Part 1
Examiner
Do you walk a lot?
Candidate
Yes, of course, every day, uh, I go to school by work and I think that is essential and, uh, for me, my routines and uh, tables that is use my food to walk everywhere and every time I think.
Examiner
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes I do. Why was child? I often was childish and unique. I often go out with my best friends to catch butterflies and uh, brand new fresh, uh, new fresh air. I think it's very intriguing.
Examiner
Why do people like to walk in parks?
Candidate
Most person want to keep fitness and that is more healthy for young people and also I think people jogging, hiking, swimming is necessary and comfortable for buddy.
Examiner
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
Candidate
No, I don't want firstly I'm a child so I think umm this things is very boring and uh I need to pay extra time do it and also I need to spend more time on homework and housework.
Examiner
Where did you go for a walk lately?
Candidate
I strong work near my pack and I think that is very comfortable. When I go eat I quit enjoying the fresh air. Also enjoying the beautiful butterflies with my best friends. I feel the beautiful atmosphere.
Do you walk a lot?
Score: 45.0Suggestion: 回答需要更直接且条理清楚。避免语法错误和冗余填充词(如 uh)。提供一到两句简洁的说明:说明你每天步行的频率、目的(上学/上班/锻炼)以及简单原因。注意主谓一致和正确词汇(例如 “go to school or work”, “part of my routine”)。
Example: Yes, I walk every day. I usually walk to school and around my neighborhood because it helps me stay healthy and is part of my daily routine.
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
Score: 40.0Suggestion: 回答时应使用正确时态(过去时)并直接回应问题。删去无关描述,给出具体活动和感受,使用连接词使句子连贯。例:说明你常和谁去、做什么、为什么喜欢。
Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went for walks with my friends to catch butterflies and explore the fields. I enjoyed the fresh air and the feeling of adventure.
Why do people like to walk in parks?
Score: 48.0Suggestion: 需要更清晰有逻辑的观点与理由。先给出主题句,然后列举具体原因并用连接词连接(for example, because, and). 注意词汇搭配(keep fit, healthy, relax)并避免提及无关活动。
Example: People like walking in parks because it helps them keep fit and relax. For example, parks offer fresh air, pleasant scenery and a safe place to exercise, which improves both physical and mental health.
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
Score: 35.0Suggestion: 问题是假设性的,应直接说明一个你想去散步的地点并给出理由。避免否定和与年龄无关的解释。用一到两句描述地点和原因,如风景、放松或探索。
Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside because I enjoy the sound of waves and the fresh air. It would be relaxing and a good break from my studies.
Where did you go for a walk lately?
Score: 42.0Suggestion: 回答应使用清晰的过去式并说明具体地点和时间(e.g. last weekend)。避免不连贯的句子,提供一到两条具体细节(谁在、做了什么、感受如何),并使用连接词提高连贯性。
Example: Last weekend I walked in the park near my workplace. I enjoyed the fresh air and the flowers, and I walked with my friends which made it a pleasant experience.
× Yes, of course, every day, uh, I go to school by work and I think that is essential and, uh, for me, my routines and uh, tables that is use my food to walk everywhere and every time I think.
✓ Yes, of course. Every day I walk to school for work, and I think that is essential. For me, my routine and habits make me walk everywhere and all the time.
原句中動詞使用不當與詞序混亂,例如“go to school by work”不合邏輯應改為“walk to school for work”;“tables that is use my food to walk”詞不達意,懷疑想表達“routine and habits”,應改為“my routine and habits make me walk”。建議:使用動名詞或簡單現在時描述習慣時,保持主語-動詞-賓語的清晰結構,避免直接翻譯。
× Yes I do. Why was child? I often was childish and unique. I often go out with my best friends to catch butterflies and uh, brand new fresh, uh, new fresh air. I think it's very intriguing.
✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I was often playful and curious. I often went out with my best friends to catch butterflies and enjoy the fresh air. I thought it was very delightful.
原句時態混用與時態錯誤:“Yes I do”詢問過去習慣應用過去式“Yes, I did”;“Why was child?”語序和用詞錯誤,應為“When I was a child”;“I often go out”描述過去習慣應用過去式“I often went out”;“new fresh”重複修飾,使用“fresh air”。建議:回憶過去時統一使用過去時態,注意英語中形容詞不要重複。
× Most person want to keep fitness and that is more healthy for young people and also I think people jogging, hiking, swimming is necessary and comfortable for buddy.
✓ Most people want to stay fit, and that is healthier for young people. I also think activities like jogging, hiking, and swimming are necessary and comfortable for the body.
原句名詞單複數與量詞使用錯誤:“Most person”應為“Most people”;“keep fitness”表達不自然,應為“stay fit”;“more healthy”比較級使用不當,應為“healthier”;“people jogging, hiking, swimming is”主語與動詞不一致,應使用複數“activities ... are”;“buddy”應為“body”。建議:注意可數名詞複數形式,使用正確的比較級,主語與動詞要一致。
× No, I don't want firstly I'm a child so I think umm this things is very boring and uh I need to pay extra time do it and also I need to spend more time on homework and housework.
✓ No, I wouldn't. First, I'm a child, so I think these things are very boring. I would need to spend extra time doing them, and I also need to spend more time on homework and housework.
原句時態與情態動詞使用不當:“No, I don't want”對假設情況應用條件式或情態動詞“wouldn't”;“this things is”數和指示代詞不一致,應為“these things are”;“pay extra time do it”動詞形式錯誤,應為“spend extra time doing them”。建議:表達假設或偏好時用would或wouldn't;注意指示代詞與名詞數的一致;動詞+時間表達常用“spend time doing”。
× I strong work near my pack and I think that is very comfortable. When I go eat I quit enjoying the fresh air. Also enjoying the beautiful butterflies with my best friends. I feel the beautiful atmosphere.
✓ I work near my park and I think it is very comfortable. When I go to eat, I still enjoy the fresh air and the beautiful butterflies with my best friends. I feel the pleasant atmosphere.
原句現在時與詞形錯誤:“I strong work”應為“I work”;“pack”拼寫錯誤,應為“park”;“When I go eat I quit enjoying”語意錯亂與動詞使用不當,應為“When I go to eat, I still enjoy”或“continue to enjoy”;“Also enjoying...”缺少主語和動詞,應合併為完整句子。建議:使用正確動詞形式和拼寫,保持句子完整,描述習慣或現在感受用簡單現在時。