Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a direct clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say you live in a small town and explain where your house is relative to the centre. Avoid redundancy and keep to two sentences.

Example: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small town on the outskirts, so most buildings are low-rise and there is no downtown skyline.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific examples and use linking words. Correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns (e.g., ‘many photos of buildings’, ‘they are very beautiful’). Keep it concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I do. For example, when I traveled to Japan I took many photos of modern skyscrapers and ancient temples because I find their architecture very beautiful.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a specific building and reason. Use linking words to expand. Correct noun phrases (e.g., ‘a building I would like to visit is…’) and the phrase for the architect (‘designed by Gaudí’). Avoid fillers like 'uh' and repeat words.

Example: Yes. A building I would like to visit is the Sagrada Família in Barcelona because it was designed by Gaudí and its unusual shapes and decorations fascinate me.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence (Yes or No) and then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / moreover). Avoid fillers and unclear words. Explain safety or practical concerns concisely.

Example: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I would feel unsafe and uncomfortable using elevators every day. Also, I prefer a house with a garden where I can have more space and privacy.

× No they aren't tall buildings near my home because my home lay on a small sit simo small city and on the not in the downtown.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because my home is in a small city and not in the downtown area.

The original sentence has multiple structure and article issues: incorrect negative contraction with plural noun, missing existential 'there', wrong verb 'lay' for location, unclear phrase 'sit simo', and 'on the not in the downtown' is ungrammatical. Use 'No, there aren't any tall buildings' to express absence, use 'is in a small city' for location, and 'not in the downtown area' for clarity. Remove unclear words. Suggestion: Use 'there is/are' for existence, 'is in' for location, and 'any' with negative statements about countable nouns.

× Yes I do. When I traveled to Japan I took so many photos about the buildings, they very beautiful and I like to take a photo about ancient building too.

✓ Yes, I do. When I traveled to Japan I took many photos of the buildings; they were very beautiful, and I like to take photos of ancient buildings too.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'about' (use 'of' for photos of something), redundant 'so many' (acceptable but 'many' is cleaner), missing verb 'were' to describe past appearance, inconsistency of tense and plurality ('building' should be plural). Use past tense 'were' to match 'traveled' and 'took'. Use plural 'photos' and 'buildings' when plural is meant. Suggestion: Use 'photos of X', match verb tense (past for past actions), and plural nouns when referring to multiple items.

× Yes, I hope one day I can visit Spain because there are beautiful building in uh, Barcelona. Umm, it's called uh, the the builder is name is Gaudi.

✓ Yes, I hope one day I can visit Spain because there are beautiful buildings in Barcelona. One of the most famous builders/architects there is Gaudí.

Errors: 'building' should be plural when referring to several structures ('buildings'), 'the the builder is name is Gaudi' is ungrammatical and redundant. Also 'builder' is better as 'architect' and Gaudí is an architect's name (accent optional). Use 'there are' with plural noun. Provide clear, concise phrasing. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for multiple items and standard phrasing: 'One of the most famous architects there is Gaudí.'

× No, I don't want umm, I like to uh, house, not a sky sky, MMM sky motor, uh, I because I uh, feel not safe and uh uh, every time I went down it's uh, it's terrible.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer a house, not a skyscraper, because I don't feel safe and going down is terrible for me.

Multiple problems: article and word choice errors ('a house' instead of 'house' alone), incorrect phrase 'sky sky' meant 'skyscraper', unnecessary filler words, tense mismatch 'every time I went down' should be general present 'going down' or 'whenever I go down'. Use 'I don't feel safe' for present general feeling. Clean, natural sentence structure improves clarity. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use correct noun 'skyscraper', use 'I prefer' to express preference, and match tense for habitual actions: 'whenever I go down' or 'going down is terrible'.