Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor errors; use a clear topic sentence, combine short fragments, and include one specific detail (e.g., favorite sushi type). Avoid repetition. Improve grammar (e.g., 'it is a heaven' -> 'it is heaven on a plate').

Example: I’m really into sushi at the moment because I love its light, refreshing flavors. As a pescetarian, I especially enjoy salmon nigiri and spicy tuna rolls, which balance vinegared rice and fresh fish perfectly. Last weekend I tried a new sushi bar with my cousin and was impressed by the freshness and presentation.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and reduce filler words. Use correct names and consistent capitalization (e.g., 'rice hopper' -> 'appa' or 'appam'; 'chickpea Curry' -> 'chickpea curry'). Add a specific sensory detail or reason why you liked it.

Example: I loved South Indian food when I was young because my mother cooked it at home. For example, appam (rice hoppers) with spicy chickpea curry was my favorite— I remember enjoying the soft, slightly fermented appam with the flavorful, tangy curry every weekend.

Suggestion: Be precise and avoid contradicting phrasing ('not because... but they are affordable' implies flavor isn't a reason). Use linking words to explain reasons and give one specific example of seasonal change beyond fruit. Remove fillers and repetition.

Example: Yes, I do. I prefer seasonal produce because it tastes better and is cheaper. For instance, in autumn I eat many pears and apples, while in summer I eat mangoes and fresh cucumbers, which keep me hydrated.

Suggestion: Provide a clear contrast and correct grammar mistakes ('focused into' -> 'focused on', 'started experiment' -> 'started experimenting', 'are my top favorite' -> 'has become my favourite'). Remove the vague word 'tanky' (probably 'tangy' or 'subtle') and give a concise reason and one example of a dish.

Example: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I mainly ate South Indian food cooked by my mother, but over time I started trying other cuisines. Now I prefer Japanese food because it’s subtle and fresh; for example, I often choose sushi and miso soup for a light, satisfying meal.

× These days I'm really into sushi because I absolutely enjoy how refreshing they are.

✓ These days I'm really into sushi because I absolutely enjoy how refreshing it is.

The noun 'sushi' is treated as an uncountable/mass noun in this context, so the pronoun should be singular 'it' not plural 'they'. Use 'it' to refer back to uncountable food items or a general concept of the dish.

× Just vinegar rice wrapped in seafood.

✓ It's just vinegared rice wrapped in seafood.

This fragment lacks a verb and article and uses incorrect form 'vinegar rice'. To be a complete sentence, add a subject and verb ('It's') and use the adjective form 'vinegared' to describe the rice.

× Being a pescetarian, it is a heaven for me in a plate.

✓ Being a pescetarian, it is heaven on a plate for me.

Use the idiomatic expression 'heaven on a plate' and 'heaven' does not usually take the indefinite article here. Also word order 'for me' is better at the end. This fixes idiomatic adjective/adverb usage and article placement.

× Recently I went to the sushi place with my cousin and it turned out to be great.

✓ Recently I went to a sushi place with my cousin and it turned out to be great.

Minor article choice: 'a sushi place' is more natural than 'the sushi place' unless a specific place was already mentioned. The tense 'went' is correct; this correction targets article usage and natural phrasing.

× To be honest, I was not a picky eater.

✓ To be honest, I was not a picky eater.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to show no error of listed types.

× I absolutely loved anything that my mom used to make.

✓ I absolutely loved anything my mom used to make.

Remove the unnecessary 'that' for more natural spoken English; grammar remains correct either way but omission is more natural.

× Having said that, I really enjoyed eating South Indian food because I am from India, the South of India, Kerala to be exact.

✓ Having said that, I really enjoyed South Indian food because I'm from the south of India, Kerala to be exact.

'Omit 'eating' after 'enjoyed' when referring to a type of food; use contraction 'I'm' for natural speech and lowercase 'south' when used as a direction. This improves sentence structure and style.

× So umm rice hopper and chickpea Curry was my favorite because for a long time I was vegetarian.

✓ So, um, rice hopper and chickpea curry were my favorites because I was a vegetarian for a long time.

When listing two items ('rice hopper and chickpea curry') the verb should be plural 'were'. Use plural 'favorites' or 'my favorite foods'. Also 'curry' should be lowercase. Reorder 'for a long time' to sound natural.

× I try to incorporate seasonal fruits and vegetables into my diet, not because they are rich in flavour but they are affordable at that time of the season.

✓ I try to incorporate seasonal fruits and vegetables into my diet, not because they are richer in flavour but because they are more affordable at that time of year.

Compare qualities using comparative form 'richer' and use parallel structure with 'because'. 'At that time of year' is the natural expression rather than 'at that time of the season'.

× Currently I'm eating a lot of pear because they are in season with apples.

✓ Currently I'm eating a lot of pears because they are in season along with apples.

Use plural 'pears' to match 'a lot of'. 'In season with' is unidiomatic; use 'in season along with' to show both are in season.

× To an extent, yes. While I was a child, I was more focused into eating a South Indian food and that's what my mom cooks for me.

✓ To an extent, yes. When I was a child, I focused more on eating South Indian food, and that's what my mom cooked for me.

Use 'when' instead of 'while' for simple past habitual action, 'focused on' (not 'focused into'), and past tense 'cooked' to match 'when I was a child'. Also remove unnecessary article before 'South Indian food'.

× But as I grew older, I started experiment with various cuisine.

✓ But as I grew older, I started experimenting with various cuisines.

After 'started' use the verb + -ing form 'experimenting'. Also plural 'cuisines' is appropriate when referring to different types of food.

× Currently Japanese cuisine are my top favorite because they are not that spicy yet very tanky and delicious at the same time.

✓ Currently Japanese cuisine is my top favorite because it is not that spicy yet very tasty and delicious at the same time.

'Cuisine' is a singular noun so use 'is' and pronoun 'it'. Correct 'tanky' to 'tasty'. Maintain singular agreement throughout the sentence.

× I'm really into sushi these days.

✓ I'm really into sushi these days.

This sentence is already correct; no change needed.