Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition, make the response more concise and directly answer current habit; use a topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words.

Example: I used to walk after dinner regularly in China, but I don't walk as often in Dubai because the weather is very hot. Consequently, I only go for walks in the cooler evenings or on milder days to stay comfortable.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words, and provide a specific example; use linking words to connect preference and reason.

Example: Not really. As a child I preferred playing team games with my friends instead of taking solitary walks, so I spent most afternoons at the playground or playing football with the neighborhood kids.

Suggestion: Good structure and specific reasons; you can improve by combining sentences with linking words and adding a short example to sound more natural.

Example: People like walking in parks because it benefits their health: for example, walking aids digestion and improves circulation. Moreover, the green environment is relaxing and helps reduce stress, so many people use parks to unwind.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid conversational fillers like "to be honest"; add a brief preference or reason to enrich the answer.

Example: I don't have a particular place in mind, but I would gladly take a long walk with my family or friends because walking together is more enjoyable and gives us a chance to catch up.

Suggestion: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, use one linking word to add purpose, and include a brief detail to make the answer more specific and natural.

Example: Recently I went for a walk around my community after dinner to help with digestion and improve circulation. I usually walk along the main path for about 20 minutes before going home.

× I used to take a walk after dinner as a habit when I was in China, but since I've moved moved to Dubai the weather is so hot which stops me from taking a walk every day.

✓ I used to take a walk after dinner when I was in China, but since I moved to Dubai the weather has been so hot that it stops me from walking every day.

Problems: repeated word 'moved moved' (typo) and inconsistent tense/structure. 'I used to' refers to a past habit (correct). After 'but since' describing a change starting in the past and continuing now should use simple past for the action of moving ('I moved') and present perfect for the ongoing state ('has been so hot'). Also replace 'which' with 'that' and use 'walking' (gerund) for the activity. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, use 'I moved' and 'has been', and use 'that it stops me from walking every day' for clarity.

× I didn't usually go outside to have a walk when I was a kid because and I would rather play with my friends at that time to enjoy team atmosphere rather than staying alone.

✓ I didn't usually go outside to walk when I was a kid because I preferred to play with my friends to enjoy the team atmosphere rather than stay alone.

Problems: unnecessary 'and' after 'because', awkward phrasing 'have a walk' and mixed modal 'would rather' with past reference. Use simple past preference 'preferred' to match 'didn't', use 'walk' instead of 'have a walk', and 'stay' (base form after 'rather than'). Suggestion: remove the extra 'and', use consistent past tense verbs and natural collocations.

× Many people enjoy walking in parks because walking is good for their health. It helps improve digestion and boosts blood circulation. They also like parks because the green space is relaxing and reduces stress.

✓ Many people enjoy walking in parks because it is good for their health. It helps improve digestion and boost blood circulation. They also like parks because the green space is relaxing and reduces stress.

Issue: slight repetition and parallelism. Use 'it' to avoid repeating 'walking'. For parallel verbs 'helps improve' and 'boost blood circulation' should be parallel; either 'helps improve... and boost...' or 'helps to improve... and to boost...'. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure by using the same verb form for both effects.

× To be honest, I don't have a specific ideal location to take a long walk, but if my friends or my parents invite me to go with them, definitely I'll go.

✓ To be honest, I don't have a specific ideal location to take a long walk, but if my friends or my parents invite me to go with them, I'll definitely go.

Problem: adverb placement. 'Definitely' usually appears before the main verb or after the subject: 'I'll definitely go' is more natural than 'definitely I'll go'. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'definitely' immediately before the main verb for clearer emphasis.

× I went for a walk in our community lately after dinner to help digest and improve blood circulation.

✓ I went for a walk in our community recently after dinner to help digestion and improve blood circulation.

Problems: 'lately' is better as 'recently' in this context; 'help digest' is incorrect collocation—use 'help digestion' or 'help me digest'. Also 'improve blood circulation' should be parallel with 'help digestion' (use noun 'digestion'). Suggestion: use 'recently' for a single past action and keep parallel noun forms: 'to help digestion and improve blood circulation'.