Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk every day for about 30 minutes because I enjoy thinking and planning. For example, when I walked home from elementary school, I often used that time to reflect on my plans for the next day and my future.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct grammar (use past tense). Use linking words to add a specific example. Remove fillers and repetition.

Example: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child. For instance, I walked alone after classes in elementary, junior high and high school because it helped me relax and think quietly.

Suggestion: Give a clear, structured answer with linking words and complete comparisons. Be specific about what you mean by 'scenery' and 'atmosphere' and finish sentences fully.

Example: People like walking in parks for two main reasons. First, the scenery—such as trees, flowers and lakes—makes walks pleasant. Second, the peaceful atmosphere is much better than busy streets, so it helps people relax and exercise.

Suggestion: Start with a clear conditional sentence and give specific reasons. Use correct names and avoid vague phrases. Add one supporting detail about what you would do there.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Central Park in New York. I have always heard it is beautiful, and I would enjoy the varied landscapes and people-watching, as well as stopping by the lakes and gardens.

Suggestion: Use past tense and correct vocabulary. Be specific about time and details, and avoid filler words. Mention one or two clear observations about the park.

Example: Lately I went for a walk in Zhongshan Park near my house in Pington. The park has many squirrels and plenty of shady paths, and I enjoyed the peaceful view and fresh air.

× Umm, ever since when I was in my elementary school, I walk back home from South and during the time I was, well, I think of what? Plans is going to be tomorrow and I think about my future.

✓ Umm, ever since I was in elementary school, I walked back home from the south, and during that time I would think about what plans I had for tomorrow and about my future.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Use past tense 'was' and 'walked' for past time reference. 'Ever since when' is ungrammatical; use 'ever since I was'. 'Plans is' is subject-verb disagreement and wrong tense; use 'plans I had' or 'I would think about my plans'. Also 'from South' should be 'from the south' or a place name; I used 'the south'. Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense (was, walked, thought), and correct subject-verb agreement.

× Umm, as absolutely, just like what I've said the the question umm, I like to walk as I was a child and it's not only elementary school and my junior high school and Senior High School, I always have the time to walk by myself.

✓ Umm, yes, as I said in the question, I liked to walk when I was a child, not only in elementary school but also in junior high and senior high school; I always had time to walk by myself.

Pronoun and demonstrative use is awkward and tense is inconsistent. Use 'as I said' instead of 'what I've said the the question'. Change 'I like to walk as I was a child' to past 'I liked to walk when I was a child'. Use parallel structure 'not only... but also...' and consistent past tense 'had'. Suggestion: Use clear pronouns and proper conjunctions for parallel lists, and keep tense consistent.

× I would say the reason why people like to walk in parks maybe can.

✓ I would say the reason why people like to walk in parks could be the following.

The original uses conflicting modal expressions 'would' and 'maybe can', which is ungrammatical. Replace with a single modal phrase 'could be' or 'might be'. Suggestion: Avoid stacking modals; choose one appropriate modal verb and follow with a clear complement.

× Uh, there are maybe 2 reasons of it.

✓ There are maybe two reasons for this.

Phrase 'reasons of it' is incorrect; use 'reasons for this' or 'reasons for that'. Also write numbers in words in formal speech: 'two'. Suggestion: Use 'reason for' and avoid awkward prepositional phrases.

× One is because of the scenery of the parks and second is maybe because of the atmosphere.

✓ One is the scenery of the parks, and the second is the atmosphere.

Avoid repeating 'because' awkwardly; use simple noun phrases. Also include the article 'the' before 'second' or use 'the second is'. Suggestion: Use parallel noun phrases and clear articles for list items.

× There is much better than in.

✓ The atmosphere is much better than elsewhere.

Original fragment 'There is much better than in' is incomplete and lacks a comparison object. Use a clear subject 'the atmosphere' and a comparison 'than elsewhere' or 'than in the city'. Suggestion: Always include both parts of a comparison and a clear subject.

× I think the place that I would like to take a long walk if I had a chance is going to.

✓ I think the place where I would like to take a long walk, if I had the chance, is Central Park.

The phrase 'is going to' is incorrect here. Use 'is' followed by the place name. Use 'where' not 'that' for locations and correct conditional phrasing 'if I had the chance'. Suggestion: Use 'where' for places and complete the clause with the place name.

× You're at Central Park.

✓ It's Central Park.

'You're at Central Park' addresses the listener incorrectly; the speaker should say 'It's Central Park' or 'Central Park'. Suggestion: Use 'it is' when identifying a place being referred to.

× Hmm. I've always have been noticed and heard of that.

✓ Hmm. I have always heard of it and noticed it.

Original mixes auxiliary forms 'have always have been' — incorrect. Use either present perfect passive 'have always been noticed' (meaning others noticed it) or active 'I have always heard of it'. I combined correctly as active: 'I have always heard of it and noticed it.' Suggestion: Use one auxiliary 'have' for present perfect and choose active or passive correctly.

× It's really, really beautiful place with, uh, nice people, nice atmosphere.

✓ It's a really beautiful place with nice people and a pleasant atmosphere.

Missing article 'a' before 'place'; repetition 'really, really' is acceptable in speech but unnecessary in corrected form. Use 'pleasant' as a more natural collocation with 'atmosphere' and include conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: Include articles and use natural adjective collocations.

× Uh, the place I go for a walk lately is the park near by my house.

✓ Uh, the place I have been going for a walk lately is the park near my house.

Use present perfect progressive 'have been going' for recent repeated actions ('lately'). 'Near by' as two words is incorrect here; use 'near'. Suggestion: Use present perfect tense for actions continuing to the present and correct compound words.

× I live in Pington, so there, so, so uh, Zhongshan Park, that park especially lots of squirrels and patients.

✓ I live in Pington, so the park I often visit is Zhongshan Park; that park has especially lots of squirrels and ponds.

Original is fragmented and uses 'patients' incorrectly — likely intended 'pavilions' or 'ponds'. I assumed 'ponds' as common in parks. Also need verb 'has' for existence and clearer structure 'the park I often visit is'. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases, verbs, and correct vocabulary (check intended word).

× I love there and the view is very great.

✓ I love it there, and the view is great.

Use 'I love it there' not 'I love there'. 'Very great' is unnatural; use 'great' or 'very beautiful'. Suggestion: Use 'it' as a dummy pronoun with 'there' and prefer natural intensifiers (very beautiful).