Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “helps my digestion” → “helps my digestion” and “Also relax my feet” → “It also relaxes my feet”). Avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I walk regularly. For example, I usually take a 10-minute walk after dinner because it helps my digestion and relaxes my feet, which makes me feel comfortable before bed.

Suggestion: Remove repetition and use clearer linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details with cause and effect words (e.g., “which helped”). Fix small errors (duplicate word “This this,” awkward phrasing “enjoyed a lot”).

Example: Yes, I often walked as a child. I walked two to three kilometers each morning as part of my routine, which helped me stay fit and sleep better, so I really enjoyed it.

Suggestion: Improve vocabulary and sentence structure. Use precise words (e.g., “greenery,” “fresh air,” “social atmosphere”) and linking words to connect ideas. Avoid fillers like “uh” and repetition. Make sentences grammatically correct.

Example: People often walk in parks because the greenery and trees create fresh air and a pleasant setting. In addition, the social atmosphere — seeing other walkers — makes the experience friendly and enjoyable.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use correct collocations (e.g., “tree-lined road,” “well-maintained road,” “breathe fresh air”). Start with a clear conditional sentence and follow with one strong reason using linking words.

Example: If I had the chance, I would walk along a peaceful, tree-lined road with a well-maintained path because the quiet surroundings and fresh air would feel very relaxing.

Suggestion: Use precise descriptions and correct grammar (e.g., “well-maintained road,” avoid “so much fresh air”). Limit to two to three sentences and use linking words like “because” to show cause. Add a brief specific detail to enrich the answer.

Example: Yesterday I walked in a forest called Nallamalla. It was very relaxing because of the huge trees and a well-maintained path, and I felt refreshed by the clean, cool air.

× I usually take a walk for about 10 minutes after taking my dinner.

✓ I usually take a walk for about ten minutes after having my dinner.

Use of 'taking my dinner' is unnatural for present-tense habitual action; 'having my dinner' or 'after dinner' are correct. Also spell out small numbers in formal speech optionally; ensure verb choice fits habitual present tense.

× I enjoy walking because it helps me in my digestion.

✓ I enjoy walking because it helps my digestion.

'Helps me in my digestion' is awkward; use the collocation 'helps my digestion' which correctly links the verb to the noun phrase.

× Also relax my feet so I like walking.

✓ It also relaxes my feet, so I like walking.

Missing subject and incorrect verb form: 'relax my feet' needs a subject and third-person singular verb 'relaxes' to agree with 'it' (walking). Also add comma before 'so' joining clauses.

× Yes, I used to walk about two to three kilometers every day in the morning, which was part of my exercise routine.

✓ Yes, I used to walk about two or three kilometers every morning as part of my exercise routine.

Use 'two or three' instead of 'two to three' for count approximations in speech; 'every morning' is more natural than 'every day in the morning'; streamline relative clause to a clearer expression.

× This this helped me to stay fit and not gain extra weight.

✓ This helped me stay fit and avoid gaining extra weight.

Duplicate 'This' is an error. Use 'helped me stay' (omit 'to' after 'helped' in many structures) and 'avoid gaining' is a more natural parallel structure.

× Also to get a better sleep, so I enjoyed a lot.

✓ I also slept better, so I enjoyed it a lot.

Original is a fragment and has awkward ordering. Provide a full clause: 'I also slept better' and 'enjoyed it a lot' clarifies what was enjoyed.

× Usually people like to work in parks because the place is well maintained with greenery, trees surrounded which provides them a good air.

✓ Usually people like to walk in parks because the places are well maintained with greenery and trees surrounding them, which provides good air.

Multiple issues: 'work in parks' should be 'walk in parks' (content correction but also verb choice); 'trees surrounded' incorrect word order — use 'trees surrounding them'; subject-verb agreement 'places are' and 'provides' should agree with singular/plural; 'a good air' is incorrect article use — use 'good air' or 'fresh air'.

× Also many other people come to the park which makes them uh to have a more friendly vibe.

✓ Also, many other people come to the park, which gives it a friendlier atmosphere.

Pronoun reference and structure: 'which makes them to have' is incorrect. Use 'gives it a friendlier atmosphere' or 'creates a friendlier vibe'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× So usually people like to walk in parks.

✓ So usually people like walking in parks.

'Like to walk' is acceptable, but 'like walking' is a smoother habitual present construction; both are grammatically correct; this suggestion prefers natural collocation.

× If I had the chance I would I would like to take a long walk on a peaceful Rd. which has trees surrounded and a well maintained Rd.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk on a peaceful road lined with trees and with a well-maintained surface.

Redundant 'I would I would' must be fixed. Abbreviations 'Rd.' are informal; use 'road'. 'Trees surrounded' incorrect order — use 'lined with trees'. Use hyphen in 'well-maintained'. Add comma after conditional clause.

× This makes me feel very fresh and relaxing.

✓ This makes me feel very refreshed and relaxed.

'Fresh' and 'relaxing' are wrong forms for describing personal feelings. Use past participial/adjective forms 'refreshed' and 'relaxed' to describe states resulting from the walk.

× Also give me a good fresh air so I would like it.

✓ It also gives me fresh air, so I would like that.

'A good fresh air' misuses the article and adjective order; 'fresh air' is uncountable and needs no article. Add subject 'It' and change 'so I would like it' to 'so I would like that' or 'so I enjoy it'.

× Yesterday I took a walk in a forest area which was called Nallamalla.

✓ Yesterday I took a walk in a forest area called Nallamalla.

'Which was called' is wordy; reduce to 'called Nallamalla' for natural past-tense description.

× I enjoyed it a lot and it was relaxing because the forest had huge trees and a good maintained Rd.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot and it was relaxing because the forest had huge trees and a well-maintained road.

'A good maintained Rd.' is incorrect adjective order and article use. Use 'well-maintained' (hyphen) and 'road' spelled out. Maintain past-tense consistency.

× So this made me feel very fresh and gave me so much fresh air.

✓ So this made me feel very refreshed and gave me a lot of fresh air.

'Feel very fresh' is less natural than 'feel refreshed'. 'Gave me so much fresh air' — use 'a lot of fresh air' for natural quantification. Maintain past tense consistency.