Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 主題文を明確に述べ、不要な繰り返しや曖昧な言い回しを避けること。具体的な比較と場所の情報を簡潔に補足し、接続詞（for example, however, whereas）を適切に使って文の流れを良くしましょう。発音や文法の不確かさ（時制や単数・複数）にも注意してください。

Example: Yes. When I lived in Tokyo, there were many tall, modern buildings. However, where I currently live is a rural area, so the buildings are much smaller in comparison.

Suggestion: 回答は簡潔に保ち、同じ内容を繰り返さないこと。また、具体例を述べる際は過去形や所有格などの文法に注意し、接続詞（for example, especially, such as）で情報を整理してください。語順と冠詞（a/the）が正しいか確認しましょう。

Example: I occasionally photograph buildings when I travel. For example, when I visited Spain I took many photos of Gaudí's spectacular buildings because I found their shapes and colors fascinating.

Suggestion: 主題文で直接答えた後、なぜ行きたいのかを具体的に述べてください。情報を整理し、映画や建築の関係を明確に説明すること（例えば、"model for an animation"など）。形容詞の使い方や語順を改善し、一文を長くし過ぎないでください。

Example: Yes. I would like to visit a temple in Taiwan that inspired an animation called "Zebra." The temple is famous for its scenic views and unique architecture, so I want to see its cultural features and take photos.

Suggestion: まず簡潔に肯定/否定で答え、その理由を明確に述べてください。地震に関する説明は論理的に整理し、語順や冠詞（a/the）、数（singular/plural）を正しく使いましょう。接続詞（because, so, therefore）で原因と結果をつなげると良いです。

Example: No, I wouldn't. Two floors would be enough for me because I used to live in Japan, where earthquakes are common, and I think living in a very tall building could be more dangerous during quakes.

× Well, if they are, I used to live in Tokyo, there's, there's a lot of the huge and modern buildings.

✓ Well, when I lived in Tokyo, there were a lot of huge, modern buildings.

The student mixed present and past tenses. 'Used to live' indicates past, so the description of buildings should be past ('there were'). Also 'a lot of the huge and modern buildings' is ungrammatical: use 'a lot of huge, modern buildings' without 'the' and use commas for adjective order. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and remove unnecessary articles; say 'When I lived in Tokyo, there were a lot of huge, modern buildings.'

× However, uh, when I, where I live, uh, was in rural area.

✓ However, the place where I lived was a rural area.

Tense and word order are incorrect. 'Where I live' conflicts with past context; use past 'where I lived'. Also use article 'a' before 'rural area' and place 'the place' to clarify. Suggestion: Use 'the place where I lived was a rural area.' to keep correct tense and natural order.

× So compared with the central, it was smaller building.

✓ So compared with the center, the buildings were smaller.

Number agreement error: 'smaller building' mismatches comparison; plural 'buildings' fits with 'compared with the center'. Also 'central' is an adjective; use 'the center' or 'central area'. Suggestion: Use plural noun to match context: 'the buildings were smaller.'

× Well, occasionally I do, especially when I travel, uh, but I don't usually take a photo of building, but only when I go to the travel, especially when I went to the, uh, to Spain, there is a Gaudi's buildings, which was, which was really spectacular.

✓ Well, occasionally I do, especially when I travel, but I don't usually take photos of buildings; only when I travel. For example, when I went to Spain, there were Gaudi buildings which were really spectacular.

Multiple issues: 'take a photo of building' needs plural 'photos of buildings' (singular/plural), and 'go to the travel' is ungrammatical—use 'travel' or 'traveling'. Tense consistency: 'when I went to Spain' is past, so describe using past 'there were' and 'were'. Also 'Gaudi's buildings' is better as 'Gaudi buildings' or 'buildings by Gaudi'. Suggestion: Keep consistent plural forms and past tense: 'When I went to Spain, there were Gaudi buildings which were really spectacular.'

× So I took a photo alone.

✓ So I took a photo of it.

The phrase 'took a photo alone' is unclear and unnatural. Likely intended 'took a photo of it' referring to the building. Use direct object 'it' rather than 'alone'. Suggestion: Say 'I took a photo of it.' or 'I took photos.' depending on meaning.

× Well, yes, there is. I'd like to visit the temple which is in Taiwan.

✓ Well, yes, there is. I'd like to visit a temple in Taiwan.

Using 'the temple which is in Taiwan' implies a specific temple previously mentioned; use 'a temple in Taiwan' for general desire. Article choice and relative clause can be simplified. Suggestion: Use 'a temple in Taiwan' unless referring to a specific known temple.

× And this temple is the model of the the zebra animation.

✓ This temple is the model for the movie 'Zebra Animation'.

Awkward wording: 'model of the the zebra animation' is incorrect. Use 'model for' and 'movie' or 'animation'. Also remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: Say 'This temple inspired the movie Zebra Animation' if meaning that way.

× And this movie is really famous and the scenic scene, the view is really a spectacular and cultural. Struct.

✓ The movie is very famous, and the scenery and views are spectacular and culturally significant.

Word choice and order are incorrect: 'scenic scene' is redundant, 'a spectacular and cultural. Struct.' is ungrammatical. Use 'scenery' and 'views', and 'culturally significant' for meaning. Suggestion: Use clear nouns and adjectives: 'the scenery is spectacular and culturally significant.'

× Well, no, I don't If I have the two floor it, it will be the enough for me because I used to live in Japan.

✓ No, I don't. Two floors would be enough for me because I used to live in Japan.

Run-on and incorrect modal/tense structure: 'I don't If I have...' is fragmented. Use conditional 'Two floors would be enough' and separate sentences. Also 'the two floor' wrong article and singular; use 'two floors'. Suggestion: Use conditional modal 'would' for hypothetical: 'Two floors would be enough for me.'

× So there's a lot of the earthquake often and I know that it, uh, it's, it's gonna be the dangerous to live in a high to a tall buildings.

✓ There are a lot of earthquakes, and I know it would be dangerous to live in tall buildings.

Multiple errors: 'there's a lot of the earthquake often' incorrect quantifier and number—use plural 'earthquakes' and 'a lot of' without 'the'. 'It's gonna be the dangerous' is informal and wrong article; use 'it would be dangerous'. 'a high to a tall buildings' is ungrammatical; use 'tall buildings'. Suggestion: Use correct plural and modal: 'There are many earthquakes, so it would be dangerous to live in tall buildings.'