Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để mạch lạc. Nên nói rõ thời gian và mục đích (ví dụ: 'in the afternoon' + hoạt động), sửa lỗi từ vựng ('work' không đúng nghĩa) và giảm tiếng ồm ("uh").

Example: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I usually walk from my home to school in the morning, and in the afternoon I walk back after basketball practice. I often walk with a friend, so we chat while walking.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp thời quá khứ (was, went), loại bỏ câu không rõ nghĩa ('feel my hair improve') và tránh lặp từ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (nơi chốn, hoạt động làm gì) và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Example: Yes, I often went outside when I was a child because I found it very interesting. I used to walk to the nearby park with my friends, where we played games and talked, which made us very happy.

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (feel relaxed, reduce stress), dùng cụm từ tự nhiên hơn ('after a day of work'/'after studying') và diễn đạt rõ ràng về lợi ích sức khỏe tinh thần và thể chất. Dùng liên từ để kết nối các lợi ích.

Example: I think people enjoy walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress after a day of work or study. Moreover, walking in a green environment can improve physical fitness and mental well-being.

Suggestion: Giữ câu ngắn gọn, sửa lỗi mạo từ ('in the mountains' hoặc 'on a mountain'), làm rõ lý do bằng chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: views, trails) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains because I could enjoy fresh air and scenic views. I would also meet fellow hikers on the trails, which would be enjoyable.

Suggestion: Dùng thì quá khứ cho 'lately' (I walked), sửa ngữ pháp ('in my free time', 'it helps me reduce stress'), loại bỏ tiếng ồm và lặp từ. Thêm chi tiết về địa điểm cụ thể hoặc hoạt động để câu phong phú hơn.

Example: Lately I walked around my city in my free time. I usually stroll through the old quarter and nearby parks because it helps me relax and reduce stress after studying.

× Yes I do. Uh, I often walk from my home to school in the morning and the afternoon I work from school to basketball scores. Uh, I often walk with my friend and when we are talking together.

✓ Yes, I do. I often walk from my home to school in the morning, and in the afternoon I walk from school to the basketball court. I often walk with my friend and we talk together.

The student uses inconsistent verbs and incorrect nouns. Use simple present tense for habitual actions (walk, walk). 'Work from school to basketball scores' is incorrect word choice; 'walk to the basketball court' is appropriate. Add articles where needed ('the basketball court'). Use commas to separate clauses and omit filler 'Uh'. Suggestions: practice forming clear simple present sentences for routines, replace wrong nouns with correct ones, and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Yes, when I was child I often go outside to have a walk because I think I think it's very interesting and when I walk a lot I feel my hair improve. And another and another. I work with my friend to go hang out and we are very happy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went outside for a walk because I thought it was very interesting. When I walked a lot, I felt my health improve. I went out with my friend to hang out and we were very happy.

Multiple tense errors: refer to past events using past simple (was, went, thought, felt, went, were). 'When I was child' needs article 'a child'. 'Have a walk' is better as 'go for a walk' or 'went outside for a walk'. 'Feel my hair improve' is unclear; likely 'felt my health improve'. Avoid repeating words. Suggestions: use past simple consistently when describing childhood actions and choose correct collocations (go for a walk, hang out).

× I think people like to walk in parks because they can feel relax and reduce stress after study time or work a day or full time.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they can feel relaxed and reduce stress after study or work.

Use the adjective 'relaxed' rather than the verb 'relax' after 'feel'. 'Study time or work a day or full time' is wordy and ungrammatical; simplify to 'after study or work'. Suggestions: use 'feel relaxed' and shorten redundant phrases for clarity.

× Uh, another When we are walking past we can improve health and mental.

✓ Also, when we walk, we can improve our physical and mental health.

Use simple present for general truths ('we walk'). 'Walking past' is incorrect; use 'when we walk'. Add possessive 'our' before 'physical and mental health' and use correct adjective order/words. Suggestions: practice collocations 'physical and mental health' and prefer simple present for general statements.

× If I had a chance, I would walk in the mountain because I can enjoy fresh air and see a blue sky.

✓ If I had the chance, I would walk in the mountains because I could enjoy fresh air and see the blue sky.

This is a second conditional; use 'could' for ability in the result clause. Use 'the chance' or 'a chance' consistently; 'in the mountain' should be plural 'in the mountains'. Use 'the blue sky' or 'a blue sky'—'the' is natural here. Suggestions: learn second conditional structure (If + past simple, would + base or could) and use correct noun forms ('mountains').

× And also when I walk in the mountain I can connect with many new friends and feel happy.

✓ Also, when I walk in the mountains, I can meet many new people and feel happy.

Use plural 'mountains'. 'Connect with many new friends' is awkward; say 'meet many new people' or 'make new friends'. Present tense 'can meet' is fine for possibility. Suggestions: choose natural collocations ('meet people', 'make friends') and use correct plural forms.

× Umm, I walk around my city when I free time because, uh, because when I do it I feel very relaxed and it make me reduce stress after study time.

✓ I walk around my city when I have free time because when I do it I feel very relaxed and it helps me reduce stress after studying.

Missing auxiliary 'have' in 'when I have free time'. Use third-person singular agreement: 'it helps me' not 'it make me'. 'After study time' should be 'after studying' or 'after study'. Suggestions: ensure correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement, and use gerund after 'after' for actions (after studying).