Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward words (“valuation”), remove repetition, and add a specific detail about how you prepare or eat udon. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Example: My favourite food is Japanese udon noodles. I like them because they are quick to cook and very comforting. For example, I usually add spinach, mushrooms and a light soy-based broth, which makes a simple but tasty meal.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, remove hesitations, and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, give a brief reason, and include a specific example or memory. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

Example: When I was young I liked eating fast food. I often went to McDonald's and KFC because the food was tasty and affordable. As a child, buying a burger or fries was an easy treat when I had pocket money.

Suggestion: Clarify your meaning and avoid filler words. Use a clear topic sentence stating whether your diet changes by season, then give a specific and coherent explanation. Replace vague phrases like “phenomena” with concrete details and use correct grammar for contractions or possessives.

Example: Not really — my eating habits do not change much with the seasons. For example, I enjoy lemons year-round because I like their fresh, tangy flavour and often add lemon to drinks or salads whether it is hot or cold outside.

Suggestion: Use a clear past-to-present structure and correct tense. State the change, give specific examples of foods you avoided then and ones you enjoy now, and avoid repetition and filler. Use linking words like “however” or “now” to show contrast.

Example: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I avoided bitter vegetables like kale and bitter gourd, but now I enjoy them and also like spicy dishes such as kimchi and spicy grilled chicken. These flavours even pair well with drinks when I go out with friends.

× My favorite food is Japanese traditional noodles, which is called udon.

✓ My favorite food is the traditional Japanese noodle called udon.

Word order for adjectives in English typically places 'traditional' before the noun and 'Japanese' as a noun-adjective; also use 'the' for a specific type and use singular 'noodle' as a category. Suggestion: say 'the traditional Japanese noodle called udon.'

× I like udon because it is easy to make and easy to enjoy its valuation.

✓ I like udon because it is easy to make and easy to enjoy.

The noun 'valuation' is incorrect here; 'enjoy' is transitive but you can say 'easy to enjoy' without an object. Suggestion: remove 'its valuation' and say 'easy to enjoy.'

× For example, I only add udon to some some vegetables, which is very delicious.

✓ For example, I just add udon and some vegetables, which is very delicious.

Double 'some' is an error and the preposition 'to' is awkward; use 'add udon and some vegetables' to show combination. Also 'which' refers to the dish, so keep that structure. Suggestion: avoid repeated words and use correct word order.

× When I was a young, I tend like to uh, junk food.

✓ When I was young, I tended to like junk food.

Use the phrase 'when I was young' (no article), and match past tendency with past tense 'tended to like.' 'Tend like' is incorrect collocation. Suggestion: use 'tended to like.'

× I often eat, uh, McDonald's and KFC because it is more Nergish, but it's a little bit cheaper so I can buy even though I have a little money.

✓ I often ate McDonald's and KFC because they are more energizing, and they are a little cheaper so I could buy them even when I had little money.

Multiple issues: past tense is required to match 'when I was young'; use plural pronoun 'they' for multiple chains; 'Nergish' is likely 'energizing' (word choice), and pronouns for objects needed. Also 'even though I have a little money' should be past 'when I had little money.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct pronouns.

× Yes, I eat lemon in all, all seasons because I can enjoy it's uh, it's, uh, taste and it's phenomena such as it's cold or hot.

✓ Yes, I eat lemons in all seasons because I can enjoy their taste and how they are served, whether cold or hot.

Use plural 'lemons' for a general habit (or 'eat lemon' is unnatural), and use plural possessive pronoun 'their.' 'It's' is contraction for 'it is' and incorrect; use 'their' or 'they are.' 'Phenomena' is plural of 'phenomenon' but awkward; rephrase to 'how they are served.' Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct possessive pronouns.

× So it does not depend on the seasons.

✓ So it does not depend on the season.

'Seasons' can be used, but singular 'the season' is more natural after 'depend on.' The main issue is consistency and collocation. Suggestion: use 'depend on the season' or 'depend on the seasons' consistently; 'depend on the season' is cleaner here.

× Yes, when I was a child I hesitated to eat some bitter bitter vegetables, but now that I I be a a adult I tend to like food which has some bitter taste and the spicy taste and it's fit to some alcohols.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I hesitated to eat some bitter vegetables, but now that I am an adult I tend to like foods with a bitter or spicy taste, and they go well with alcohol.

Multiple issues: remove duplicate words, use past tense 'hesitated' is fine, present 'I am an adult' required, use plural 'foods' or 'food' with 'with a bitter or spicy taste.' 'It's fit to some alcohols' is ungrammatical — use 'they go well with alcohol.' Suggestion: avoid repetitions, use 'I am,' and choose natural collocations like 'go well with alcohol.'