Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and focused: start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourites, then give one specific reason and one brief example. Avoid repetition and correct minor grammar errors (e.g., “cheesecake,” “is is”). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

Example: My favourite main food is rice, and for dessert I love cheesecake. I prefer rice because it’s versatile and filling, for example I often eat it with vegetables and grilled chicken. Also, I enjoy cheesecake occasionally because its creamy texture feels like a special treat.

Suggestion: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and one or two specific reasons or examples explaining the change. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “however,” “later”) and avoid repeating phrases like “I've learned” twice. Correct small errors in tense and fluency.

Example: As a child I liked junk food such as chips and sweets because my friends and family often ate them. However, as I grew older I realized they were unhealthy, so I started choosing healthier snacks like fruit and nuts instead.

Suggestion: Clarify and organize your response: give one clear example of a seasonal or occasion-based food and explain briefly what you eat and why. Avoid unclear words and filler phrases; pronounce and name festivals correctly (e.g., Ramadan, Eid al-Fitr, Eid al-Adha). Keep to two or three sentences and use linking words like “for example” and “during.”

Example: Yes. During Ramadan we break our fast with dates and soup, and at Eid al-Fitr families often prepare sweet dishes and special meat stews. These foods are traditional and help bring family members together for the celebrations.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear statement about change, then give specific details about what changed and why. Fix grammar (e.g., “has changed,” “I learned,” “chips”), avoid contradictions like “gave up completely” then “I still love chips,” and use linking words such as “however” correctly to contrast ideas.

Example: Yes, my preferences have changed. I used to eat a lot of chips and sweets as a child, but after learning about nutrition I switched to healthier options like grilled fish and salads. I still enjoy the occasional packet of chips, but now I eat them much less often.

× My favorite food is rice and my favorite sweet food is cheesecake and my favorite fruits are apple and banana.

✓ My favorite food is rice, my favorite sweet is cheesecake, and my favorite fruits are apples and bananas.

The nouns 'apple' and 'banana' should be plural when referring to them as categories ('my favorite fruits are apples and bananas'). Also the sentence is long and needs commas and parallel structure: 'favorite sweet food' shortened to 'favorite sweet' for naturalness. Improve by making items parallel and using plural forms for countable nouns when referring to types or general items.

× I believe I picked the healthiest yet my favorite as well and things I love to eat.

✓ I believe I picked the healthiest one, which is also my favorite and something I love to eat.

Missing noun after 'healthiest' requires 'one' or similar. The original sentence has awkward coordination and missing relative pronoun. Use 'which' to link clauses and 'one' after superlative to maintain grammatical structure.

× I'm proud that my favorite food is not something junk and even the sweet is is cheese.

✓ I'm proud that my favorite food is not junk, and even the sweet is cheese.

'Something junk' is incorrect; use 'not junk' or 'not something junky'. Also there was a repeated 'is is' and 'the sweet is cheese' is more natural as 'even the sweet is cheese'. Ensure no duplicate verbs and use correct adjective form ('junky' if using 'something junky').

× When I was young, I remember I was so much into junk food, sweets, chips.

✓ When I was young, I remember being very into junk food, sweets, and chips.

Use gerund after 'remember' when recalling a past state: 'remember being' rather than 'remember I was'. Also 'so much into' is informal; 'very into' is clearer and commas and 'and' needed in the list.

× These were my favorite as a child because I didn't know better.

✓ These were my favorites as a child because I didn't know any better.

'Favorite' should be plural ('favorites') when referring to multiple items. Add 'any' in 'didn't know any better' for natural idiomatic expression.

× And I was influenced by the people around me who kept, who kept going for this type of food.

✓ I was influenced by the people around me who kept going for this type of food.

Remove redundant repetition 'who kept, who kept'. Begin sentence without 'And' for formality. The corrected sentence is more concise and grammatically correct.

× And I grew up and I've learned that these are not healthy and I've learned.

✓ As I grew up, I learned that these foods are not healthy.

Avoid repeating 'I've learned' twice. Use past simple 'learned' to match 'grew up' and rephrase for clarity. Also specify 'foods' for clarity.

× Yes, we eat different food at different time of the year depending on the occasion.

✓ Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year depending on the occasion.

Use plural 'foods' when referring to various types, and 'times' for repeated instances during the year. Ensure plural agreement for general statements.

× For example in the Islamic calendar we have Ramadan, we have either filter and we have Eid al-Adha.

✓ For example, in the Islamic calendar we have Ramadan, Eid al-Fitr, and Eid al-Adha.

'Either filter' is incorrect; the festival is 'Eid al-Fitr'. Also add commas and 'and' to list events properly. Use correct proper noun spellings.

× These are three type of occasion.

✓ These are three types of occasions.

'Type' should be plural 'types' and 'occasion' should be plural 'occasions' when referring to multiple items.

× Where we eat different foods depends on the occasion and food actually will are attached to these occasions.

✓ We eat different foods depending on the occasion, and certain foods are actually associated with these occasions.

Original sentence has incorrect clause order and 'will are' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'depending on the occasion' and use 'are associated with' to express attachment between foods and occasions.

× For example any other factor we eat **** and needle at how we eat meat.

✓ For example, depending on other factors we eat different dishes and vary how we prepare meat.

Original contains nonsense '**** and needle' and unclear structure. Replace with clear phrasing: 'depending on other factors' and specify varying dishes and preparation methods.

× Definitely my favorite food has a change.

✓ Definitely my favorite food has changed.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate a change from past to present. 'Has a change' is incorrect collocation.

× When I was young I was so much into junk food, chips and sweets.

✓ When I was young, I was very into junk food, chips, and sweets.

Use 'very into' instead of 'so much into' for natural phrasing. Add commas for list clarity.

× When I grew up I learn a lot about more healthy food and I started to be more into it to incorporate it more into my eating schedule and I gave up completely on junk food.

✓ When I grew up, I learned a lot about healthier foods, and I started to incorporate them more into my eating routine, so I gave up junk food completely.

Use past tense 'learned' to match 'grew up'. Use comparative adjective 'healthier' and plural 'foods'. 'Eating schedule' is awkward; 'eating routine' is better. Reorder clauses for cohesion and place 'completely' after 'junk food' for natural emphasis.

× However, I still love ships but I I go for the healthy.

✓ However, I still love chips, but I choose healthier options.

'Ships' is a misspelling of 'chips'. Remove duplicate 'I'. 'I go for the healthy' is awkward; 'I choose healthier options' is clearer and grammatically correct.