Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조가 불안정하고 반복(But 사용)이 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문엔 '많이 걷는지'를 묻고 있으므로 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작한 뒤 이유를 간결히 제시하세요. 예: 한두 문장으로 현재 걷는 빈도와 예외(운전면허 취득, 출퇴근 교통상황)를 연결 표현(so, because, although)을 사용해 명확히 말하세요. 또한 중복된 단어나 구문(But, to to)을 피하고 동사 시제와 관사 사용을 점검하세요.

Example: Yes, I walk quite often, especially for short trips around my neighborhood. Although I recently got a driving licence, I usually use public transport in Seoul because of heavy traffic during rush hour.

Suggestion: 'significantly'는 자연스럽지 않은 응답 시작 단어입니다. 직접적이고 간단한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, supporting detail에서 구체적 예(주기, 활동)를 연결어(so, because, for example)를 사용해 자연스럽게 설명하세요. 또한 'learning around' 같은 표현은 부적절하니 'exploring'을 쓰세요.

Example: Yes, I did. My parents used to take me to the park every weekend because I loved exploring nature and looking for bugs and different plants.

Suggestion: 질문은 일반적 이유를 묻고 있으니 'people'을 주어로 일반적인 이유를 먼저 제시하세요. 그런 다음 개인 경험을 연결해 구체성을 더하세요. 문법적으로는 'need to take a break'와 'working along the riverside' 대신 'walking along the riverside'가 더 적절합니다. 연결어(so, therefore, for example)를 사용해 논리 흐름을 명확히 하세요.

Example: People often walk in parks to relax and escape their busy lives. For example, I frequently visit Han River Park to walk along the riverside because it is calming and helps me clear my mind.

Suggestion: 질문은 가정(If you had the chance)에 대한 응답을 요구합니다. 그러나 학생의 답변은 현재 상황 설명과 과거 습관이 혼합되어 있어 불분명합니다. 가정문으로 직접 대답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 활동(예: route, duration, scenery)을 1–2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 문법 오류(‘work just around’, 미완성 문장)와 어휘(‘washing away my stress’는 괜찮지만 표현 연결이 필요)를 수정하세요.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Han River because it helps me relax. I would probably walk for a couple of hours, enjoy the sunlight and watch people having picnics.

Suggestion: 질문은 최근 어디로 갔는지 구체적 과거 시제를 요구합니다. 답변은 일반적 습관 설명에 머물러 있고 표현 오류('natural train quality', 'enjoying gentle bridge')가 있습니다. 먼저 최근에 갔던 장소와 시간(eg. last weekend)을 명시하고, 이유와 관찰한 구체적 장면(people picnicking, cyclists, riverside view)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 어휘 선택을 정확히 하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

Example: I went to Han River Park last weekend. I like it because it combines urban life with nature, and I saw many people having picnics, cycling, and relaxing by the water.

× Yes, definitely I must do that at the moment, but I got a driving license a few months ago.

✓ Yes, definitely I must do that at the moment, but I got a driving licence a few months ago.

'Must' is acceptable but sounds strong for a habitual action; consider using 'usually' or 'tend to' for naturalness. Also 'driving licence' spelling: either 'license' (US) or 'licence' (UK). Keep consistent variety throughout. Suggestion: use 'I usually do that' or 'I tend to do that' for a less forceful meaning.

× But I rely on public transportation when I'm in Seoul to to traffic jams during rush hours.

✓ But I rely on public transportation when I'm in Seoul because of traffic jams during rush hour.

Redundant 'to to' is an error and the sentence structure needs a reason connector: use 'because of' to indicate cause. 'Rush hours' is commonly 'rush hour' when referring to the general period. Correct sentence structure: reason clause + noun phrase.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Question uses past tense 'Did', so keeping base verb 'go' is correct; 'to have a walk' is unnatural. Use the collocation 'go for a walk'. Use 'when you were a child' for past time reference.

× Yes, significantly. When I was a kid, my parents used to take me to the park every weekend because at the time I loved learning around or looking at bugs and plants.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a kid, my parents used to take me to the park every weekend because I loved exploring and looking at bugs and plants.

'Significantly' is inappropriate as a response to frequency; use 'definitely' or 'definitely so'. 'Learning around' is ungrammatical; use 'exploring'. 'At the time' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× When it comes to me, I frequently visit the Han River Park whenever I need take a break from my hectic routine because working along the Riverside is incredibly calming and also it always helps me clear my mind.

✓ As for me, I frequently visit Han River Park whenever I need to take a break from my hectic routine because walking along the riverside is incredibly calming and always helps me clear my mind.

'When it comes to me' is awkward; use 'As for me'. Missing 'to' in 'need to take'. 'Working along the Riverside' is wrong verb and capitalisation: use 'walking along the riverside'. 'Han River Park' does not need 'the' in usual usage.

× I'm currently studying English for marriage test so I don't have much free time but before I start studying English I usually visit the Han river to wash away my stress, so I spend most of my day in the park working just around and sometimes I observe how sunlight the.

✓ I'm currently studying English for a marriage test so I don't have much free time, but before I started studying English I usually visited the Han River to relieve my stress. I would spend most of the day in the park wandering around and sometimes watching the sunlight.

Tense inconsistency: 'I'm currently studying' requires contrast with past habit 'before I started'. Missing article 'a marriage test'. 'Wash away my stress' is informal; 'relieve my stress' is better. 'Working just around' is wrong; use 'wandering around'. 'Observe how sunlight the' is ungrammatical; use 'watching the sunlight'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

Question 'lately' is usually paired with present perfect ('have you gone lately') or use 'recently' with simple past. To match simple past 'did', use 'recently'.

× I frequently visit the Han River Park because I think it is a perfect blend of urban energy and natural train quality.

✓ I frequently visit Han River Park because I think it is a perfect blend of urban energy and natural tranquility.

'Natural train quality' is meaningless; likely intended 'natural tranquility'. Drop 'the' before 'Han River Park' in general reference.

× So I usually visit the Han River to take a rest and also I can see a lot of people who having their own picnic or enjoying gentle bridge.

✓ So I usually visit the Han River to rest, and I can see a lot of people having picnics or enjoying gentle breezes.

'To take a rest' is wordy; 'to rest' is natural. 'Who having' lacks auxiliary; correct form is 'people having'. 'Enjoying gentle bridge' is wrong word choice; likely 'enjoying gentle breezes' or 'enjoying the bridges' depending on meaning.