Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense/use of pronouns, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. My school is very close to my house, so I usually walk there every day, which helps me get some exercise and fresh air.

Suggestion: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and provide clear reasons. Use linking words (because, so) and specific details instead of repeating words.

Example: No, I didn't. When I was a child I preferred staying indoors and playing video games because I found them more entertaining, so I rarely went for walks.

Suggestion: Organize ideas with linking words and use precise vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then give two clear reasons with brief explanations.

Example: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy attractive plants and flowers and breathe clean air; additionally, walking is good exercise and helps reduce stress.

Suggestion: Correct verb choices and reduce repetition. State the location clearly, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, and).

Example: I would like to take a long walk in Disneyland because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and varied music, and walking there would let me soak up the sights, sounds and smells of the park.

Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and clearer sequencing. Answer directly, give recent action in correct tense, then explain the reason with linking words and specific details.

Example: Recently I walked to school on foot. Because the weather has been very hot, I have started carrying an umbrella to block the sun.

× Since I their school nearby my house so I have to go to the school on foot.

✓ Since their school is nearby my house, I have to go to school on foot.

The sentence misuses the pronoun 'their' and omits the verb 'is' for location. Use 'their' only if referring to other people's school; likely 'the' or 'my' was intended. Also include the verb 'is' after the subject for the 'there be' construction. Suggestion: decide correct determiner (e.g., 'the' or 'my') and include the verb 'is' for clarity.

× So I usually walk to school.

✓ So I usually walk to school.

The sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep concise present simple for habitual action.

× No, I didn't because I when I was child I didn't like to work but I like, I like to play inside like dull place or playing video games.

✓ No, I didn't because when I was a child I didn't like to go to work; I liked to play indoors in dull places or play video games.

Errors include missing article 'a' before 'child', inconsistent tense ('didn't like' should match 'liked'), incorrect verb choice 'work' probably meant 'go to work' or 'work' isn't right for a child. Also awkward repetition and word order. Use past tense consistently for past habits and include articles where needed.

× So I didn't work so much.

✓ So I didn't work much.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'so much' is redundant after 'didn't' in this context; 'didn't work much' is more natural. Maintain past tense for a past habit.

× In my opinion they can see beautiful views of plants and flowers and they can feel the clear.

✓ In my opinion, they can see beautiful views of plants and flowers and breathe the clear air.

The phrase 'feel the clear' is incorrect; use 'breathe' with 'air' and include the noun 'air'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Use correct verb-preposition collocations: 'see views of' is fine; 'breathe the clear air' is natural.

× They can feel the clear air and working is a good exercise so they I think they do it.

✓ They can breathe the clear air, and walking is good exercise, so I think they do it.

Use 'walking' (verb + -ing) as a noun (gerund) to refer to the activity. Remove extra words and fix word order: 'so I think they do it' is clearer than the repeated 'they'. Ensure parallel structure when listing phrases.

× Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

✓ Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

This question sentence is correct. It uses the conditional modal 'would' appropriately with the past subjunctive 'had'. No change needed.

× I would like to work on Disneyland because I like going to there and I can enjoy many I can enjoy atmosphere at there and there are many kinds of smells and music, so I like I can I like listening on the.

✓ I would like to walk in Disneyland because I like going there; I can enjoy the atmosphere, smells, and music, and I like listening to it.

Multiple errors: 'work on Disneyland' should be 'walk in Disneyland' (wrong verb and preposition), 'going to there' should be 'going there', 'at there' is incorrect, and 'listening on the' should be 'listening to it' or 'listening to the music'. Fix verb choice, prepositions, article use ('the atmosphere'), and pronoun references.

× As I said, I've worked to school on my own foot recently.

✓ As I said, I've walked to school on my own feet recently.

Use the verb 'walked' (past participle of 'walk') with present perfect 'I've walked'. 'Worked to school' is incorrect. Also use 'on my own feet' or more naturally 'on foot' (singular) — 'on my own feet' emphasizes personal effort; better: 'I've walked to school on foot recently.'

× It is very hot this entry on the I can't stand it.

✓ It is very hot this summer; I can't stand it.

The phrase 'this entry on the' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'this summer' or 'these days'. Use a clear time expression and separate clauses with a semicolon or period. Keep present tense for current conditions.

× So I began to use umbrella recently to block some lights.

✓ So I began to use an umbrella recently to block some of the sunlight.

Add the indefinite article 'an' before 'umbrella'. 'Block some lights' is awkward; use 'block some of the sunlight' or 'block the sun' for natural English. 'Began to use' with 'recently' is acceptable, though 'I've begun using an umbrella recently' is another option.