Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence and one brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., avoid fragmented sentence).

Example: Yes — there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Tokyo, a densely built-up city. For example, tall apartment blocks and office towers line the main streets nearby.

Suggestion: Start with a direct statement, then add one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words to improve coherence (e.g., 'but', 'because', 'for example').

Example: Yes, I do sometimes. When I visit cities I often photograph famous buildings and neon signs at night because the lights create a beautiful atmosphere — for example, I photographed a lit-up street in Shinjuku last month.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the building, then provide specific reasons (history, views, architecture). Avoid vague phrases and finish sentences fully.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I want to see it because it is an iconic historical landmark with remarkable ironwork, and I’m curious about the views of the city from the top.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give one clear, specific reason with a brief explanation. Avoid repeated phrases and improve grammatical accuracy (e.g., 'I'm afraid there might be earthquakes').

Example: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building. I’m concerned about earthquakes in Japan, so I prefer a low-rise house where I’d feel safer and find evacuating easier in an emergency.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings around my home because it's Tokyo, so there's a lot of building. Surrounding my home.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings around my home because it's Tokyo, so there are a lot of buildings surrounding my home.

The phrase 'a lot of building' uses the singular 'building' where the plural is required. Use 'buildings' to agree with 'a lot of' and the plural noun reference. Combine the fragmented sentence 'Surrounding my home.' into the previous sentence to make it grammatically complete. Suggestion: Use plural nouns after quantifiers like 'a lot of' and avoid sentence fragments.

× Yes, I think for photos of buildings, not always, but when I'm in urban cities I like to take famous buildings and neon signs in the night city because I find it beautiful.

✓ Yes, I think I don't always take photos of buildings, but when I'm in urban areas I like photographing famous buildings and neon signs in the city at night because I find them beautiful.

The original mixes forms and has awkward phrasing. Use the gerund 'photographing' (verb + -ing) to express the activity generally. Also change 'urban cities' (redundant) to 'urban areas', 'in the night city' to 'in the city at night', and ensure plural agreement 'them beautiful' for 'buildings and neon signs.' Suggestion: Use gerunds for hobbies/activities and keep noun phrases concise.

× Yes, I have a place that I want to visit and that is Paris Eiffel Tower, because Eiffel Tower sounds like a symbol like Tower of France and I want to visit there because it's historical and.

✓ Yes, there is a place I want to visit: the Eiffel Tower in Paris, because the Eiffel Tower is a symbol of France and I want to visit it because it is historic.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'Eiffel Tower' and correct word order 'Eiffel Tower in Paris.' 'Tower of France' is incorrect; use 'symbol of France.' 'Visit there' should be 'visit it' referring to the tower, and 'historical and.' was incomplete; use 'historic' or 'historical' with a complete clause. Also remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: Use articles with specific landmarks and ensure pronoun references and sentence completion.

× No, I do not want to live in a tall building in the future because I'm afraid there's there must be some earthquake in Japan in the future.

✓ No, I do not want to live in a tall building in the future because I'm afraid there might be an earthquake in Japan.

The original mixes phrases 'there's there must be' which is ungrammatical and overuses 'in the future.' Use 'might be' to express possibility in the present/future. Remove redundant time phrases. Suggestion: Use modal verbs like 'might' or 'could' for possibility and avoid repeating time expressions.

× So I don't want to live in the tall building, so I don't have to be scared of emergencies, natural disasters such as earthquake.

✓ Therefore I don't want to live in a tall building because I don't want to be afraid of emergencies or natural disasters such as earthquakes.

The sentence uses 'so' twice and has awkward clause connections. 'the tall building' incorrectly uses the definite article; use 'a tall building' or no article. 'such as earthquake' needs plural 'earthquakes.' Rephrase to connect cause and effect clearly: 'because I don't want to be afraid of...'. Suggestion: Use one clear conjunction (because/so/therefore), correct article use, and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.