Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “for half an hour,” “in the parking area”). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in the mornings. I usually walk for about half an hour with close friends because it helps us feel refreshed and talk about our plans for the day.

Suggestion: Provide a clear past tense topic sentence and two specific details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Correct grammar: use “When I was a child, I often went out to walk and play with friends,” and add one concrete memory or reason.

Example: When I was a child, I often went out for walks and to play with my friends. For example, we would race each other in the park every afternoon, which was fun and helped me stay very active.

Suggestion: Give a clear reason and support it with specific details. Reduce hesitations and incorrect phrases (say “parks” not “parking”; “calm and peaceful”; “people go there to relax or exercise”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Example: People like walking in parks because they are calm and peaceful. For example, parks have trees and quiet paths where people can relax, exercise, or talk with friends without traffic noise.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give one clear preferred location plus a specific reason. Use past example briefly and correct tense (“I went hiking there last year”). Avoid contradictions like “relaxing and tired” without explanation—explain both feelings.

Example: I would like to take a long walk in Dharan because it has large mountains and scenic hiking trails. For instance, I hiked there last year and found the walk relaxing even though it was physically tiring because of the great views.

Suggestion: Start with a clear past-tense sentence describing where you went and when, then add one specific detail about the experience. Correct grammar: “I went to the Kosi River with my cousins recently to get fresh air at night. It was windy and many people were there.” Avoid fillers.

Example: Recently I went for a walk at the Kosi River with my cousins to get some fresh air at night. It was quite windy, but many local residents were there enjoying the cool weather and the riverside view.

× Yes, uh, definitely I love to walk a lot on, especially in the morning.

✓ Yes, definitely I love to walk a lot, especially in the morning.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary here. Use no preposition before 'especially in the morning'. Remove extra filler words and commas for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I love to walk a lot, especially in the morning.'

× Uh, I wake up and get fresh and I love to go in walk for umm, uh, like half of hours with my close friends and we love to walk, especially in the parking area because it's very.

✓ I wake up and freshen up, and I like to go for a walk for about half an hour with my close friends; we especially like to walk in the parking area because it is peaceful.

Use present simple consistently for habitual actions. 'Get fresh' is unnatural — use 'freshen up'. 'Go in walk' should be 'go for a walk'. 'Half of hours' should be 'half an hour' or 'about half an hour'. 'Parking area' is fine, but 'because it's very.' is incomplete; replace with 'because it is peaceful.' Suggestion: keep verbs in present simple and fix collocations.

× Uh, I consider, uh, I used to go off on outside, uh, to have walk when I was child because uh, in child I love to walk a lot, especially, uh, my, uh, child like close friends, uh, I love to walk and play with them.

✓ I used to go outside to have walks when I was a child because as a child I loved to walk a lot, especially with my childhood friends; I liked to walk and play with them.

For past habitual actions, use 'used to' and past tense verbs. 'Go off on outside' is ungrammatical; use 'go outside'. 'When I was child' requires the article 'a child'. 'I love' should be past 'I loved'. 'Child like close friends' should be 'childhood friends'. Suggestion: use correct past tense forms and standard noun forms like 'childhood friends'.

× Like, especially running. It's very, uh, like competition in our friends, all car groups.

✓ We especially liked running. There was a lot of friendly competition among our group of friends.

'Competition in our friends, all car groups' is incorrect preposition and noun choice. Use 'competition among our group of friends' to show the participants. Also adjust tense to past to match context. Suggestion: use 'among' for groups and 'group of friends' for clarity.

× I consider, uh, walking in the parking, uh, feels very comfortable and very like, uh, calm.

✓ I think walking in the park feels very comfortable and calm.

'Parking' is likely a mistake for 'park'. 'Walking in the parking' is incorrect. Use 'I think' instead of 'I consider' for spoken opinion. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'park' and simple opinion expressions.

× Uh, because, uh, the residents in the parking on just uh, go walk by, uh, through silently, uh, because all people slop to silent and go running.

✓ Because people who live near the park just go for walks quietly; everyone keeps silent or goes running.

Many prepositions and word choices are incorrect: 'residents in the parking on' is wrong — use 'people who live near the park' or 'residents near the park'. 'Go walk by' should be 'go for walks' or 'walk by'. 'Slop to silent' is unclear; likely 'keep silent'. Suggestion: use clear prepositions ('near', 'for') and simple verbs ('go for walks', 'keep silent').

× So from my perspective, I would say I would love to go in the Dharan or for hiking or like it's very big like mountains Umm for for instance, last umm year week we had go there for hiking and it feels very relaxing and feel very tired. Be tired too.

✓ From my perspective, I would love to go to Dharan for hiking because the mountains are very big. For instance, last year we went there for hiking and it was very relaxing but also tiring.

'Go in the Dharan' should be 'go to Dharan'. Use 'for hiking' to indicate purpose. 'It's very big like mountains' should be 'the mountains are very big'. For past example use simple past 'last year we went'. 'It feels very relaxing and feel very tired' mixes tenses; use past 'it was relaxing but tiring'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with places and maintain consistent tense.

× Uh, lately, uh, I went to the, uh, like river, uh, it's very like big river in there, like it's called Kosi River.

✓ Lately, I went to a river called the Kosi River; it is a very large river.

Use article 'a river' or 'the Kosi River'. 'It's very like big river in there' is ungrammatical — use 'it is a very large river'. Keep tense consistent: 'I went' is past. Suggestion: use 'called the Kosi River' and 'large' instead of 'like big'.

× And I go walk with my cousins, siblings, uh, to get fresh air in the night.

✓ I went for a walk with my cousins and siblings to get fresh air at night.

Match tense to previous sentence: past 'I went'. Use 'go for a walk' not 'go walk'. Use 'at night' not 'in the night'. List punctuation: 'cousins and siblings'. Suggestion: use 'went for a walk' and 'at night'.

× It's, it's comes very, uh, like big weather and very windy.

✓ The weather was very severe and windy.

'It's comes very like big weather' is ungrammatical. Use 'the weather was' for past description. 'Big weather' is incorrect — use 'severe' or 'stormy' depending on meaning. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives for weather and match tense.

× Uh, many residents love to go there.

✓ Many residents like to go there.

'Many residents love to go there' is acceptable but 'love' may be too strong; 'like' is more natural in this context. Quantifier 'many' is correct. Suggestion: prefer 'like' for habitual outings; keep 'many residents' as correct quantifier.