Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 어휘 선택에 많은 오류가 있습니다. 질문은 'walk'에 관한 것이므로 ‘work’와 혼동된 단어 사용을 바로잡아야 합니다. 간단명료한 주제문으로 시작하고, 이유를 한두 문장으로 보충하세요. 연결어(so, because, but 등)를 정확히 사용해 논리적으로 연결하세요. 예: ‘No, I don’t walk much these days because I am very busy with work, so I don’t have time for walks.’

Example: No, I don’t walk much these days because I’m busy with work. As a result, I usually commute by car and only walk short distances when necessary.

Suggestion: 과거시제와 관사 사용, 소유격 표현(‘with my mom’)이 필요합니다. 문장은 간결히 구성하고 이유나 기억을 하나 추가하세요. 연결어(and, because) 사용을 자연스럽게 고쳐야 합니다. 예: ‘When I was a child, I often went for walks with my mother because it helped me relax.’

Example: When I was a child, I often went for walks with my mother. Those walks were relaxing and gave me a chance to explore nature and talk with her.

Suggestion: 내용이 모호하고 단어 선택이 부정확합니다. 일반적 이유를 먼저 제시하고, 구체적 예시나 결과를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(because, so, which)로 논리를 명확히 하세요. 예: ‘People like parks because the green space reduces stress and provides fresh air, so they can relax.’

Example: People like walking in parks because the green space and fresh air help reduce stress. For example, a stroll among trees can clear your mind and improve your mood.

Suggestion: 조건문과 장소 표현이 어색합니다. ‘If I had the chance’ 같은 자연스러운 가정 표현을 사용하고, 이유를 한두 문장 더해 선택을 설명하세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요. 예: ‘If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in my local park because it is peaceful and close to home.’

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in my local park because it is peaceful and full of trees. Walking there helps me relax and feel connected to nature.

Suggestion: 시제 사용과 동사 선택(‘go for a walk’), 관사 사용이 필요합니다. 최근 행동은 과거 시제로 간결히 말하고, 장소와 이유를 명확히 하세요. 예: ‘I went to the local park this week because it is a pleasant place to walk.’

Example: I went to the local park this week for a walk because it’s a pleasant place nearby. I often go there since childhood because it feels welcoming and calm.

× No, I don't work very often these days because I quite I have to a lot of work and I'm too ready for work and and nobody works to me.

✓ No, I don't work very often these days because I quite often have a lot of work and I'm too tired for work, and nobody listens to me.

The sentence has multiple structural and word choice issues: 'quite I' is incorrect; use 'quite often'. 'I have to a lot of work' should be 'I have a lot of work'. 'Too ready for work' is wrong; likely intended 'too tired for work'. 'Nobody works to me' is ungrammatical; use 'nobody listens to me' or 'no one helps me'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into clear clauses and use correct collocations (quite often, have a lot of work, tired for work, listen to me).

× When I was child I really enjoyed the walk anywhere in my mom and I still love it and just works and also make me feel better.

✓ When I was a child I really enjoyed walking anywhere with my mom, and I still love it; it also makes me feel better.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect verb forms. 'Enjoyed the walk' should be 'enjoyed walking' or 'enjoyed the walks'. 'In my mom' is wrong; use 'with my mom'. 'Just works and also make me feel better' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it also makes me feel better'. Suggestion: use correct articles, gerund after 'enjoy', proper preposition 'with', and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it makes').

× Pepper paper works in maybe because this make me feel they're feeling better as in unwind the stress and just works as me forgot about the worries.

✓ People probably walk in parks because it makes them feel better and helps them unwind and forget their worries.

Many pronoun and word choice errors: 'Pepper paper' should be 'People probably' or 'People often'; 'works in' incorrect; use 'walk in parks'. 'This make me feel they're feeling better' mixes pronouns and verbs; use 'it makes them feel better'. 'As in unwind the stress' should be 'and helps them unwind' and 'just works as me forgot' should be 'helps them forget'. Suggestion: choose correct pronouns (it/them), use 'helps' for singular subject, and use 'forget' not 'forgot'.

× If I could set chance to anywhere I I would. I choose the local park and Roku park is a friendly to me and I my local park is.

✓ If I had the chance to go anywhere, I would choose the local park. Roku Park is friendly to me, and it is my local park.

Awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'If I could set chance to anywhere' should be 'If I had the chance to go anywhere'. Duplicate 'I I' and incorrect tense in 'I choose' should be conditional 'I would choose'. 'Roku park is a friendly to me and I my local park is' is ungrammatical; correct to 'Roku Park is friendly to me, and it is my local park.' Suggestion: use correct conditional structure 'If I had the chance... I would...', fix word order, and include necessary articles and subjects.

× This week I work in local park and local park always is so friendly to me and when I was child I always walk for local part.

✓ This week I worked in the local park, and the local park is always so friendly to me. When I was a child I always walked in the local park.

Tense and article errors: 'This week I work' should be past or present perfect depending on meaning; 'This week I worked' fits if referring to a specific event. 'Local park' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Local park always is' word order should be 'the local park is always'. 'When I was child' needs 'a child', and 'I always walk for local part' should be past 'I always walked in the local park.' Suggestion: choose consistent tense, use 'the' with specific places, correct word order, and use 'walked' for past habitual actions.