Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Avoid incorrect or awkward words (e.g., 'Yet', 'top buildings') and small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details with appropriate linking words, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Replace 'Since I'm visiting' with accurate phrasing and use precise vocabulary like 'high-rises' or 'skyscrapers'.

Example: Yes. There are several tall buildings near where I live, including high‑rise apartments and office towers. For example, one skyscraper even contains a shopping mall, which makes daily shopping very convenient.

Suggestion: Fix word choice and clarity: avoid starting with 'Yet' and be consistent between 'photos' and 'videos'. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly and give a specific example to support your answer. Keep sentences natural and grammatical.

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I find both modern and historic architecture fascinating. For instance, I recently took photos of a restored Victorian building and shared the best shots on Instagram.

Suggestion: Good clear answer and reasons. Improve by combining ideas with linking words and adding a specific detail to make it more vivid. Avoid repetitive words like 'so'.

Example: Yes, I would most like to visit the Eiffel Tower because it is world‑famous and offers excellent views of Paris. Also, many films and photographs have shown its romantic atmosphere, so I hope to experience that myself, perhaps at sunset.

Suggestion: Answer is clear with reasons. Improve grammar (e.g., 'facilities which make' → 'facilities, which make' or 'facilities that make'), and add a brief specific example or contrast. Use one linking phrase like 'for example' or 'also'.

Example: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building would give me great views and better security; for example, many towers have 24‑hour concierge services and modern gyms that make daily life more convenient.

× Yet there are several tall buildings near where I live.

✓ There are several tall buildings near where I live.

Using 'Yet' at the start is incorrect in this context because 'yet' is a conjunction/adverb indicating contrast and requires a clause it contrasts with. The sentence simply states a fact, so begin with 'There are'. Suggestion: remove 'Yet' or replace with 'However' only when contrasting with a previous statement.

× Since I'm visiting, my neighborhood has lots of top buildings such as high rise apartments, office towers, and even a shopping mall inside one of the skyscrapers, which makes everything very convenient.

✓ Since I'm visiting, my neighborhood has lots of tall buildings such as high-rise apartments, office towers, and even a shopping mall inside one of the skyscrapers, which makes everything very convenient.

'Top buildings' is not the appropriate adjective choice; 'tall' or 'high-rise' fits better. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: use 'tall buildings' or 'high-rise apartments' and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× Yet I often take photos of buildings because I find the modern architecture and the old historical buildings fascinating.

✓ I often take photos of buildings because I find the modern architecture and the old historical buildings fascinating.

Beginning with 'Yet' is unnecessary and incorrect here; 'yet' implies contrast with a previous idea. Remove 'Yet' to make a clear declarative sentence. Suggestion: start with the subject 'I'.

× Sometimes they are just too amazing now to picture them.

✓ Sometimes they are just too amazing to photograph.

The original mixes ideas awkwardly: 'now' is unnecessary and 'picture them' is informal and slightly unclear. 'Too amazing to photograph' is a clearer, grammatically correct phrase. Suggestion: replace 'picture them' with 'photograph them' and remove 'now'.

× I often post these videos on social media.

✓ I often post these photos on social media.

The preceding sentences discuss taking photos, not videos; using 'videos' is inconsistent. If the speaker means photos, change to 'photos'. Also ensure pronoun 'these' matches 'photos'. Suggestion: keep consistent vocabulary ('photos').

× It's so famous and it will be amazing for me to see it in person.

✓ It's so famous, and it would be amazing for me to see it in person.

Mixing present 'is' with future 'will be' here is acceptable but 'would be' is more natural when expressing desire or hypothetical experience. Use 'would be' to show a personal wish. Suggestion: use modal 'would' to express imagined experience.

× Also, it's so romantic and has appeared in so many films and photos.

✓ Also, it's so romantic and has appeared in so many films and photos.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. It is retained for completeness. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I definitely want to live in a tall building because the view from the window would be amazing and these buildings usually have better security and the modern facilities which makes my life more convenient and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to live in a tall building because the view from the window would be amazing, and these buildings usually have better security and modern facilities which make my life more convenient and comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'facilities which makes' is incorrect because 'facilities' (plural) requires 'make'. Also 'the modern facilities' can drop 'the' for naturalness. Add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb ('facilities... make') and streamline article use.