Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words and fix location names and word order. Use linking words if adding details.

Example: Yes. I live in central Tokyo, so many tall buildings surround my apartment. For example, Roppongi Hills is very close to my home, and its skyscrapers dominate the skyline.

Suggestion: Improve fluency by removing fillers and combining sentences with a linking word. Provide a specific example of what appeals to you to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially historical architecture. For example, when I travel abroad I always photograph old cathedrals and traditional houses because I like their intricate details.

Suggestion: Be direct and avoid unclear phrases. If you can't think of a future building, mention a memorable one you have visited with specific details. Correct the name and finish your sentence. Use linking words to show contrast or clarification.

Example: I can't think of a specific building I want to visit right now. However, I once visited the Sagrada Família in Spain, which was amazing—its soaring columns and detailed facades inspired me, and I took many photos there.

Suggestion: Eliminate contractions and fillers, and give a clear reason followed by a precise preference. Use linking words to connect the reason and the consequence.

Example: No, I wouldn't. I'm afraid of heights, so I prefer not to live in very tall buildings. For safety and comfort, I would choose a middle floor, for example between the fourth and eighth floors.

× Yes, I currently live in a central Tokyo in Japan, so my buildings are surrounded by taller buildings.

✓ Yes, I currently live in central Tokyo in Japan, so my building is surrounded by taller buildings.

Use of the definite article 'a' before 'central Tokyo' is incorrect because 'central Tokyo' is a proper place name and does not need an indefinite article. Also 'my buildings are surrounded' suggests multiple buildings owned by the speaker; likely the speaker means their building (singular). Ensure singular/plural matches the intended meaning: 'my building is surrounded by taller buildings.'

× For example, near my house Roppongi holds it on the Azabad hills are located.

✓ For example, near my house Roppongi is located on Azabu Hill.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('holds it on', 'are located'). Reorder to subject + verb + place: 'Roppongi is located on Azabu Hill.' Use the correct place name form and singular 'Hill' if referring to one hill. Remove unnecessary pronouns.

× Yes, I like taking photos of buildings.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings.

This sentence is correct; the gerund 'taking' is properly used after 'like.' No change needed.

× Especially historical architecture attracts me uh, when I visit uh, uh, foreign countries, I always take photos of the buildings.

✓ Especially historical architecture attracts me; when I visit foreign countries, I always take photos of buildings.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant article 'the' before 'buildings.' Use a semicolon or a period to separate the two ideas. 'Historical architecture' is fine; ensure punctuation and flow are improved.

× Well, I don't come up with a particular building now.

✓ Well, I can't think of a particular building right now.

'Don't come up with' is unnatural in this context. Use 'can't think of' to express inability to recall. 'Right now' is more natural than 'now' in this phrasing.

× However, I visited Sakura Familiar in Spain, which was amazing and inspiring, and I also took a photo of the.

✓ However, I visited La Sagrada Familia in Spain, which was amazing and inspiring, and I also took a photo of it.

The place name was incorrect ('Sakura Familiar' is likely a misheard 'La Sagrada Família'). Use the correct name and add the pronoun 'it' to complete 'took a photo of it.' Also correct country if necessary; La Sagrada Família is in Barcelona, Spain.

× Not actually, I'm afraid of height so I don't wanna live in a taller buildings.

✓ Not really; I'm afraid of heights, so I don't want to live in a tall building.

Use 'not really' rather than 'not actually' for a natural response. 'Afraid of heights' is the idiomatic phrase (plural). 'Wanna' should be formalized to 'want to.' Use singular 'a tall building' rather than 'a taller buildings' which mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove comparative 'taller' unless comparing to something.

× However, uh, in terms of safety concerns, I'd like to live in uh, middle floors such as from 4th to 8th.

✓ However, in terms of safety, I'd like to live on middle floors, such as from the 4th to the 8th.

Remove filler 'uh.' Use 'in terms of safety' or just 'for safety' for concision. Preposition for floors is 'on middle floors.' Include definite article 'the' before ordinal numbers ('the 4th to the 8th'). 'Middle floors' is plural and matches the range given.