Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitions and filler words (umm, repeated words). Use correct collocations (e.g., “tall buildings,” “town centre,” “greenery” or “natural scenery”).

Example: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. My house is in the town centre of a provincial area, so it's mostly low-rise houses and lots of greenery rather than skyscrapers.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then one clear example of what you photograph and why. Use clearer vocabulary for digital actions (e.g., “I upload them to the cloud” or “post them on social media”) and avoid unclear abbreviations.

Example: Yes, I sometimes photograph buildings. For example, I often take pictures of mall facades that show the store logos, and then I upload the best shots to cloud storage and post a few on my social media.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the building you want to visit, then add one or two specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrasing and grammar errors; mention the building or place by name and explain its significance briefly.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Big Hit Entertainment building in Seoul because it's associated with my favourite band, BTS. I want to see the place where they began and learn more about their history and training.

Suggestion: Answer directly and coherently. Start with a clear statement (yes or no), give 1–2 reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”), and avoid dramatic or colloquial phrases like “snap my cup of tea.” Mention a specific preference and reason (e.g., fear of heights, accessibility).

Example: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I prefer a low-rise, simple house that is more accessible. Also, I'm afraid of heights, so living high above the ground would make me uncomfortable.

× No, you can't see much at all infrastructure buildings near our house because, umm, our house is located at the Town Center of the town and we are surrounded by greeneries.

✓ No, you can't see many large infrastructure buildings near our house because our house is located in the town center and we are surrounded by greenery.

Pronoun and noun choice: 'you can't see much at all infrastructure buildings' is ungrammatical. Use 'many' for countable plural 'buildings'. 'Infrastructure buildings' is awkward; 'large infrastructure buildings' or simply 'large buildings' is better. Use 'in the town center' (preposition) not 'at the Town Center of the town'. 'Greeneries' is incorrect; the uncountable noun is 'greenery'. Suggestion: use 'many' with plural countable nouns and use standard collocations like 'in the town center' and 'greenery'.

× Mainly because it's the province, and the province is known for having a lot of natural natural wonders.

✓ Mainly because it's a province, and the province is known for its many natural wonders.

Article and pronoun use: 'it's the province' sounds specific; use 'a province' if speaking generically. Repetition 'natural natural' is an error. Use the possessive 'its many natural wonders' for concise, correct phrasing. Suggestion: avoid repeated words and use 'a' for general statements and 'its' to link the province to its features.

× I do keep photographs of certain buildings like the front of a mall where you can see the look of their trademark in front.

✓ I keep photographs of some buildings, for example the front of a mall where you can see its trademark.

Quantifier and pronoun agreement: 'I do keep' is unnecessary emphatic; 'I keep' is natural. 'Certain' is acceptable, but 'some' is simpler. 'The front of a mall where you can see the look of their trademark in front' is wordy and uses 'their' incorrectly for 'a mall' (singular). Use 'its trademark.' Suggestion: simplify and ensure pronouns agree with singular nouns.

× I use it as a cloud for social media where I post it as a MMM as a update.

✓ I upload them to the cloud for social media and post them as updates.

Preposition and article use: 'use it as a cloud' is odd; you 'upload to the cloud' or 'store in the cloud.' 'Post it as a MMM as a update' is unclear and has article error: 'a update' should be 'an update.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('upload to', 'store in'), pluralize to match 'photographs' and use 'an update' if singular.

× I have visit, I have a long list to visit, but on top of that I liked I would love to visit the big building where the boy my favorite boy brand boy band BTS first UMM shared their genes were they first started.

✓ I have a long list of places to visit, and I would love to visit the big building where my favorite boy band, BTS, first started.

Verb tense and sentence structure: 'I have visit' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is possession of a list, so 'I have a long list of places to visit.' 'I liked I would love' is confused; use 'I would love' or 'I would like.' The phrase about BTS is messy: 'the big building where my favorite boy band, BTS, first started' is clearer. Remove 'shared their genes' (nonsensical) and filler 'UMM.' Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct auxiliary verbs and clear noun phrases.

× Tall buildings and snap my cup of tea.

✓ Tall buildings are not my cup of tea.

Incorrect idiom and verb use: 'snap my cup of tea' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'not my cup of tea.' Use 'are' to link subject and complement. Suggestion: use established idioms exactly and include appropriate linking verb.

× I prefer a lower rise and simple house where everything's accessible.

✓ I prefer a low-rise, simple house where everything is accessible.

Word order and adjective use: 'lower rise' is incorrect; the common adjective is 'low-rise.' Use a comma between coordinate adjectives 'low-rise, simple house.' Contraction 'everything's' is acceptable but expand to 'everything is' for clarity. Suggestion: learn common compound adjectives like 'low-rise' and order adjectives properly.

× On top of that, I have a big I am afraid of heights so I can't be in tall buildings.

✓ Also, I am very afraid of heights, so I can't be in tall buildings.

Sentence fragmentation and word order: 'I have a big I am afraid of heights' is fragmented and includes an extra phrase. Use 'I am very afraid of heights' for correct present tense and adverb use. Suggestion: remove redundant or broken phrases and use correct adjective/adverb ('very afraid').

× I won't survive.

✓ I probably wouldn't survive.

Modal nuance and register: 'I won't survive' is an absolute future statement. As a personal opinion about tolerating heights, 'I probably wouldn't survive' or 'I doubt I would' is more natural. Suggestion: use modal auxiliaries to show uncertainty or hypothetical situations.