Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but quite repetitive and slightly disorganised. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., use words like “flavourful,” “aromatic,” “tradition”) and avoid repeating phrases such as “so much” and “I really enjoyed.”

Example: My favourite food is jollof rice because it is aromatic and full of flavour. For example, my mother makes a rich tomato and pepper base which gives it a smoky, spicy taste, and we always share it with family at festive gatherings. As a result, it feels comforting and nostalgic whenever I eat it.

Suggestion: The response answers the question but is informal and contains unnecessary phrases (e.g., “made so many rants,” “I guess”). Improve coherence by opening with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason using linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “rarely ate solid food,” “preferred beverages”).

Example: When I was young I rarely ate solid food and preferred drinking juices and smoothies. For instance, I would often choose fruit smoothies at lunch because they were easy to drink, so my mother used to worry that I wasn’t getting enough nutrients.

Suggestion: The answer is relevant but informal and repetitive. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace casual words like “yummy” with more descriptive language, and correct grammar (use “my family and I” and complete sentences).

Example: Yes, we eat different foods seasonally; for example, at Christmas my family and I enjoy a large roast turkey. We gather at my mother’s house for a festive meal, which is always well-seasoned and brings everyone together.

Suggestion: Your answer is brief and repetitive. Give a clear topic sentence, then explain how and why your tastes changed with a specific example and linking words. Use precise phrasing (e.g., “my tastes matured,” “I began to enjoy savoury dishes like jollof rice”).

Example: Yes, my favourite food has changed as I grew older because my tastes matured. When I was a child I preferred sweet or liquid foods, but now I enjoy savoury meals like jollof rice due to its complex flavours and the social occasions associated with it.

× I enjoy eating jollof rice so much so that it is my favorite food.

✓ I enjoy eating jollof rice so much that it is my favorite food.

The phrase 'so much so that' is acceptable but here the extra 'so' is redundant. Removing the second 'so' makes the sentence concise and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'so much that' to show degree and result.

× It has so many flavors and the process of making it is so interesting.

✓ It has so many flavors, and the process of making it is very interesting.

Using 'so' twice in close proximity is stylistically weak. Replacing the second 'so' with 'very' or adding a comma improves rhythm and formality. Suggestion: vary intensifiers to avoid repetition.

× I got to visit my mother last Christmas and she made the dish for me.

✓ I visited my mother last Christmas, and she made the dish for me.

'Got to visit' is colloquial but not incorrect; however, simple past 'visited' is clearer and matches the rest of the narration. Use a comma before 'and' linking two independent clauses.

× I really enjoyed eating it.

✓ I really enjoyed eating it.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no change. Explanation: 'enjoyed' correctly expresses past experience.

× I had it with friends and family and there was so much joy.

✓ I had it with friends and family, and there was so much joy.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses. The quantifier 'so much joy' is acceptable; punctuation improves clarity.

× I didn't like to eat so much when I was young which is a great contrast to my current self.

✓ I didn't like to eat much when I was young, which is a great contrast to my current self.

'So much' is awkward here; 'much' after negative is more natural. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which...'. Suggestion: use 'much' with negatives and punctuate nonrestrictive clauses.

× I preferred to drink juices and smoothies compared to eating food.

✓ I preferred drinking juices and smoothies to eating food.

After 'prefer' the structure is 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer to do X rather than do Y.' Use 'to' not 'compared to,' and use parallel gerunds: 'drinking' ... 'eating.'

× My mother always complained and made so many rants about me not wanting to eat, but that was just how I am I guess.

✓ My mother always complained and often ranted about my not wanting to eat, but that was just how I was, I guess.

'Made so many rants' is awkward; use 'ranted' or 'often ranted.' Use the gerund with possessive 'my not wanting' for clarity. Maintain past tense 'was' when referring to childhood, and add commas for clarity. 'I guess' set off by comma.

× Yes, at Christmas we get to eat more Turkey than any other time of the year.

✓ Yes, at Christmas we get to eat more turkey than at any other time of the year.

'Turkey' should be lowercase as a food (not the country). Use 'than at any other time' for parallel comparison.

× I and my family gather at my mother's house to have a big pot roast of Turkey.

✓ My family and I gather at my mother's house to have a big pot roast of turkey.

Conventional English places the speaker last: 'my family and I.' Also 'turkey' lowercase. 'Pot roast of turkey' is fine; ensure word order is natural.

× It is usually yummy and I always enjoyed myself.

✓ It is usually yummy, and I always enjoy myself.

Mixing present 'is usually' with past 'enjoyed' is inconsistent. Use present 'enjoy' to match habitual action. Add comma before 'and.'

× Love eating Turkey so much.

✓ I love eating turkey so much.

This is a sentence fragment missing the subject 'I.' Add subject and lowercase 'turkey.' Suggestion: always include subject for complete sentence.

× Yes, my favorite food changed since I was a child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'has changed since' to describe a change that occurred over time up to now. 'Since' with a point in time typically pairs with present perfect.

× I believe that when I got older my taste changed and I began to prefer the different meal compared to when I was a child.

✓ I believe that as I got older my tastes changed, and I began to prefer different meals compared to when I was a child.

Use 'as I got older' (more natural), plural 'tastes' for general preferences, and plural 'meals' if speaking generally. Add a comma before 'and.' 'Different' should directly modify 'meals.'