Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Rút gọn câu trả lời để tự nhiên hơn, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ‘uh’. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó đưa một ví dụ cụ thể với số liệu chính xác và mô tả ngắn. Chú ý ngữ pháp (a a → a) và trật tự từ (a building about 100 metres).

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a Mountain Group hotel about 100 metres high stands very close by, and there are several modern apartment towers nearby.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp ý và sửa cấu trúc ngữ pháp. Nêu một lý do chính rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết (khi nào/như thế nào). Dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh nói unfinished phrases.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because I hope to design tall buildings in the future, so I study their shapes and details. I usually take photos during golden hour because the light makes facades look stunning.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh tiếng ‘uh’ lặp lại; nói tên tòa nhà rõ ràng và cung cấp lý do cụ thể và duy nhất (ví dụ trang trí, đài quan sát). Dùng liên từ để nối câu và mô tả chi tiết hơn về điều thu hút bạn.

Example: Yes — I would love to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. It is the tallest building in Vietnam, and I want to go to its observation deck to enjoy panoramic city views and see its modern architecture up close.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Sửa câu để rõ nghĩa (remove 'cannot' mistake), rút gọn và cụ thể hóa lý do (view, convenience, facilities). Thêm liên từ để câu trôi chảy và tránh lặp từ 'I can'.

Example: Yes, I would. I want to live in a tall building because I could enjoy beautiful panoramic views from my window, especially sunrise and sunset. Also, tall buildings often offer convenient facilities like gyms and secure parking.

× Just near my home there are many tall buildings. For example, a hotel of Mountain Group has a a building with uh, about 100 meters near my house and many other buildings.

✓ Just near my home there are many tall buildings. For example, a hotel of the Mountain Group has a building about 100 meters tall near my house, along with many other buildings.

The phrase 'a hotel of Mountain Group' needs the definite article 'the' before the company name and 'Mountain Group' functions as a proper noun; 'a a' is a typo; 'a building with about 100 meters' is unidiomatic — use 'a building about 100 meters tall' or 'a building that is about 100 meters tall'. Also 'many other buildings' is fine. Suggestion: include 'the' for specific organizations, remove duplicate 'a', and use 'tall' after the measurement for natural English.

× Yes I do. I like take photos of buildings because I want to build a a high buildings in the future and I like take photos because it is very stunning and.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking photos of buildings because I want to build a tall building in the future, and I like taking photos because they are very stunning.

After verbs like 'like', use the gerund ('taking') rather than the base form. 'A high buildings' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a tall building' or 'high buildings' without 'a'. 'It is very stunning' is mismatched; 'photos' is plural so use 'they are' or rephrase to 'because it is very stunning' referring to a scene. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'like', match article with noun number, and ensure pronoun agreement with countable nouns.

× Yes, there is, uh, I like, I would like to visit, uh, landmark, landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. This is the highest uh, building of Vietnam and uh, I really like to go to visit because it is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. This is the tallest building in Vietnam, and I really want to visit it because it is very beautiful.

'The highest building of Vietnam' is awkward; use 'the tallest building in Vietnam'. Also 'landmark, landmark 81' is repetitive and punctuation can be improved. 'I really like to go to visit' is redundant — use 'I really want to visit it'. Suggestion: use 'tallest' for buildings, avoid repetition, and use natural verbs like 'want to visit' or 'would like to visit'.

× Yes, I do. I really want to live in a tall building because when I get up in the morning I cannot. I can look at a beautiful landscape out the window and I can look at sunset in the afternoon.

✓ Yes, I do. I really want to live in a tall building because when I get up in the morning I can look at a beautiful landscape out of the window, and I can watch the sunset in the afternoon.

'I cannot. I can look' is contradictory and likely a fragment from hesitancy; remove 'cannot'. Use 'out of the window' or simply 'from the window' instead of 'out the window'. 'Look at sunset' should be 'watch the sunset' or 'look at the sunset' with the definite article. Suggestion: remove contradictory or unnecessary words, use 'from/out of the window', and use 'watch the sunset' for natural expression.