Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct nouns. Use linking words to add details (e.g., “however,” “for example”). Be specific about what the buildings are used for and their appearance.

Example: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home, but not many. Most are office buildings for companies; however, there are also some apartment blocks. For example, two office towers stand beside the river and a residential high-rise is next to the main road.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary. Say when and why you would photograph buildings, and use linking words to explain. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and give a specific example.

Example: Not usually, unless a building is especially beautiful or has a unique design. For example, I photographed an old cathedral when I visited the city because its stained-glass windows and façade were impressive.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by using a linking word to connect ideas and include a brief detail about what specifically interests you (e.g., the view or history). Keep sentences concise and fix small tense issues.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building because its Art Deco design fascinates me and it offers spectacular views of New York City. I visited New York a few years ago but didn’t go there, so I would definitely go next time.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence expressing your overall position, then explain reasons with linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., “tower apartments” → “high-rise apartments”) and grammar. Provide specific pros and cons (views, convenience, noise, safety) in 1–2 supporting sentences.

Example: It depends, but I would consider living in a tall building in a major city. For example, high-rise apartments can offer great views and convenience, but they may also be noisy or feel less private, so I would choose one with good security and insulation.

× Some of them are officers for some companies usually, but the majority are regular beatings.

✓ Some of them are offices for some companies, usually, but the majority are regular buildings.

The student used the plural noun 'officers' (people) instead of 'offices' (rooms/buildings) and wrote 'beatings' which is incorrect; the intended word is 'buildings'. This is a singular/plural and word choice error. Replace 'officers' with 'offices' and 'beatings' with 'buildings'. Also move 'usually' to follow a comma for natural word order.

× I don't really take photos for beings at last they're really beautiful or really unique design or something like that.

✓ I don't really take photos of buildings unless they're really beautiful or have a really unique design or something like that.

The student used incorrect prepositions and words: 'photos for beings' should be 'photos of buildings'; 'at last' is incorrect in this context and should be 'unless'; 'really unique design' needs 'have a' before it. Correct preposition is 'of' when photographing something; use 'unless' for the conditional meaning and include the verb 'have' to link 'design'.

× Rather than that, I don't think I would particularly take a photo for some beauties.

✓ Other than that, I don't think I would particularly take photos of something just because it's beautiful.

The phrase 'take a photo for some beauties' is unnatural and uses incorrect quantifier and preposition. Use 'photos of' and a clearer quantifier phrase like 'something just because it's beautiful'. 'Other than that' is a more natural connector than 'Rather than that' here.

× Yes, I would like to visit Empire State Building because I think the design of it was really cool and I've been to New York a couple of years ago, but I didn't go there.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building because I think its design is really cool; I went to New York a couple of years ago, but I didn't go there then.

The building name needs the definite article 'the'. Use the possessive pronoun 'its' instead of 'the design of it'. Tense consistency: 'I went to New York a couple of years ago' (simple past) fits, and add 'then' to clarify timing; avoid mixing past perfect unnecessarily.

× If there's a chance next time, I would definitely go to visit.

✓ If there's a chance next time, I will definitely go to visit.

For a real future condition with 'if', use 'will' in the main clause rather than 'would'. 'Would' is used for hypothetical or unreal conditions. Also 'go to visit' can be simplified but is acceptable; keep 'go to visit' if desired.

× Some toll apartments was really good.

✓ Some tall apartments were really good.

The student wrote 'toll' instead of 'tall' (wrong word) and used 'was' with the plural 'apartments'. Correct plural verb agreement is 'were'. Also 'tall apartments' is the intended phrase.

× I think it has beautiful view of it.

✓ I think it has a beautiful view.

The phrase 'beautiful view of it' is awkward and redundant. Use the article 'a' before 'beautiful view' and remove the redundant 'of it'. If referring to a location, you could say 'a beautiful view of the city'.

× But I think in general it depends.

✓ But I think, in general, it depends.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation for clarity: commas around 'in general'. The tense 'think' and 'depends' are appropriate present tense; add commas to improve readability.

× I think, uh, if it's in New York or London, then yes.

✓ I think, uh, if it's in New York or London, then yes, I would live there.

Original sentence is a fragment answering the question; adding 'I would live there' completes the idea. Tenses are modal present conditional; 'would' is appropriate here to express willingness given conditions.