expression 'have to' to express necessity. Use commas for clarity.