Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural and relevant, but slightly repetitive ("I often walk" / "I almost walk every day") and a bit wordy. Condense the response into a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Also correct minor phrasing ("when my mind is crowded" → "when I need to clear my mind").

Example: Yes, I walk almost every day. For example, I usually walk 20–30 minutes to clear my mind when I feel stressed, and sometimes I walk to avoid taking public transit because it’s more convenient.

Suggestion: Good structure: direct answer then supporting details. Reduce fillers ("uh") and use a linking word to connect ideas. Be slightly more specific (how often, what you saw or did) to enrich content.

Example: Yes, I did. We often took evening walks on weekends after dinner, and we used the time to explore our neighborhood streets and parks, which helped me learn about local shops and meet neighbors.

Suggestion: The answer is logical but a little repetitive and contains small grammar issues (use articles and plural forms). Use linking words and combine reasons into one coherent sentence, then give a specific example or effect to support your points.

Example: People like walking in parks because it’s an easy form of exercise that requires no equipment, and moreover parks are safer and have fresher air than busy streets; for instance, I can jog in a park without worrying about traffic or pollution.

Suggestion: Good descriptive content but contain word choice errors ("trekking room" likely "trekking route"), and slightly long sentences. Be concise, correct key vocabulary, and add a linking phrase for clarity. Mention a personal reason to strengthen response.

Example: I would love to walk along Ola Road on Teju Island because it’s a famous coastal trekking route with stunning sea views. Besides being well paved and safe, it would be relaxing to walk there and enjoy the ocean breeze.

Suggestion: Clear and natural answer with good details. Slight repetition in "I went" and run-on sentence toward the end. Use a linking word to join ideas and vary sentence openings. Add one specific sensory detail to make it more vivid.

Example: Recently I walked in Nuxton Park in Chongrugu with my boyfriend; we strolled for about half an hour after dinner. The park is famous for its night view—looking over the lit city from the hill felt romantic and memorable.

× Yes, I often walk.

✓ Yes, I often walk.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. It uses simple present correctly to describe habitual action.

× I almost walk every day.

✓ I almost walk every day.

No correction needed; 'almost' with 'every day' is acceptable to indicate frequency.

× Sometimes I walk 20 to 30 minutes to clear my mind when my mind is crowded, and other times I simply walk because I don't want to use the public transit at the time.

✓ Sometimes I walk for 20 to 30 minutes to clear my mind when it feels crowded, and other times I simply walk because I don't want to use public transit.

Added preposition 'for' with duration (required for time expressions), replaced repetitive 'my mind' with 'it' for naturalness, removed 'the' before 'public transit' (uncountable noun used generally), and removed redundant phrase 'at the time'. These changes improve grammar and fluency.

× Yes, I did quite regularly with my family on weekend evenings in particular, uh, we used to take a stroll after we had dinner outside or we just went out for a walk to explore our neighborhoods.

✓ Yes, I did. Quite regularly with my family on weekend evenings in particular; we used to take a stroll after we had dinner outside, or we would go out for a walk to explore our neighborhood.

Split run-on into two sentences and added punctuation. 'Did quite regularly' needs a pause or completion; 'we just went out' changed to 'we would go out' to match habitual past ('used to' and 'would'). 'Neighborhoods' changed to singular 'neighborhood' for consistency when speaking of their local area. These fixes address sentence structure and past-tense habitual expression.

× Well the main reason that comes to mind is that walking is the simplest form of exercise without any equipment.

✓ Well, the main reason that comes to mind is that walking is the simplest form of exercise and requires no equipment.

Added comma after 'Well' for natural speech pause and rephrased 'without any equipment' to 'requires no equipment' to improve clarity and grammatical naturalness.

× And another reason is the park is safer place to walk than walking near busy roads and park has fresher air, no traffic.

✓ Another reason is that parks are safer places to walk than busy roads, and parks have fresher air and no traffic.

Changed 'the park is safer place' to plural 'parks are safer places' to generalize the statement. Added 'that' after 'is' for clause clarity, pluralized 'place' and 'park' to agree with subject, and connected ideas with 'and'. This fixes article and number agreement and improves parallelism.

× I've always wanted to go to Teju Island since it has one of the most famous trekking room called Ola Rd.

✓ I've always wanted to go to Teju Island since it has one of the most famous trekking routes called Ola Rd.

Changed 'trekking room' to 'trekking route' because 'route' is the correct noun for a trail or path. Also added plural 'routes' with 'one of the' and made noun agree with that structure.

× It's basically a coastal route with amazing sea views all along the way and it's well paved and safe so I think I could take a stroll without worrying about traffic or the lights.

✓ It's basically a coastal route with amazing sea views all along the way, and it's well paved and safe, so I think I could take a stroll without worrying about traffic or the lights.

Added commas to separate clauses for readability. Sentence is otherwise grammatically correct; punctuation improves clarity.

× I went to Nuxton Park in Chongrugu.

✓ I went to Nuxton Park in Chongrugu.

No correction needed; simple past correctly used to describe a completed action.

× I went there with my boyfriend and we took a walk for about half an hour after dinner.

✓ I went there with my boyfriend, and we took a walk for about half an hour after dinner.

Added a comma before 'and' to separate coordinated clauses. Tense and verb forms are correct.

× The place is so famous for the amazing night view, you can see the whole city from the hill and it has a romantic atmosphere, so I really loved it.

✓ The place is famous for its amazing night views; you can see the whole city from the hill, and it has a romantic atmosphere, so I really loved it.

Changed comma splice to semicolon to join two independent clauses correctly, changed 'the amazing night view' to 'its amazing night views' for natural phrasing, and added commas to separate clauses. These changes fix sentence structure and improve cohesion.