Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and redundant filler words; give a clear topic sentence then two concise supporting details. Use linking words (However, On weekends) and correct verb choices (walk vs work). Keep within 3–5 sentences. Add a specific example (how often, where).

Example: I walk a little on weekdays because I usually take the train and only walk about ten minutes between the station and my university. However, on weekends I walk much more; for example, I often spend two hours exploring local parks or a nearby small forest each Saturday.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence then specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and hesitations; use correct verbs and vocabulary (played tag, ran around). Include frequency and an example activity to make it specific.

Example: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I visited parks with my family or friends almost every day, where we would run around and play games like tag until dusk.

Suggestion: State the main reasons clearly and support them with concise explanations and linking words (Firstly, Secondly). Avoid unclear fragments ("food", "vixen"); use precise vocabulary (physical health, mental wellbeing, fresh air, relaxation). Keep sentences short and coherent.

Example: People walk in parks mainly for physical and mental health. Firstly, walking is good exercise that helps improve fitness. Secondly, being in nature reduces stress and allows people to breathe fresh air, which makes them feel refreshed.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence with two specific reasons, using linking words (because, moreover). Avoid filler and fragmented phrases. Add a concrete detail about a place or duration to make the answer more vivid.

Example: I would choose to walk in the mountains because they offer both good exercise and spectacular views. For example, I would hike a nearby hill for three hours so I can enjoy the scenery from the summit and relax on the way back down.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place and when you went. Use correct grammar (there were many hills; each hill was covered with trees and flowers). Add a brief observation or feeling and one specific detail (time, weather, activity).

Example: My most recent walk was at Killarney National Park last month. The park has many rolling hills covered with trees and wildflowers, and I enjoyed watching sheep grazing while I walked along the trails.

× It depends on the day.

✓ It depends on the day.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to indicate a habitual or general truth.

× Umm, on weekdays I don't really work because, uh, my, uh, from, from my home to my university, umm, I mainly take trains and I have to walk less than 10 minutes between the places and stations.

✓ On weekdays I don't walk much because I mainly take trains from my home to my university and only have to walk less than ten minutes between stations and places.

The original sentence has disfluent filler words and an unclear structure. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Remove fillers, reorder clauses for clarity, and use consistent vocabulary ('walk much' matches the question about walking). Spell out numbers under ten in formal speech ('ten').

× But on the other hand, on weekend I, I like to go out and, uh.

✓ But on the other hand, on weekends I like to go out.

The phrase 'on weekend' is incorrect; the plural form 'on weekends' is used to indicate regular events occurring on Saturdays/Sundays. This is a singular/plural issue (ID 1). Remove filler words for fluency.

× Looking around, uh, some places, for example parks or some small forests.

✓ I like looking around places such as parks or small woods.

Original fragment lacks a clear subject-verb structure (ID 26). 'Small forests' is awkward in casual speech; 'small woods' or 'woodlands' is more natural. Reorder to form a complete clause with subject and verb.

× So I work a lot.

✓ So I walk a lot.

The student likely intended to say they walk a lot; 'work' is incorrect in context. This is a sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26). Ensure verb matches intended meaning.

× Yes, I was I, I really liked going outside, especially for going parks and yeah, I was a so out outdoor person.

✓ Yes, I really liked going outside, especially going to parks, and I was a very outdoorsy person.

Remove repeated 'I' and filler words and correct 'going parks' to 'going to parks' (preposition error ID 11) and 'a so out outdoor person' to 'a very outdoorsy person' (word form/adjective issue ID 13). Maintain past tense 'liked' and 'was' to match the time frame.

× Umm, I, I went to parks with my friends or family almost every day and.

✓ I went to parks with my friends or family almost every day.

The original ends with an unfinished conjunction 'and.' Remove extra filler and the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence. Preposition use 'to parks' is acceptable; main problem is sentence fragment (ID 26) and disfluency.

× That, uh, ran out a lot within the parks or, umm, uh, do tag detect, uh, with my friends, yeah.

✓ We ran around a lot in the parks and played tag with my friends.

Original is fragmented and contains incorrect phrases like 'ran out' and 'do tag detect.' This is a sentence structure and vocabulary error (ID 26). Use 'ran around' (phrasal verb) and 'played tag' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I think it's because, uh, those people care about their body health and also mental health.

✓ I think it's because those people care about their physical health and their mental health.

Use 'physical health' instead of 'body health' for natural English (ID 13). Remove filler words for fluency.

× I mean, umm, if we, uh, go to park and food and then go around the parks, umm, we, we can uh, move our, uh, legs and uh.

✓ I mean, if we go to a park and walk around, we can move our legs and exercise our bodies.

Original has incorrect phrases ('go to park and food') and incomplete structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and article error (use 'a park' — ID 22). Replace vague/fractured parts with clear actions ('walk around', 'exercise our bodies').

× Vixen. Yeah, arms a lot.

✓ We also use our arms a lot.

The utterance 'Vixen' is irrelevant; 'arms a lot' lacks a verb and proper structure. This is a sentence structure/adjective/adverb placement issue (IDs 26 and 20). Provide complete clause with subject and verb.

× So it's a very good way to exercise ourselves.

✓ So it's a very good way to exercise.

Reflexive 'ourselves' is unnecessary when speaking generally; simpler 'to exercise' is natural. This is a sentence structure/reflexive pronoun use issue (IDs 26 and 15).

× And yeah, we can, uh, inhale fresh air as well.

✓ And we can inhale fresh air as well.

Remove filler 'yeah' and 'uh' for fluency. Sentence is otherwise correct; this is minor sentence structure/disfluency (ID 26).

× I'd say some mountains or hills are best for me 'cause, umm, if, if I go that kind of places, uh, I can umm, not only exercise, but also, umm, enjoy the views Go uh, we can see during going up or.

✓ I'd say mountains or hills are best for me because if I go to those kinds of places I can not only exercise but also enjoy the views we can see while going up and at the summit.

Multiple issues: 'that kind of places' should be 'those kinds of places' (demonstrative and number agreement — ID 1 and 12), missing preposition 'go to' (ID 11), and 'during going up' should be 'while going up' (use of -ing form with proper preposition — ID 8 and 10). Reorder to form a complete sentence and remove fillers.

× Also at the summit and then, uh, the other way, uh, when I go down, uh, to the original place.

✓ Also at the summit, and then when I go down back to the starting point.

Phrases like 'the other way' and 'original place' are awkward. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue (ID 26). Use 'starting point' for clarity and remove fillers.

× Uh, the latest trip was a, uh, tour to the Killarney National Park and they, they were uh, uh, lot of hills gathered and each hills are, were filled with, uh, with trees.

✓ My latest trip was a tour to Killarney National Park, and there were a lot of hills gathered together, and each hill was filled with trees.

Use 'My latest trip' for natural possessive; drop 'the' before proper park name unless official title uses it (article error ID 22). Use 'there were' instead of 'they were' (subject error ID 3/27), 'a lot of hills' is correct but 'each hills are' should be 'each hill was' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement IDs 1 and 27). Maintain past tense 'was/ were' (ID 5).

× Flowers and there were many, umm, sheep as well, so I enjoy seeing the views a lot.

✓ There were flowers and many sheep as well, so I enjoyed seeing the views a lot.

Maintain past tense to match 'latest trip' (past tense issue ID 5). Original sentence order is awkward; reordering improves clarity (sentence structure ID 26). Change 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed' to agree with past timeframe.