Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I walk a lot), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. For example, I walk to work and to the shops most days, which helps me stay fit and reduces stress. Because it’s convenient and healthy, I prefer walking short trips instead of driving.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about past habits and give specific details. Use past tense consistently and link ideas logically. Mention where you walked and with whom.

Example: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. For instance, I used to walk to my friend’s house almost every day because it was quite far, and we would play in the nearby park. These walks kept me active and helped me make friends.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer (Because parks are pleasant, safe, etc.), then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (walk, not work) and clear grammar.

Example: People like to walk in parks because the environment is pleasant and relaxing. For example, parks have trees and benches, and many people feel safe there; moreover, walking with others makes exercise more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Give a clear choice and explain specific reasons. Use conditional form correctly and avoid filler words. Mention which park and what you would do there.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the large park near my house. I enjoy that park because it has long paths and a lake, so I could meet friends and join group exercises while enjoying the scenery.

Suggestion: Answer directly in past tense and give a specific recent example: which park, when, and what you did. Use one or two supporting details to enrich the response.

Example: Lately I went for a walk in Greenfield Park last Saturday. I walked two kilometers around the lake and did some stretching exercises with other people there.

× Yes, of course I do walk a lot because as a human being we have to walk a lot because it helps us to maintain our healthier life.

✓ Yes, of course I walk a lot because, as human beings, we have to walk a lot since it helps us maintain a healthier life.

The original mixes auxiliary 'do' unnecessarily with simple present ('do walk') and has awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'I walk' for habitual actions. Change 'as a human being we' to 'as human beings' for general statement and 'helps us to maintain our healthier life' to 'helps us maintain a healthier life' for natural collocation.

× And as a human being, I have to go somewhere so importantly.

✓ And as a human being, I often need to go somewhere important.

Phrase 'go somewhere so importantly' is ungrammatical; 'importantly' is an adverb, but context requires adjective 'important' modifying 'somewhere' or rephrasing. Use 'often need to go somewhere important' to convey frequent necessity.

× Yes, of course I did a friend go outside to have work when I was a child because, uh, I never thought that it would help me to maintain my healthy body.

✓ Yes, of course I did go outside to play/work when I was a child because I never thought it would help me maintain a healthy body.

Original contains word order error 'did a friend go' and unclear 'have work'. For past habitual action use 'did go' with correct word order. Remove unnecessary 'uh' and 'to' before 'maintain' for correct verb pattern.

× But uh, I usually go out from my friend's house and her house was too far than my house.

✓ But I usually went out from my friend's house, and her house was much farther than mine.

When comparing distance use 'farther' (or 'further') and compare to possessive 'mine'. Also switch tense to past ('went') to match 'when I was a child'. 'Too far than' is incorrect; use 'farther than' or 'much farther than'.

× That's why walkings.

✓ That's why I walked a lot./That's why I went for walks a lot.

'Walkings' is not a correct noun in this context. Use 'I walked a lot' or 'I went for walks a lot' to express frequent action. Maintain past tense to match previous sentences.

× In my opinion, people like to work in parks because every people were there or who's working on their maintaining health and they will see the people.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because many people go there to work on their health, and they can see other people.

Original uses 'work' instead of 'walk' and has incorrect phrases: 'every people' should be 'many people' or 'everyone', 'were there' wrong tense, 'who's working on their maintaining health' is ungrammatical. Use 'go there to work on their health' and 'see other people' for clarity.

× Well, there is some parks nearby my house, which is I would like to take a long walk if I had any chance because, uh, if I go on with that park, I could make friends, good friends to exercise with me.

✓ Well, there are some parks near my house where I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance, because if I went to those parks I could make friends who would exercise with me.

Use plural 'there are' for 'parks' (there be issue). 'Nearby my house' should be 'near my house'. 'Which is I would like' is ungrammatical—use 'where I would like'. Match conditional tense: 'if I had the chance' then 'if I went' or 'I could make friends who would exercise with me.' Remove filler 'uh'.

× Well, as I said earlier, so many parks nearby my house, I choose one of them to, uh, exercise and walk to that park.

✓ Well, as I said earlier, there are so many parks near my house; I choose one of them to exercise and walk in.

Fix sentence structure by adding 'there are' for existence and 'near my house'. 'Walk to that park' suggests moving to park; use 'walk in' if referring to walking inside the park. Keep present simple 'I choose' if speaking generally; remove filler 'uh'.