Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and grammatically accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid redundancy. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “healthy” not “health”) and vary word choice slightly.

Example: I really like apples. They are healthy and convenient, so I eat one almost every day. For example, I often have an apple as a mid-morning snack because it keeps me full and gives me energy.

Suggestion: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure; use a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with linking words. Don’t use ‘snakes’—likely meant ‘snacks’. Avoid short fragmented sentences by combining into one or two coherent sentences.

Example: When I was young, I liked snacks and fast food, such as hamburgers and fries. Although I knew they were unhealthy, I ate them often because they tasted good and were convenient.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and fix word choice and grammar. Give one clear contrast between seasons with correct linking words. Use accurate vocabulary for dishes and months, and avoid unclear or misspelled words.

Example: Yes, I do. In summer I usually eat lighter foods like salads and fresh fruit because the weather is hot. In winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes such as roasted vegetables and soups; for example, in January I often make pumpkin soup to stay warm.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence stating whether your preference changed, then give reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, plural nouns) and avoid unclear short fragments. Explain benefits of new preference with specific detail.

Example: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I liked fast food such as hamburgers and fries, but now I prefer salads and fruit because I want to stay healthy and keep slim. For instance, I choose a salad for lunch most days to control my weight.

× My favorite food is apples. I think it's health to my body and I eat it every day.

✓ My favorite food is apples. I think they're healthy for my body and I eat them every day.

The adjective 'health' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'healthy'. Also 'apples' is plural, so refer to them with the plural pronoun 'they' and object pronoun 'them'. Use 'for' to show benefit to the body. Replace 'it's' with 'they're' and 'it' with 'them' to match plurality. Suggestion: Use adjective 'healthy' to describe effect and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Some snakes and fast food. Example hamburger and potatoes.

✓ Some snacks and fast food, for example hamburgers and potatoes.

The speaker likely meant 'snacks' not 'snakes' (word choice). 'Hamburger' should be plural 'hamburgers' to match the general category and 'Example' should be integrated as 'for example'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking about categories in general.

× Even though it's bad for my body but I like it.

✓ Even though it's bad for my body, I still like it.

Using both 'even though' and 'but' is redundant; choose one connector. 'Even though' already introduces the contrast, so remove 'but' and add a comma. Use 'still' to emphasize contrast. Suggestion: Avoid using 'even though' and 'but' together; use one contrast marker.

× Yes I do. I tend to eat lighter fresh food like salad and fruit in summer because it's hot and heavy.

✓ Yes, I do. I tend to eat lighter, fresh foods like salads and fruit in summer because it's hot and humid.

Add comma after 'Yes'. 'Food' as a general category is better pluralized to 'foods' and 'salad' should be plural 'salads' for general habits. 'Hot and heavy' is incorrect collocation for weather; likely 'hot and humid' or 'hot and dry'. Also add comma between adjectives 'lighter, fresh'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general habits and choose appropriate weather adjective.

× Warming dishes such as rye and roasted vegetable Inverness to stay warmer.

✓ I prefer warming dishes such as rye and roasted vegetables in winter to stay warm.

Sentence structure is broken. 'Warming dishes' is fine but 'rye' is a grain; perhaps 'rye dishes' or 'rye bread' depending on meaning. 'Roasted vegetable' needs plural 'vegetables'. 'Inverness' seems a wrong word; likely 'in winter'. 'To stay warmer' should be 'to stay warm'. Reorder to 'I prefer warming dishes such as rye and roasted vegetables in winter to stay warm.' Suggestion: Check word choice (Inverness vs winter) and maintain correct word order and form.

× For example, in Atom I often cook pumper soup.

✓ For example, in autumn I often cook pumpkin soup.

The word 'Atom' is incorrect; likely 'autumn'. 'Pumper soup' is incorrect; likely 'pumpkin soup'. Also 'often cook' with 'in autumn' is fine present habitual; keep present simple. Correct spelling and word choice. Suggestion: Use correct seasonal name 'autumn' and correct food name 'pumpkin soup'.

× When I was child I like fast food like hamburger and fry or snakes, but now I like salad and fruit.

✓ When I was a child I liked fast food like hamburgers and fries or snacks, but now I like salads and fruit.

'When I was child' needs article 'a child'. Past habits require past tense 'liked'. 'Hamburger' and 'fries' should be plural when speaking generally. 'Fry' is wrong form; use 'fries'. 'Snakes' is incorrect word; use 'snacks'. 'Salad' should be plural 'salads' for general preference. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits, include article 'a', and correct plural forms and word choices.

× It can be more. Keep slim.

✓ I can be slimmer. I want to keep slim.

Original fragments lack clarity and correct grammar. 'It can be more' is unclear; likely 'I can be slimmer' or 'I can lose weight'. 'Keep slim' needs a subject and tense: 'I want to keep slim' or 'I try to stay slim'. Provide full sentences. Suggestion: Use complete sentences with a subject and verb; express desire/ability clearly.