Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using a linking word. Fix run-on sentence by splitting or using a connector. Add a brief specific detail (e.g., location or what makes it famous).

Example: Yes. There is a tall skyscraper near my home called the Mayo Tower. It is famous for its rooftop restaurant and bar, so many locals and tourists visit it for the panoramic views of the city.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and word choice, and tighten sentences. Use linking words to connect idea and give one specific example of a technique or composition you use. Avoid plural/singular errors and awkward phrasing.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings at night because the artificial lights and reflections make scenes more dramatic. For example, I often capture the city skyline from the riverbank to include both illuminated windows and streetlights, which creates strong contrast and a moody atmosphere.

Suggestion: Correct tense and word choice, and remove unclear phrase (“spectacular wheels”). Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons. Use a linking word to connect reasons and correct minor errors.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Bayok Tower because it has a variety of restaurants and several rooftop bars with spectacular views. I have never been there before, so I’m keen to try the food and see the city from the top.

Suggestion: Make the response more coherent and grammatical. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "views" twice) and fix grammar errors.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy seeing the city lights at night. In addition, the higher elevation feels peaceful and relaxing, and I would love to have a balcony where I can watch the skyline every evening.

× There is a tall skyscraper near my home called the Mayo Tower is a famous building with a restaurant and rooftop bar.

✓ There is a tall skyscraper near my home called the Mayo Tower; it is a famous building with a restaurant and a rooftop bar.

Run-on sentence and incorrect linking after 'There is'. Use a semicolon or split into two sentences and add the pronoun 'it' to introduce the second clause. Also include the article 'a' before 'rooftop bar'. Suggestion: split into two sentences or use a semicolon and add 'it' to make the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× So many locals and tourists visit it for the view.

✓ So many locals and tourists visit it for the views.

The noun 'view' in this context usually takes plural 'views' when referring to different vantage points or scenic sights. Use plural to sound natural: 'the views.'

× I enjoy taking photos of building at night because the artificial light and reflection make the scene feel more lively and dramatic.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of buildings at night because the artificial lights and reflections make the scene feel livelier and more dramatic.

Use plural 'buildings' to match general statement. Use preposition 'of' already present; main issues are plural nouns. 'Artificial light' and 'reflection' should be plural here because multiple light sources and reflections are implied. Use comparative adverb 'livelier' and include 'more' for 'dramatic' to form correct comparative structure. Also 'at night' placement is fine.

× For example, I like capturing the city skyline with illuminate window and street light, which create interesting contrast and moods.

✓ For example, I like capturing the city skyline with illuminated windows and street lights, which create interesting contrasts and moods.

Use the past participle adjective 'illuminated' to describe windows, and plural 'windows' and 'street lights' to match. 'Contrast' should be plural 'contrasts' to match 'moods'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which create' is correct for plural noun phrase.

× I would love to visit the Bayok Tower because it had a variety of restaurants and several rooftop bars with spectacular wheels.

✓ I would love to visit the Bayok Tower because it has a variety of restaurants and several rooftop bars with spectacular views.

The modal 'would' indicates present conditional desire, so use present tense 'has' rather than past 'had'. Also 'spectacular wheels' is likely a mistaken word; 'views' fits context. Use present simple to describe current features.

× I have never been there before so I'm keen to try to the food and see the city from the top.

✓ I have never been there before, so I'm keen to try the food and see the city from the top.

Remove the extra infinitive marker 'to' before 'the food' — correct phrase is 'try the food' or 'try some food'. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. The structure 'keen to try' already uses infinitive 'to try' correctly.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I love seeing the city light at night, the view from higher views very peaceful and relaxing and it would be nice to watch the skyline for my balcony.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I love seeing the city lights at night; the view from higher up is very peaceful and relaxing, and it would be nice to watch the skyline from my balcony.

Fix multiple issues: use plural 'lights' for city lights; 'the view from higher views' is incorrect — use 'the view from higher up' or 'from a higher floor'. Add linking words and punctuation: use semicolon or commas to separate ideas. 'Watch the skyline for my balcony' is incorrect preposition; use 'from my balcony'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'the view ... is'.