Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep within 2–4 sentences and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'pastime activity' → 'pastime').

Example: Yes, I walk a lot whenever I have time because walking is my favorite pastime. Moreover, it is less tiring than other exercises, so I can walk even after a long day at the office and still continue working afterwards.

Suggestion: Organize the answer: start with a direct yes, give two specific details using linking words, and correct grammar (e.g., 'introduce me to lots of people', 'communication skills'). Avoid run-on sentences.

Example: Yes, I often walked to a public park about ten minutes from my home because my grandmother wanted me to stay healthy. In addition, she introduced me to many people there, which helped improve my communication skills and confidence.

Suggestion: Be clear and use appropriate vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases ('incredible laser activities') and repeat words. Provide two clear reasons linked with connectors and a brief example or result. Finish sentences fully.

Example: People like walking in parks because it helps them stay physically fit and connect with nature. Moreover, parks provide a calm environment where people can relax and reduce daily stress, for example by sitting near trees or talking with neighbors.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear location, use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'riverside park', 'riverbank'), and complete your sentence. Give one reason and one specific image or detail. Remove unnecessary words.

Example: I would like to take a long walk in a riverside park with paths along the riverbank because walking there while watching the water and wildlife would be very relaxing and help me unwind after stressful events.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons linked logically. Fix grammar (e.g., 'one of the more convenient places', 'self-conscious' instead of 'public conscious'). Avoid trailing off—complete your final thought.

Example: I went for a walk in my garden recently because it is the most convenient place for daily exercise. Also, I feel a bit self-conscious about working out in public, so my garden offers privacy and comfort.

× Yes, I do walk a lot whenever I get time and uh, walking is my favorite pastime activity.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot whenever I get time, and walking is my favorite pastime activity.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present simple statements. Use 'I walk' instead of 'I do walk'. Also ensure proper punctuation and flow.

× Moreover, I don't feel that tired or exhausted as I do in other physical activities, so I can do work anytime whether I am, uh, tired from my office work or not.

✓ Moreover, I don't feel as tired or exhausted as I do after other physical activities, so I can work at any time whether I am tired from office work or not.

Comparative structure requires 'as...as' with correct placement; use 'after other physical activities' to indicate cause. 'Do work' is awkward; use 'work' and 'at any time' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I used to go to a public park which was just 10 minutes away from my home and my grandmother was interested to keep me fit and healthy.

✓ Yes, I used to go to a public park that was just 10 minutes away from my home, and my grandmother wanted to keep me fit and healthy.

Use 'that' for defining clauses in this context. 'Interested to keep me fit' is incorrect collocation; use 'wanted to keep me fit'. Maintain past tense consistency with 'used to'.

× Moreover, she used to introduce me lots of people so that I can develop communication skill more profoundly and going to work not only keeping me fit but also making me a good communicator.

✓ Moreover, she used to introduce me to lots of people so that I could develop my communication skills more profoundly; going to the park not only kept me fit but also made me a better communicator.

Introduce someone to someone uses preposition 'to'. 'Can' should be 'could' to match past tense. 'Communication skill' should be plural 'communication skills'. The clause about the park needs past tense and clearer structure.

× I think it is also incredible laser activities people not only get chance to keep them physical fit, but also develop a good relationship with the the surrounding as well as with the people who are in their areas.

✓ I think walking is an excellent activity: people not only get a chance to keep themselves physically fit, but also to develop good relationships with their surroundings and with people in their area.

Original contains wrong word 'laser' and misused adjectives/adverbs. Use 'excellent activity' and 'themselves physically fit'. Plural/singular consistency: 'relationships' and 'area' fit better. Remove duplicate 'the'.

× And going to the park helps you to unwind from daily stress and.

✓ And going to the park helps you to unwind from daily stress.

Sentence was incomplete with a trailing 'and.' Remove the conjunction or finish the clause. Keep concise structure.

× I would definitely like to take a long walk in the environment park where path are generated on the Bank of a river.

✓ I would definitely like to take a long walk in an environmental park where paths run along the bank of a river.

Use 'an environmental park' for correct adjective form. 'Paths' plural and 'run along the bank' is natural phrasing. Capitalization errors fixed.

× So taking a walk and watching the Panama of water body is an incredible combination and it will not helps me to unwind from stressful event but also.

✓ So taking a walk and watching the panorama of the water is an incredible combination, and it will not only help me unwind from stressful events but also...

'Panama' is incorrect; use 'panorama' or 'view'. 'Will not helps' incorrect verb form: use 'will not only help'. 'Event' should be plural 'events'. Sentence was incomplete, so indicate continuation with ellipsis if intended.

× I went for a walk in my garden because this is one of the more convenient place where I can go to do some physical activity daily.

✓ I went for a walk in my garden because it is one of the most convenient places where I can do some physical activity every day.

Maintain present-tense habit with 'it is' and use superlative 'most convenient' or comparative 'more convenient places'. Plural 'places' matches. Use 'every day' for daily routine.

× So I'm also a little bit public conscious.

✓ So I'm also a little bit self-conscious about being in public.

'Public conscious' is incorrect collocation. Use 'self-conscious about being in public' to express concern about others' observation.

× So I cannot perform my workout in the public place.

✓ So I cannot perform my workout in public places.

'In the public place' is awkward; use 'in public places' for general statement.

× So going to my garden for walk and for physical activities are one of.

✓ So going to my garden for walks and for physical activities is one of the best options for me.

Subject-verb agreement: the gerund phrase 'going to my garden...' is singular, so use 'is'. Also complete the sentence; use plural 'walks' and provide a noun phrase to finish ('one of the best options').