Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on grammar (use 'walk' not 'work'), make a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add a specific routine or frequency and one reason with a connecting word.

Example: Yes, I walk every day for about 30 minutes because it improves my health and helps me reduce stress. For example, I walk to a nearby park after work three times a week to stay fit and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer about childhood, use past tense consistently, avoid contradictions and repetition. Provide one clear reason and a brief example using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: No, I didn't go outside to walk very often when I was a child because I was shy and preferred reading at home. As a result, I usually spent weekends indoors playing with toys or reading books.

Suggestion: Start with a topic sentence, use linking words ('firstly', 'also'), and be specific about benefits (fresh air, scenery, socializing). Avoid unclear phrases like 'working helps me to.'

Example: People like to walk in parks mainly because of the fresh air and pleasant scenery, especially during different seasons. Also, parks provide a relaxed space for socializing, so friends and families often meet there to chat while walking.

Suggestion: Give a concise, grammatically correct answer. Explain one clear reason with a relevant detail (scenery, climate, trails). Avoid irrelevant mentions (cost) unless explained; finish your sentence.

Example: I would like to take a long walk in Hawaii because of its beautiful coastal trails and warm climate. For example, walking along the Na Pali Coast would offer stunning ocean views and peaceful surroundings.

Suggestion: Use correct article use ('to Bondi Beach' without 'a') and past tense clearly. Keep it to 2–3 sentences, give a specific activity and a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: Lately I went to Bondi Beach in Australia because it is famous for its golden sand and surf. Since it was summer, I enjoyed watching the waves and walking along the shoreline.

× Yes, I work a lot because it's improve my health a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because it improves my health a lot.

The student used 'work' and 'it's improve' incorrectly. The question asks about walking, so use 'walk' not 'work'. 'It improves' requires third person singular present ('improves') rather than base form after 'it'. Use consistent present simple for habitual action.

× I think working is not too hard to start as a daily exercise, so I like walking to make my body fit.

✓ I think walking is not too hard to start as a daily exercise, so I like walking to keep my body fit.

The student mixed 'working' and 'walking'. Context requires 'walking'. Also 'make my body fit' is awkward; use 'keep my body fit' or 'keep fit'. Maintain present simple for general statements.

× When I was that tired, I didn't often go out to work because I don't like I didn't like going out or hang out with my friends, so I preferred to stay at home and I liked.

✓ When I was that tired, I didn't often go out because I didn't like going out or hanging out with my friends, so I preferred to stay at home.

Mixed tenses and duplicated negatives: use past simple consistently ('didn't often go out', 'didn't like'). Use gerund 'going out' and 'hanging out'. Remove redundant and incomplete clauses ('and I liked'). Ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel gerund forms.

× I think this is because they enjoy the seasonal nature in the park and also I think another reason is that they can communicate easily with others when they're working.

✓ I think this is because they enjoy the seasonal nature in the park, and another reason is that they can communicate easily with others when they're walking.

Pronoun 'they' is fine but 'working' is incorrect in this context; the topic is walking. Replace with 'walking'. Also combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for correct conjunction use and smoother sentence flow.

× Working helps me to.

✓ Walking helps me to relax and stay healthy.

Original sentence is incomplete. Provide a full clause showing what walking helps the speaker do. Use infinitive 'to' followed by verbs ('relax and stay healthy') or remove 'to' and use a gerund/object.

× If I had a chance, I would like to try walking in Hawaii because it Hawaii is the best place to visit for couples and also it is very expensive to travel to Hawaii that's why I.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk in Hawaii because Hawaii is a wonderful place to visit for couples, but it is very expensive to travel there.

Remove duplicated words ('it Hawaii'), make conditional phrasing natural ('have the chance'). Replace awkward fragments with complete clauses. Use 'there' to avoid repeating 'to Hawaii'. Ensure sentence ends with a complete thought rather than 'that's why I'.

× Lately I went to a Bondi Beach in Australia because Bondi Beach is known as the best beach in Sydney and also now it's in summer in Sydney so I enjoy watching seas enjoy.

✓ Lately I went to Bondi Beach in Australia because Bondi Beach is known as one of the best beaches in Sydney, and now it is summer in Sydney so I enjoyed the sea.

Do not use the article 'a' before proper place names like 'Bondi Beach'. Use 'one of the best beaches' rather than 'the best beach' unless certain. Maintain past tense for a recent trip ('I went', 'I enjoyed'). 'Watching seas enjoy' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoyed the sea' or 'enjoyed the scenery'.