Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition.

Example: Yes. I live in a commercial district in Taiwan, so there are many tall buildings near my apartment. For example, there are office towers, shopping malls and high-rise apartments within a five-minute walk.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: say whether you take photos, give a specific example, then explain why using a linking word. Use more natural adjectives and avoid repeating similar words.

Example: Yes, I often photograph famous landmarks when I travel. For example, I took many photos of Taipei 101 and Tokyo Tower; I share them with friends because I think their architecture is impressive and photogenic.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and use a clear structure: state the building you want to visit, give two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the historic churches in Europe. I want to see their architecture in person because it reflects centuries of history, and I would also like to photograph and share their stained-glass windows and sculptures.

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary and correct mistakes. Give a clear preference, explain one or two specific reasons using linking words, and use accurate words (e.g. 'detached house' and 'pets').

Example: No, I prefer to live in a detached house. For instance, a detached house usually has a garden where I could keep pets like a dog, and it also offers more privacy and outdoor space.

× Yes, I live in a big city in Taiwan and I live in an apartment, so it there.

✓ Yes, I live in a big city in Taiwan and I live in an apartment, so it is there.

The original sentence omits the verb 'is' after 'so', causing a sentence structure error (missing verb). Add 'is' to form a complete clause: 'so it is there.' Also consider clearer phrasing: 'so there are tall buildings there.'

× I have a lot of tall buildings near my home because actually this area is a commercial area.

✓ I have a lot of tall buildings near my home because, actually, this area is a commercial area.

This sentence mainly needs commas for clarity, not a grammar change. 'Near my home' is correct preposition usage. The issue flagged is minor; punctuation improves readability. Alternatively: 'There are a lot of tall buildings near my home because this area is commercial.'

× Yes, when I visit some specific landmark, I will take photos for them, just like Taipei 101 or Tokyo Tower in Japan.

✓ Yes, when I visit a specific landmark, I will take photos of it, such as Taipei 101 or Tokyo Tower in Japan.

Use 'a' for countable singular 'landmark' and 'of it' instead of 'for them' when referring to a single landmark. 'Such as' is better than 'just like' in this context. This corrects noun article and pronoun reference and uses appropriate verb-object structure.

× And I will share these photos with my friends or my parents and tell them those buildings are splendid and gorgeous.

✓ I will share these photos with my friends or my parents and tell them that those buildings are splendid and gorgeous.

Add 'that' to introduce the content of what you will tell them; this clarifies the clause. Pronoun 'them' correctly refers to people; ensure 'those buildings' matches plural photos.

× Actually I very want to visit some churches in Europe because I think I can learn a lot of historic knowledge from from the churches and also I want to share these beautiful picture.

✓ Actually, I really want to visit some churches in Europe because I think I can learn a lot of historical information from the churches, and I also want to share these beautiful pictures.

'Very want' is incorrect; use 'really want.' 'Historic knowledge' is awkward; 'historical information' or 'history' is better. Remove duplicated 'from'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'some churches.' Add commas for clarity.

× No, actually I want to live in an independent darling because those independent buildings may have a wide range of gardens that I can raise pace just like a dog or a cat.

✓ No, actually I want to live in an independent dwelling because those independent buildings may have large gardens where I can raise pets such as a dog or a cat.

'Darling' is the wrong word; use 'dwelling' or 'detached house.' 'Wide range of gardens' is awkward; 'large gardens' is clearer. 'Raise pace' is incorrect; intended word is 'pets.' Use 'where' to introduce location. 'Such as' introduces examples of pets.