Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và rõ ràng: tránh lặp từ 'umm' quá nhiều; sửa ngữ pháp (was → walk, work → walk/move), và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Hãy nối ý bằng từ liên kết ngắn gọn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ quãng đường hoặc tần suất).

Example: Yes, I walk a lot because my university campus is quite large. For example, I often walk 15–20 minutes between buildings every day, and I also take short walks around my neighborhood three times a week to stay healthy.

Suggestion: Cải thiện phát âm và chính xác từ vựng; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (have a word → have a walk; take me go → take me on trips). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về địa điểm hoặc hoạt động để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

Example: Yes, definitely. I often went for walks as a child because my parents took me on weekend trips. For instance, we regularly hiked in the nearby mountains or walked along the coast, which meant I used to walk several kilometers each time.

Suggestion: Cải thiện từ vựng và trật tự ý: sửa lỗi từ (work → walk; part → park; seen an a wrecked scenery → scenic views; fresh airs → fresh air). Dùng liên từ để kết nối các ý và kết thúc câu hoàn chỉnh. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động trong công viên.

Example: I think people like walking in parks because parks offer scenic views and fresh air. In addition, parks have many trees and quiet spots where people can relax, exercise, or socialize with friends.

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tên riêng (If I have → If I had; work → walk). Sử dụng tên địa danh chính xác (e.g., 'Sapa' not 'Sabbath'; 'Fansipan' possibly). Trình bày lý do cụ thể và hoàn thành câu. Hạn chế tiếng 'umm'.

Example: If I had the chance, I would like to walk in the famous Fansipan area in northern Vietnam. I want to experience the stunning mountain scenery and challenging trails, and I think it would be a memorable adventure.

Suggestion: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và thì (usually/lately conflict). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (go to work → go for walks; is are help me is bring → it helps me by bringing). Nêu chi tiết cụ thể (tên công viên, thời gian đi, hoạt động bạn làm khi đi bộ).

Example: Lately I have been going for walks in a park near my neighborhood. It helps me get fresh air and enjoy the green scenery after busy, traffic-filled days; I usually walk there in the evenings for about 30 minutes.

× Yes, of course, umm, I was a lot because umm in my university is quite big.

✓ Yes, of course, I walked a lot because my university is quite big.

The student used 'was' incorrectly to describe frequency of walking in the past. Use the past tense of the verb 'walk' (walked) to show habitual action in the past; also reorder to place the subject 'my university' before 'is' and use 'is' correctly as present tense for a general fact. Suggestion: say 'I walked a lot' for past habitual action and 'my university is quite big' for a general present fact.

× So umm I need to work to move, uh, to move another building to learn our I umm sometimes I work around my neighbor to do my exercise to be healthy.

✓ So I needed to walk to another building for classes. Sometimes I walk around my neighborhood to exercise and stay healthy.

Multiple problems: wrong verb choice 'work' instead of 'walk', awkward structure 'to move another building', and wrong pronoun 'our'. Use simple past 'needed' to match past context, 'walk to another building' to express movement, and 'neighborhood' with 'walk around' and 'to exercise'. Suggestions: pick correct verbs (walk) and use clear purpose phrases ('for classes', 'to exercise').

× Absolutely yes, I often go outside to have a word umm, when I was a child umm, the main reason for this is that my parents used to take me go to the trip, umm, every weekend.

✓ Absolutely yes, I often went outside to go for walks when I was a child. The main reason was that my parents used to take me on trips every weekend.

Mixing present ('go') with past context ('when I was a child'). Change 'go' to past 'went' and use 'go for walks' or 'go for a walk'. 'Take me go to the trip' is ungrammatical; use 'take me on trips' or 'take me on a trip'. Also change 'is' to past 'was' for consistency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct collocations ('take someone on trips').

× Umm, so we also go uh to mountain or coastal, so I walk a lot.

✓ We also went to the mountains or the coast, so I walked a lot.

Incorrect nouns and missing articles: use plural 'mountains' and 'the coast' or 'coastal areas'. Also verbs should be past 'went' to match context. Suggestion: use correct place nouns and include articles when needed: 'the mountains', 'the coast'.

× Umm, I think people like to work in part because, umm, the part have a, uh, seen an, a wrecked scenery and umm, uh, fresh airs and a lot of trees and people work in the park and, uh, relax and enjoy the.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because parks have nice scenery, fresh air, and many trees. People go to parks to relax and enjoy them.

Many errors: 'work in part' should be 'walk in parks' or 'like to go to parks'. 'the part have' should be 'parks have' (plural noun agreement). 'seen an, a wrecked scenery' is wrong; use 'nice scenery' or 'beautiful scenery'. 'fresh airs' should be uncountable 'fresh air'. End phrase 'enjoy the' incomplete; use 'enjoy them' or 'enjoy the scenery'. Suggestion: use correct nouns, treat 'air' as uncountable, and complete sentences with objects ('enjoy them').

× If I have a chance, I would like to work, uh, in a popular, famous mountain in Vietnam, especially Sabbath or mountain bedding.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk on a famous mountain in Vietnam, especially Fansipan or Ba Na Hills.

The conditional 'If I have a chance' should be 'If I had the chance' to match the hypothetical 'would like'. 'Work' is wrong verb; use 'walk' or 'hike'. Also the mountain names were unclear: 'Sabbath' and 'mountain bedding' are incorrect; possibly meant 'Fansipan' or 'Ba Na Hills'. Suggestion: use the correct second conditional structure and correct verbs ('walk/hike') and proper names.

× This is big. This is a symbol, natural symbol of Vietnam and I want to.

✓ It is big. It is a natural symbol of Vietnam, and I want to go there.

Awkward pronoun use and missing article: use 'It is a natural symbol' instead of 'This is a symbol, natural symbol'. Also sentence incomplete 'and I want to.' needs 'go there' or similar. Suggestion: use articles with 'natural symbol' and complete the verb phrase.

× Well I usually go to work lately in a in a park near my neighborhood.

✓ Lately I have usually been going to a park near my neighborhood for walks.

Tense mismatch: 'lately' suggests present perfect progressive rather than simple present 'usually go'. Also 'go to work' is wrong; use 'go for walks' or 'go to a park'. Suggestion: use 'have been going' or 'usually go' depending on emphasis and correct collocation ('go for walks').

× This is because is are help me is bring for me the fresh air and umm green scenery so I can enjoy the atmosphere after a busy days and dusty in under traffic.

✓ This is because it helps bring me fresh air and green scenery, so I can enjoy the atmosphere after busy, dusty days in heavy traffic.

Multiple pronoun and verb issues: 'is are help me' should be 'it helps' (singular subject 'it' for the park). 'is bring for me' incorrect word order; use 'bring me' or 'provides me with'. 'a busy days' should be 'busy days' (remove 'a'). 'dusty in under traffic' should be 'dusty days in heavy traffic'. Suggestion: use a single subject 'it', correct verb 'helps', proper noun phrases and word order, and plural agreement for 'days'.