Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more natural: state your habit with a correct number, avoid repetition and unclear words, and give a brief reason using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I try to walk about 5,000 steps a day because I don’t exercise enough, and walking helps me stay healthy and feel more energetic.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary: give a topic sentence then one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "a lot of time."

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child I was healthier and played several sports, for example soccer and swimming, so I spent much of my free time being active outdoors.

Suggestion: Good ideas — improve fluency and grammar: use singular 'in my opinion' or 'I think', link reasons with connectors, and make descriptions more concise and natural.

Example: I think people walk in parks because they are peaceful and away from traffic; moreover, parks offer green space with trees, flowers and sometimes wildlife, which makes the walk more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Be more fluent and precise: avoid fillers, use correct nouns (space → spaces or open spaces), and combine ideas with linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I would love to walk in Central Park in New York. Although I’ve never been, it appears to have large open spaces and wildlife, so it would be peaceful to walk there and maybe have a picnic.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and be specific: use past tense correctly, avoid hesitation sounds, and give one clear reason or example. Limit to two sentences.

Example: Recently I went for a walk in the local mall. I stayed there for a long time with my family because there are many shops and restaurants, so we went shopping and ate together.

× I set a daily goal to try 1000 steps per day because I'm I don't practice enough exercise so I think it's healthy for me to try disco.

✓ I set a daily goal to try to walk 1000 steps per day because I don't get enough exercise, so I think it's healthy for me to try walking.

Errors: incorrect use of verb forms and redundant words. 'try 1000 steps' is ungrammatical; use 'try to walk 1000 steps' or 'try walking 1000 steps'. 'I'm I don't practice enough exercise' contains an extra 'I'm' and wrong collocation 'practice exercise' — native phrasing is 'I don't get enough exercise'. Use the gerund 'walking' after 'try' when emphasizing the activity, or 'try to walk' for intention. Suggestions: remove the extra 'I'm', use 'get enough exercise', and choose appropriate 'try to' vs 'try -ing' structure based on meaning.

× In fact, when I was a child I was more healthier, so I practiced different sports.

✓ In fact, when I was a child I was healthier, so I practiced different sports.

Error: incorrect comparative form 'more healthier' — 'healthier' already is the comparative of 'healthy' and should not be combined with 'more'. Suggestion: use 'healthier' alone or 'more healthy' (less common). Keep comparative form consistent.

× So I was in movement a lot of time.

✓ So I was on the move a lot of the time.

Errors: incorrect idiom and missing article. 'in movement' is not natural English; the idiom is 'on the move'. Also 'a lot of time' needs 'the' to mean frequently ('a lot of the time'). Suggestion: use 'on the move a lot of the time' for natural phrasing.

× In my opinions, they like to walk in parks because it's a quiet place, far from traffic, from the noise of the city and when you can find a lot of green areas, some trees, flowers, even animals.

✓ In my opinion, they like to walk in parks because it's a quiet place, far from traffic and the noise of the city, where you can find lots of green areas, trees, flowers and even animals.

Errors: plural/singular and preposition issues. Use singular 'opinion' after 'in my'. The phrase 'far from traffic, from the noise' is repetitive; combine with 'and' and use 'the noise of the city'. 'When you can find' is wrong relative clause; use 'where you can find'. 'A lot of green areas' is acceptable but 'lots of green areas' or 'many green areas' is more natural. Suggestions: use 'in my opinion', 'far from traffic and the noise of the city', and 'where you can find'.

× I've never been there, but according to movies, uh, there are, there are a lot of space, green areas, wildlife, and I consider it could be really peaceful to be there and make a picnic.

✓ I've never been there, but according to movies, there is a lot of space, green areas and wildlife, and I think it would be really peaceful to be there and have a picnic.

Errors: 'a lot of space' should use uncountable 'space' with singular verb 'there is', not 'there are'. Repetition 'there are, there are' is unnecessary. 'I consider it could be' is awkward; use 'I think it would be'. 'Make a picnic' is non-native; use 'have a picnic'. Suggestions: use correct subject-verb agreement for uncountable nouns, avoid repetitions, and choose natural verbs 'think'/'would' and 'have a picnic'.

× Well, I went for a walk to the mall. To be honest, I spent a lot of time went there, especially with my family because there are many restaurants, stores and we can make shopping umm.

✓ Well, I went for a walk to the mall. To be honest, I spent a lot of time there, especially with my family, because there are many restaurants and stores and we went shopping.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'spent a lot of time went there' — after 'spent time' use a noun or -ing form ('spent a lot of time there' or 'spent a lot of time walking there'). Also mixed tenses: 'we can make shopping' is wrong; use past tense 'we went shopping' or 'we did some shopping'. 'Make shopping' is incorrect collocation; use 'go shopping' or 'do some shopping'. Suggestions: use correct past tense consistency and proper collocations: 'spent a lot of time there' and 'we went shopping'.