Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence stating one or two favourite foods, then give one specific detail (why you like it) using a linking word. Avoid vague or incorrect place references and reduce filler words (umm). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Example: My favourite food is Tom Yum, a spicy Thai soup. I like it because of the strong sour-and-spicy flavour and fresh herbs, which always cheer me up. For variety I also enjoy traditional Kazakh dishes like beshbarmak because they remind me of family celebrations.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons or a brief comparison to now. Remove repetitive phrases and finish the thought. Use linking words like 'because' or 'but' to connect ideas.

Example: When I was young I mainly liked fast food such as burgers and fries because they were tasty and easy to eat. However, as I grew older I began to appreciate more diverse and healthier meals, so my preferences changed.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and give a clear example. Explain the pattern by using linking words (for example, however, because). Correct unclear item names and avoid fillers. One or two specific seasonal examples suffice.

Example: Not really — my daily diet stays the same most of the year. However, during holidays like New Year we eat special dishes such as pilaf and festive sweets, which we only prepare on those occasions.

Suggestion: State the change clearly and give a specific reason and example. Use a linking word to contrast past and present (e.g. 'but', 'however'). Remove unclear phrasing and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I preferred sweet snacks and desserts, but now I prefer spicy dishes because I enjoy bold flavours and spices. This shift happened after I tried more international cuisines in my teens.

× In general, I have many favorite foods and it depends on my mood.

✓ In general, I have many favorite foods, and it depends on my mood.

The sentence was missing a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses. Adding the comma improves clarity. Suggestion: place a comma before 'and' when joining two complete sentences.

× But for example, my first favorite food is Tom Yum.

✓ For example, my top favorite food is Tom Yum.

The phrase 'first favorite' is awkward; use 'top favorite' or 'favorite' to express preference rank. Also avoid starting with 'But' when not contrasting. Suggestion: use concise expressions like 'my favorite' or 'my top favorite'.

× It's umm, Thai national food in Bishop Market is Kazakh national food.

✓ For example, Tom Yum is a national Thai dish, while beshbarmak in the Bishop Market is a Kazakh national dish.

The original sentence wrongly combined two clauses and mixed subjects, causing confusion. I supplied a clear contrast with separate clauses and corrected structure. Suggestion: state each country's national dish separately and use 'while' or 'whereas' for contrast.

× I love different types of food because I think it's broadened your hearts.

✓ I love different types of food because I think they broaden your horizons.

'It's broadened your hearts' uses incorrect tense and pronoun and an odd collocation. Use plural 'they' for 'different types of food', present simple 'broaden', and the idiom 'broaden your horizons' instead of 'broaden hearts'. Suggestion: match subject number and use common idioms.

× When I was younger, I always loved burgers and some French fries because I was younger and I didn't know about any other types of food and I didn't really care about any types of food.

✓ When I was younger, I always loved burgers and French fries because I didn't know about other kinds of food and I didn't really care about different foods.

Redundant phrase 'because I was younger' is unnecessary. 'Some French fries' is unnatural; use 'French fries' or 'some fries'. Also 'any other types of food' and 'any types of food' are awkward; use 'other kinds of food' and 'different foods'. Past tense 'loved' and 'didn't know' are correct. Suggestion: remove redundancy and choose natural noun phrases.

× So I think it really.

✓ So I still think that now.

The original fragment 'So I think it really.' is incomplete and unclear. A complete thought like 'So I still think that now' or 'So I still like them' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: ensure each sentence contains a clear subject and verb.

× Personally I don't think so because it depends on the holidays.

✓ Personally, I don't think so because it depends on the holiday or the occasion.

'Depends on the holidays' is not wrong but can be more natural as 'depends on the holiday or the occasion' to refer to specific times. Also add a comma after 'Personally'. Suggestion: add comma after introductory adverb and use singular/plural carefully depending on meaning.

× For example, when it's new year we usually eat different types of food, but in other days we eat like umm daily basis food, for example Peshmerga and some types of food that we eat every day.

✓ For example, at New Year we usually eat special foods, but on other days we eat everyday food, for example pilaf and other dishes we eat regularly.

Multiple issues: use 'at New Year' or 'for New Year', not 'when it's new year'; 'daily basis food' is unidiomatic; 'Peshmerga' is likely incorrect for a food name—replaced with 'pilaf' as a plausible common dish (adjust if student meant a specific dish). Clarify 'some types of food that we eat every day' to 'other dishes we eat regularly'. Suggestion: use idiomatic phrases like 'special foods', 'everyday food', and correct dish names.

× Remarkably, yes, because I am that kind of person that if I love something, I won't leave it for soon.

✓ Remarkably, yes, because I am the kind of person who, if I love something, won't give it up easily.

Problems: use 'the kind of person who' not 'that'; 'won't leave it for soon' is ungrammatical—use 'won't give it up easily' to express persistence. Removed 'for soon' and adjusted relative pronoun. Suggestion: use 'who' with people and common collocations like 'give it up easily'.

× So my taste in food has changed when I was younger and I always love some sweet foods and now I love spicy food.

✓ So my taste in food has changed since I was younger: I used to always love sweet foods, but now I love spicy food.

Mixing present perfect 'has changed' with 'when I was younger' is awkward—use 'since I was younger' with present perfect. Also change 'I always love' to past 'I used to always love' to indicate past habit. Added contrast 'but now' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'since' with present perfect and 'used to' for past habits.